Mikashaia, a fan of Mobile Suit Gundam and My Little Pony, went to their first BuildCon with a repainted gunpla (or Gundam Plastic Model) of the Gundam Barbatos Lupus Rex. While there, he found out that the main weapon of the gunpla had been damaged when he got there. As he was looking around the stands, he came across a person dressed as Amuro Ray selling custom weapons. He found a pair of swords that went perfectly with his gunpla. He purchased them and then got knocked unconscious by some unknown force and woke up in Canterlot Castle.
Thought this up when noticing that none of the stories that are based around Gundam involved a human turning into a gunpla. So I thought why not?
First story on this site so no saying that this sucks or anything like that. If you don't like it, that's fine by me. Constructive criticism is allowed.
For the cover: replace the blue with green and change the yellow on the "tail" to green as well. I added in the closeup of the face to show green as normal and red as the rage filled eyes.
Partially based on Gundam Iron Blooded Orphans.
This is a displaced story. If you don't like that kind of thing, you can just leave this alone. No planned crossovers yet.
There will be a time jump from the prologue to chapter 1.
(Alt. Universe tag explanations: Takes place during the show. Sunset Shimmer lives in Ponyville and the mirror portal doesn't exist. Nothing that happens in the human realm affects Equestria.)
Disclaimers: Mobile Suit Gundam belongs to Sunrise, My Little Pony belongs to Hasbro.
Gore, death, and violence tags explanation:
Now that would be telling wouldn't it?
That whole "if you don't like it, ignore it" thing doesn't work with me. Displaced is universally shit and yours is no different. If you didn't want hate and downvotes, you should have done one of two things:
1) Write better
2) Not write displaced
Unfortunately for you, number one is basically impossible when it comes to displaced, so you kinda shot yourself in the foot.
10251958
1. I wanted to write one.
2. I am a beginner at the story writing.
Those are my reasons. Did you even read the prologue? Or are you just being a killjoy?
In your story description: "Thought this up when noticing that none of the stories that are based around Gundam involved a human turning into a gunpla. So I thought why not?", have you ever heard of the story "A Weapon For Hire"?
Well. You have done something original with what is universally seen, by serious authors, as absolute shit.
You brought Gunpla into it. So you get points for that.
10252226
I forgot about that one.
10252295
Thanks.
10252331
Don't expect constant updates.
Random Updates = readers want more.
This is a proven fact.
Writing still needs some work but that will come with time, so far it's cute for turining into an SD gundam.
By the what size is he compared to a pony, is he mobile suit side along with being a chibi?
Here are my minor issues/advice that I can comment on
Usually it is good form to explain and describe breathy who are the characters he is referring to, not that I don't you shouldn't presume that the readers know who is Amuro Rey (the first ever gundam pilot) or even the characters of MLP, if only to show that the narrator/protagonist recognize them from somewhere like being brony or a friend of a brony as it is often jarring to know how or why he knows who they all are and what he already knows about them from the show. Why isn't he just confused and lost that he somehow became a machine?
I am not sure that I understand why he got angry for Celestia and Luna fighting, that would have needed some clarification, is it part of the fact that he is that particular type of gundam?
I used to love doing gundam models when I was younger, it was so much fun to build them and customize them to make them my own.
10251958
What’s wrong with displaced?
The story is good so far meeting the changelings
you can have him wake up during the Camelot invasion
10253809
It will be explained next chapter
10254263
good luck on your next chapter then
10254356
Working on it now.
10254236
Chapter 1 starts after the end of season 6.
10253809
He's angry because he got stuck in the past and this Equestria doesn't have the mirror portal.
10254520
How do we know that from the story? That is the point i am trying to make with your story that lacks in context in understanding to character motives. I am just trying to give you a little advice for your next writing. Good luck
10254552
Did you read the description?
I loved your story
10267366
Trust me, it's just getting started.
10254236
Ok I changed the story to follow the series.
LoL
Typical Twilight. 🤣
Although, this is an interesting way of doing fanfics. The displaced ones are as interesting as the basic world jumping like Kingdom Hearts or Digimon even. Keep up the good work!
This is actually my first one on this site. I've got another on wattpad.
10330425
Just a bit of a warning.
Each chapter centers around one episode. So some of them may be extensive.
10330476
I don't mind. I enjoy good works that have big chapters. I adopted a fanfic here (still working on it and other fanfics I have honestly. LoL) and took it on to my Wattpad account.
You had my curiosity but now you have my attention
10330425
It helps to read displaced stories while writing your own.
I sincerely hope that this gets finished, FAR to many Gundam fanfics die in the first ten chapters.
10351171
I'm just busy at the moment with life, but it will be done. Just check my bio.
Why was it cancelled
10351183
Maybe change it to hiatus instead?
hay continue it now
When is part 3?
so when will the next chapter come out?
10628209
I'm in college and working on another story. I'm not sure when I'll be back for this one.
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