"The clever are not so much looking for loneliness as they avoid the fuss created by fools." - Arthur Schopenhauer
You're the next generation of harmony, the last beacon of hope for Equestria. You're quite simply called the Hero. The hero that will save this land from evil, a new evil that's greater than anything anypony could ever possibly comprehend. A new darkness is nigh, but the balance of both good and evil must be maintained. This is your story, you're the next to be as the savior that Equestria needs.
May the blessings of Faustia be ever in your favor...
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You know. If you're going to use someone elses artwork, and apparently without asking them if you could, you could at least give credit to the artist who made it.
Here's their Deviantart profile. https://www.deviantart.com/moonrises. I know the cover art belongs to them, because I went to make sure.
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All images I use come from derpibooru. I think it's clear to see who disliked this. Not because the story itself is trash, because I made sure to make it good, but because of some random image chosen that I felt fit the cover for said story. Sorry pumpkin, but I'm not dumb.
Furthermore. Why get mad at me for something that I see everyone doing nowadays?
Am I stupid? Do I look stupid to you guys? Don't answer that. Please do not treat me like I'm a gullible fool who is incapable of understanding simple cues and rash decisions. I view that as an insult to my intelligence, and that makes me very angry.
Is this a Breath of the Wild reference?
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Nope. Station of Awakening: Kingdom Hearts.
2 dislikes? Normally dislikes shouldn't matter. But this tells me one thing: that People are incapable of recognizing true story quality when they see it. That's nice to know.
Now one of the likes became a dislike? If you didn't like the story then why did you even leave a like? That doesn't make any sense. There's this marvelous thing in the world called constructive criticism, you guys might want to try using that sometime. It's designed to help people to improve on their work.
Absolutely zero communication effort being given.
At least, would it be too much to ask to request some feedback to improve? Surely this story isn't worth so many dislikes. I put work into this, you know. You see, this is why I disable ratings. This is exactly why I do that. And yet everybody asks me why. I consider the simple question of why to be a stupid one at this point.
When I say that spamming a bunch of dislikes can affect one's own motivation. Don't tell me that it's your choice to continue or not. I get that from so many people. I meant that as exactly as it sounds. It's not so motivating to keep working if nobody appreciates your work. I would like to think that was whole point to making stories on this site.
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Dude. I think you're being way too sensitve about this. I get dislikes all the time on my stuff, and most of those don't even bother to say why. Some do, but not all of them. I could care less.
If everyone was so thinned skin to care about what the haters thought of their stuff, this site would be a barren desert.
Looking at your other comments, you're expecting people to say this is the greatest thing to have ever been written on this site. It's not. The idea isn't new either.
Thinking your stories, or just one of them, is the greatest story ever told, is a bad way to write. Most people, even those who like the story, won't say it's the greatest story ever.
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You're missing the point. I was asking for room to improve. But I suppose that request was a bit beyond their capabilities. If they were ever capable of doing so, this has yet to be seen by me.
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Listen, I’ve been reading this story and my first thoughts were that this was an interesting concept but I realized why people put dislikes across each chapter. First thing to address is the beginning was rather a copy and paste of Kingdom Hearts and just didn’t seem to creative I guess. You did a better job on chapter 2 and onward while it still felt very similar to KH, there were some differences like the fact that there’s a chief watching over the village and so forth. But here’s another thing I realized that might’ve lead to some issues.....it’s you yourself. No offense but, what’s with this sudden anger when you get a single dislike? Not everyone is entitled to speak out about why they don’t like a story or something. Just accept that and move on, you don’t need to rant about it in the comments. Chill out and keep going despite the dislikes you get. So far, I think this story can go far, but that depends on how you continue the plot, so I say keep up your work and just chill out when you get a dislike, it happens to every story and is expected. Looking forward to seeing the next chapter.
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At least you actually gave criticism. I suppose I'll have to eat my words then.
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"First thing to address is the beginning was rather a copy and paste of Kingdom Hearts."
That's exactly what I was aiming for. Sounds about right considering that this story is heavily inspired from Kingdom Hearts. Thank you for noticing.
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Also most people that disliked my story were usually ones that picked a beef with me at some point. I never did anything to piss them off. Hell, I don't even know who they're. And if I disable my ratings which is something I'm tempted to do now. Just you watch, they'll find something else to dislike, they always do. If they can't dislike the story itself which has absolutely nothing to do with my attitude in any capacity, they'll dislike the comments on said story. Yes, I've seen this song and dance before, many times.
And I'm not a fan of the pokey-pokey, neither.
Sorry, but I was forced to take down ratings. Since nobody can appreciate true quality, I suppose that maybe there's not much point in trying anymore. And if you don't like it, then don't read it. Honestly, I've no idea why that's so difficult for people to comprehend. People are so ungrateful of what they have.
Most don't even know the value of work. Yet, they would dare to chastise you for yours not being very good. Maybe it's their attempt at compensating for a lack of something in their lives, maybe it's a neighborly pass time to do for no real reason other than to piss other people off. Maybe it's another reason, entirely. Who knows. The disliking and trolling is getting so bad that I've even considered the possibility of disabling my comments as well. Don't push me, people.
If you guys think I'm joking then go ahead and test me, see what happens. I'll delete and then disable both ratings and comments on all stories thus far and thus to be, permanently. And there shall be no reversing that. I don't bullshit around, I get to the point. Even having this, work that costs them literally nothing to have and even that's not good enough for them.
That's like being a beggar at a church that volunteers to make food for free and yet you would still push your plate away. A plate that mind you not only costs you nothing, but would fill you up for the night. If there's no finer example of ungratefulness than that, then I don't know what else could be.
And for those trolls that want to try to "educate" me on how an act of pure altruism is different from willingly writing a story, please, don't bother. Then you're not getting the metaphor. It's a matter of principle. Both activities have one thing in common; the person doing both isn't obligated in any capacity to do so. They just do it to be awesome people.
Hmm... Okay, nobody mentions this story is clearly second person, without the second person tag... Im surprised this nobody has mentioned that in all the time this story has been published. I, personally am not a fan of the second person, but I just couldn't help but notice the missing tag when I read the description.
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Hero, although done in second person is supposed to be you as the reader. The gender has been deliberately made to be ambiguous. It was designed around the core concept of what you would have most likely have done should this series be expanded upon.
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Based on what the reader would have most likely done? Sounds familiar
Have you thought about making a Choose Your Own Adventure Story? It's not often I find those. It would character allow readers to be more interactive with the story and would provide more accurate results on what a general audience would do as you would have a unbias source from around the world.
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How would I go about doing that?
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Stories like Voyage if the Equinox and Mass Effect: Element of Kindness use similar systems with a link to a poll at the end of the chapter. It's not often I read CYoA stories, so you might have to ask around. There're also stories like Exploring the Castle, which have links at the end of the chapter to premade chapters, basically like the Henry stickmin games
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The problem with that is that what one could suggest, might not actually be good for everyone else. Too many hands in the pot spoil the soup. This story was made to be heavily story-driven. There's going to be much of that you'll notice through reading the story. I went with what would have made the most sense to do. Admittedly, a rather linear way of going about it, but at least I have more control over the story and its progression.
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True, but it could also be argued that you can't please everyone. With this system, it's the majority that will most likely enjoy the story. I thought of trying it before, but I decided not to because of potential problems if people didn't vote, which is why I decided to make a different story before hand.
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And there have been some very ridiculous ideas and suggestions that I've seen come from this site, when it comes to making a serious story. While suggestions should always be welcomed with open arms, it shouldn't do that at the expense to the story itself. Adding things in there that quite frankly would make no sense to do. I really wanted to exercise the personality of every canon character that Hero will interact with.
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Sure, I'll admit that there can be some rather odd ideas. But in the end, the options on what the readers can vote for are up to you which grants you some limited control of where to lead the story.
The problem of the story being inconsistency isn't really a problem. In the Mass Effect CYoA, there were a couple of options. Sometimes there was a romance option, renegade, and other things. I found that the story was kept pretty consistent in way of votes. There weren't really deviations such as when the reader's votes choose a romance option when with a specific character, usually in other chapters with that character they would keep choosing the romance option. The readers pretty much had a general agreement, and inconsistencies are kinda hard to find.
Again, I'm not quite sure on how one would make a CYoA work, so you'd have to ask around. Of course, it's your choice whether to make a CYoA or not.
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I hear you. But Hasbro never made anybody ask for what they wanted. They just did it. Why spoil the surprise? If everyone voted on it, then wouldn't they already know what happens next?
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Idk, for me, whether or not something was spoiled or not, I can still enjoy the story. For example, the story I'm currently making isn't for people to read and enjoy. I'm making that story for myself. I have plans for the story, and I know what will happen, but I enjoy writing it nonetheless. I could go in a create plans going from start to end for the entire story, and I'd still enjoy making it.
Of course, I never made grand plans. As they say, no plan survives the first contact, so I find myself changing and changing the story from original plans to what I want. Just knowing what will happen is kinda dull, but imagining it actually happen as I write it, I find it similar as if I was reading someone else's story.
I may know what happens, but unless Im at the moment writing it, it doesn't compare to having it in my mind thinking and imagining what the characters themselves feel. I think of how it affects the story and the character, and then I act accordingly to what I think will happen. Of course, that plan also fails and I find myself changing the plans once again.
You could think, "okay in this conversation, Character A and B talk, and at the end, they end up in an adorable pillow fight." Again, it's not much compared to reading/writing along imagining the characters. The surprise for me as I write it may have been spoiled, but I still enjoyed writing it.
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Morion didn't get to tell the whole story, but the request that you credit the artist comes from the artist herself.
More here: https://www.deviantart.com/comments/1/832985021/4873774755
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Like I said, everything I got was from Derpibooru, any other sources I knew nothing about.
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Fear not, I do not accuse you, but rather I figured you'd best know the whole story, if you didn't already.
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I hear you. Thanks for letting me know. This wasn't meant for malicious purposes.
I reenabled ratings. I hope I don't regret this decision.
To reduce confusion and to sound less repetitive, I'm finally deciding a gender to Hero. A boy. As Hero is typically a male's name.
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Are there really people out there named Hero? Don't you mean Hiro?
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Well, there's Hero from Dragon Quest.
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What are the characteristics of true quality? Where did you learn about them from?
To first come to the conclusion that you don't like something, is to get to know it in some degree. Then, you leave a rating on what you made contact with. Some people just feel it, others are bothered by things that can be pointed out, same with a good review. Most importantly, the rating tag expresses the genuine impression, and as I have mentioned, feelings, towards your story. In some way, that dislike to like bar, becomes part of your story's identity.
What is important, is to always distinguish the author from the work, don't take the dislikes personally. You could be a holocaust denier, or I dunno, a rapist or something, and this doesn't make your story or arguments in it or the message any less true than if you were not that person. You can have a random thought or concept, make a story about it just because you found it interesting, but people nonetheless will say that it reflects your views, which is, I will repeat myself, stupid.
For clearance: Yes, it might sway away people, just like a bad review on google may destroy a business. I understand your frustration. Especially when you meet with people who say "do this, or I'll dislike your story."
Some ppl may have just given you a dislike right away, which I agree is stupid, but that is a consequence of allowing ratings, the same with getting likes the same way, it is stupid.
Point being, that if you allow and accept and want likes without explaining why you received one, you should also accept dislikes without an explanation.
Plus, as 10492608 said:
I don't understand, what is it, that the people are ungrateful of.
For what? What is the value of work you speak of? Should be set by someone or something [an institution or body]? Isn't the value of work [for something] dictated by the market? What if your work is worth little?
Is copying (don't even try and argue, you agreed with that response that it is) something people should be grateful of? Receiving the same thing? Maybe worse/better than the original?
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My series is inspired by Kingdom Hearts, but tweaked so that its still unique. Just because a story is inspired, doesn't automatically mean that- by absolute guarantee it's plagiarism. There're quite a few details that're different between both Hero and Sora for example.
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And as far as hard work is concerned, isn't it obvious? My writing, of course. Getting everything just right isn't easy, you know. But I still try to do my best. No, I'm not going to quit, cause quitters are never winners. Yeah, it's irritating that people like to dislike for no real reason, but I'm kinda used to that by now though. And quality? Yes, I like to uphold a standard for good quality in my work as an author on this site.
Not to come off as arrogant or rude, even though you're honestly very polite, but frank about your criticism on me (I really appreciate your civility). I do know what it is that you're trying to do. You're cherry picking small fractions of previous comments I made a long time ago to make judgements about me without really knowing much about me.
Yes. Those that dislike for no reason are ungrateful and don't know know the value of hard work. When these stores are basically handed over to them on a well-garnished platter, with literally zero effort on their part. Where else do you think these stories come from? The hard work of other people, of course, not just me.
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Ok. Doesn't the appearance of close familiarity to Kingdom Hearts, which made 10492608 use the word "copy" show us, that even if the difference is there, that makes it not plagiarism, its not great and puts the story at the border of being one? This in turn, may raise suspicions, regarding, for example: the true quality of the story, or doubt that you have worked hard on it? Wouldn't it be better to change it to avoid these comparisons in the future?
Yes, absolutely it is hard and I understand that matching things with the original that inspired you or tweaking it that it makes sense is hard. I've done so too, for example when writing a story about a character in a real-life city, I took a tour through google maps and basically tried to get every shop and detail right.
It's especially hard, when it's LOTR, because if you even dare to make one step wrong, the fans will eat you.
Why should it be obvious? What makes it obvious? If for some people it isn't obvious, what then? Is it their fault or can it be your fault? If theirs, why? If yours, why?
As to your writing, it's the same as anyone else's who created a story here. The story format just has a lot of dialogue, but it's not something bad.
I didn't insinuate anything that would bring you to this decision, so I don't know why you write about his.
That's nice! If so, then there is no more reason to continue this.
As to you upholding the quality, how can you be sure that you are really doing it? You should be able to point out arguments in defense of that, but in the end, nemo iudex in causa sue - nobody is a judge in his own case. You can't be sure of anything and write about it with such (I'm sorry if this will offend you) boldness unless you really do have things to back it up, then you can use any adjective and it won't be boasting.
People can make quality stuff without much work or vice versa.
I did make judgments about you, that's true, I had a few presuppositions about you. But, did I act upon them, treat them as truth and talk to you as if I already knew something about you? No.
If I did, I would act upon them and say that you are too prideful, that you are very sensitive, that you have too much emotional IQ, and that you're blinded if not in denial etc.
I didn't do it, I just looked over the story, saw your responses, and raised a few questions. Depending on how'd you answer them, I'd base somewhat on the idea with whom I am talking.
When I first saw the story and wanted to know why it is so poorly rated, I thought that it's the issue of language. It wasn't this case. So then I moved down further, reading a chapter after a chapter, ending at number five and choosing one from the middle to briefly look over. There was nothing controversial about them. So, what else was there?
I came to the conclusion, that maybe I don't see the wrongs in the story. Others can, I'm not a native English speaker, so, I looked at the comments and based my questions on that solely.
I asked questions, because I wasn't sure. Maybe it did help you, maybe not. I don't know.
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Then where am I going wrong with my work? This doesn't make any sense. I made sure to only make very few baseline references to Kingdom Hearts inspiration. I would estimate that about 20% of this is Kingdom hearts and 80% is my own imagination. But it would seem that nobody has noticed this through the many chapters that I've written.
The dynamic that I'm going for is very different. I'm using some concepts and ideas and changing those so then it fits within the story of MLP. If anybody has ever paid any attention to it and not just downvote out of blinded spite, they'd know that it is not a rip-off.
So then, what's with all the unnecessary hate? I'll never understand other humans for as long as I'll live on this planet. And I'm 27 right now. I've got a long way to go yet.
I'm going to be 110% honest with you as I'll assume that you'll see this very soon; this is not a bad story. Definitely not a five star or best ever written, but there're many that're much worse than this one, you can be sure of that.
You know, I'm actually kinda surprised that our conversation wasn't divebombed by dislikes by now. They usually are.
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Let me ask you this, It may be annoying for me to constantly use questions, (you could accuse me of copying Socratese's method) but, try and yourself think of the reasons it is thrown at you. Is it really hate? Or more importantly, since what point, it was hate?
I think, that because you appeared fixated on the story and why it is so badly rated etc. already fed up with previous experience (I looked at your other stories and the comments) you came off unappealing, bad, and rude.
And people don't know you, but you appear to them like this, and they react to it, and feeling negativity from you, and knowing this is your story, in order to respond the same way, they disliked your story.
To be mean, because you were to them, (I think at least, that's the case, I can totally be wrong, it's a suggestion) was their response. It didn't do the story any justice, I agree
Meaning, that you should try and ignore it, but I know it's impossible to do it totally. Just go forward, as you said yourself.
Humans, you speak like an alien, do you feel like an alien?
Have you always had this problem?
Maybe you're highly intelligent or have Asperger (a lighter variation [for lack of a better word] of Autism) or you're just unlucky. In the worst case, there might something wrong with you, as a person. I'm not saying it's like that, btw.
This sounds way better than talking about true quality and hard work put into this and ungratefulness others show when clearly you are referring to your own works.
To leave this topic be, I'll just add one more thing:
It's a basic story, on the technical side, rather normal, nothing special. The topic and themes I saw until chapter 5 seem ok, not something I personally like. I won't continue reading it, because it's not my thing, but it isn't bad, it's fine.
Chapter 2:
You got yourself a typoo here, and probably a few more down the road, but that's normal.
How did he vanish? Like in an instant, without any effects? This may seem bland for some, for me it does, but if you wanted it to be like that and to imagine it like that, then ok, I can buy it.
Anyhow, it was nice talking and all. Good luck. I can do nothing more.
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Really? I've never heard of that game in the series. What Worlds and Heartless bosses are in it?
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It's the very beginning where you're in Sora's Heart. Nearly every game has this to some degree.
You know, this story is really honestly not that bad. Do you guys really believe that it's worth so much scorn? And if so, why? It's not plagiarized, borrowed ideas, sure. But I'm using an original story. Where could I be going so wrong? To have more dislikes than likes, I clearly must be doing something wrong within the story itself.
I'm serious. Why is this story getting so much hate? For what reason? Is that really necessary? Nobody owes me an explanation, I know. But it would be nice to have some clarity.
It just goes to sadly show that people really don't appreciate hard work and effort into stories anymore. Such a shame. If they think that this'll make me quit, then they've got another thing coming.
This is why the best potential is usually never realized, because many people who look down on you and smite your work likely without even giving it a fair read. This is what causes potentially good authors to want to quit entirely. And I do not blame them.
This reminds me of that episode with Rarity and Applejack when Applejack insulted Rarity's work so she set out to make a point by saying that it's better to be more considerate of others.
https://youtu.be/aOJqIgRR0Hk This scene to be more exact.
If they can look past their biased and enigmatic hatred of me and see this story for what it's become and the improvements made, they'd see that it is pretty damn good. I have no idea why it getting lambasted so much with dislikes; humans make no god damned sense to me.
There. Now I've disabled the ratings; now there's no way they can abuse the dislike button for literally no reason at all. And I'll assume it's for no reason if nobody steps up to tell me where I could possibly have gone wrong this time. What else could I assume?
Oh, but my pervy stories like that Ultimate Usurpation of Canterlot got likes through the roof; I think I might know why. These guys are a bunch of horn dogs; they're more into perversion than a serious story designed to be taken seriously.
Their actions deliver a poignant statement to me, making what they want more abundantly clear.