This is really quite good. It's far from the sexiest thing ever, but I think that works here. The emotions Rarity shows are really complex and hard for her to truly understand and accept, and that feels real and it makes for a compelling read that leaves us wondering, as it should, what really happened.

I bet you Spike can make more money than the 6 combined.

Nice work, I really liked the monologes, I want to know more about what happened, I'll be waiting for the next chapter.

8810126 Unfortunately, this is a oneshot, not an ongoing story. I don't really do anything past one shots nowadays for fimfiction. Sorry.

Very very good. This is what can be done with the porn genre, to make a clopfic that uses sex for more than just maturbation material, that turns the sex into a means of storytelling.

Damn, that was good. Visceral and raw, and something I can sadly see happening with these two.

I read the comments on how much thsi was more than a clopfic.... i agree, but can someone lay it out to me so i understand it more? o-o

This was so good, it made me zip up my pants and focus more on the story.

Wow, that was just...wow.