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Lonely Fanboy48


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Luster Dawn enjoys Hearth’s Warming like everypony else. Always spreading cheer with her friends after years of experience but when her teacher, Twilight Sparkle wants her to complete a friendship lesson involving the holiday.

She wants her to find two fillies to understand what Hearth’s Warming is all about. Luckily for Luster, she found two fillies who spend most of their holiday with their parents. She will make sure they will have the best Hearth’s Warming in their childhood.

Thanks to Daniyel099 for editing this.
https://www.fimfiction.net/user/292246/Daniyel099

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Comments ( 3 )

I guess that my best piece of advice for this would be: show, don’t tell.

I’m not familiar enough with the characters to really see if they’re being OOC or not unfortunately.

10002547
Yeah, I didn’t know where to go for this story. The only thing that made me wrote this story is because I wanted to do a Luster Dawn Fanfic, Twilight’s personal student in the future.

10002551
Maybe think and plan a bit if you’re not sure where you’re going next time? It might help you with characterization and plot details.

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