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Draxonos135


Hello everyone, Draxonos135 here. I mostly focus on Equestria Girls fanfics, and the one thing I like to do most is bring some kind of positive emotion to my readers.

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Timberwolves are well-known in the city of Equestria for many things: Their ability to combine into a stronger, united being, their ferocious nature if angered, and their existence being proof of the Everfree Forest's dangerous nature.

Diamond Tiara, however, certainly doesn't get that impression with the tiny, defenseless creature she comes across...

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This is a very cute idea for a fic. I did like it, and I did Like it, but there are some criticisms I feel I have to address, presented here in descending order of importance:

1) It's really not much more than an "idea for a fic". There's an arc, but it all happens too fast, all piled on top of itself; she finds the pup, then immediately takes it in, then immediately grows attached, is then immediately found out, and then immediately has to let it go. There needs to be more development, more to get the reader involved. Maybe another chapter or two.

2) The idea that Diamond Tiara lives in a town right next to a forest full of wild monsters, yet doesn't seem aware even of the existence of said forest's most clear and present danger, truly beggars the imagination. Perhaps if this were a younger Diamond, pre-school (where such lessons would undoubtedly be a high priority), perhaps only just moved into Ponyville, then it would be more believable, I think.

3) What do timberwolves use for tongues, anyway?

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I love the fact that the first reviewer to seriously point out the flaws in my writing, has a realistic pony cosplay avatar picture. I don't know why, but the juxtaposition slays me.

Thanks a lot for the criticism. I did have the same idea when I wrote the story, but most of the ideas of how it could've been better only came after it was written.

Who knows, maybe someday I'll try to make this premise justice with another story?

A nice little potboiler of a story. Thanks for writing. :rainbowkiss:

That picture is so cute :pinkiehappy:

Will this story have a sequel with Diamond and Woody reuniting?

Looks like timberwolves aren’t as wild as they thought.

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