YOUR STORY IS SO GOOD! I personally think you deserve 1st or 2nd prize. IT'S REALLY WELL WRITTEN! - sensational, with focus on drama, the overall story... SO perfect! It will be so much even better if this story have a sequel!

I advice everyone to read this story, please! Give it a go!

Good work as always!

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Thanks for the comment. Appreciate it.
Would also appreciate if people wrote why they disliked the story. I'm really curious what percentage of dislikes are due to the quality of the story and not just people skimming through the main page and disliking without bothering to read it. I mean, it's not the first story of mine who is treated this way so I got used to it. And I would have been even totally fine with it if fimfiction had a way of telling those two groups of people apart. Alas...

Nice day nice story

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>knew
Who are you trying to trick? Your name is on the story's page as an editor. You've just read the author's notes revealing the actual truth behind the scenes of the story.

Sweet mother of Alabama Jesus, I'm so reading this next!

Whoa. A Sparkle story and Shakespearicles is not here yet. Is the end nigh?

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I would guess its more from the latter than the former. I found the story to be quite engaging and well-written. It was paced well and showed a real development between Twilight and Shining. My only criticism would be that some of the story in the final chapter with Twilight, Cadance, and Shining felt a little rushed. I will definitely be keeping this one in my favorites.

Good work, through the end seems to be somewhat rushed. Also there was not any

pregnancy

in the story.

I really liked this story. Definite up vote and winner contender imo. I will say I had one issue. When Shining finds out its Twilight and she confesses her love it feels almost jaringly sudden that he goes let's have sex. Even just a bit more dialog between them to reach that same point would greatly improve this already great story.

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Changed to impregnation.

Also sorry for the slightly rushed ending. I got pretty tired by the end and didn't have much time to fix everything.

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You have earned that.

A wonderful story, though, as always, I wish there was more.

That was clever.

“Relax,” Cadance said, poking her husband’s nose playfully. “I don’t envy. Almost. You can fuck Twilight as much as you want. Though it doesn’t mean I allow you to neglect me.”

Though this sentence is slightly confusing. I mean didn't Cadance and Shining have many sex partners? I thought the rule was that they if they had sex with another the other had to give their approval. Since Cadance set it up and is watching them she obviously approves.

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Nah. Twilight already has Cadance to be jealous of. Starlight wouldn't change much. Though it was a part of Cadance's plot to have Twilight cross the threshold to her and Shining bedroom(as you'll see in chapter 5 if you haven't read it yet.)

Twilight inclined forward and hugged Cadance with gratitude. She would never forget what Cadance had done for her. “Thank you,” she whispered.

I would think Twilight would take comfort and confidence in Cadance's cutie mark lighting up, it is the ultimate proof that the love is mutual. I know Shining has already made this obvious but Twilight is the kind of mare who always wants objective proof.

I like the story though the ending was a little abrupt. Also I would think Cadance would be caught off guard by him impregnating another mare. I mean that is quite a big leap from just fun sex.

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she obviously approves.

I see why it may be confusing. Shining crossed the line of their regular sexy times when he made a love confession to Twilight. But in this case, Cadance obviously approves it. Yes.

Definitely my new favorite fic! Absolutely breathtaking work you've done here, and I absolutely adore it!

The picture is so cute and sweet. Ah sibling love. Shining and Twilight love each other so much.

This isn't just plot! This is plot with the extra addition of ASS!

AND I LOVE IT!

Cute, nice work mate