Twilight only became an RA to get the single and avoid her insane ex-roommate while she figured out which major to declare. The plan sounded simple... on paper.
Her RA partner is crazy, the music majors down the hall are probably going to kill each other, the new astronomy professor is her mentor's estranged younger sister, and one of her residents is flirting with her in an extremely distracting manner.
Meanwhile, Rarity's stuck with a bumpkin cowgirl roommate who embodies all the small town “charm” she's spent her life escaping. College was supposed to be her opportunity to start her socialite fashion career and leave all that behind... right?
Chapters (2)
A/N: And thus starts Twilight's proper realization that being an RA will hold further surprises than the fact that they didn't cover knocking on doors in training.
Every comment is really appreciated. I'd love to know what you all think. Constructive criticism is welcome.
Preread by PonIver and a stoic English major friend. (Thank you both so much!)
Next Chapter: Rarity, speeches, and bonsai trees.
Bwah?
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Bwah (interjection): And expression of surprise, disbelief, and general "... whaaatt just happened" used when the speaker is unable to properly form words that are actually words.
eerm why girls on cover looks like they are not girls, i mean, look at the faces
Okay, I clicked on this story out of boredom, and figured it would be absolutely horrible and pointless... Needless to say, you have caught my attention. It is a well written, interesting story, and I can't wait to see where this goes in the future. Well done, well done indeed. You've got a thumbs up, fave, and a watch from me.
You did a pretty damn good job of keeping both Twilight and Pinkie in character. Especially Twilight. Loved that
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Everyone has different artistic preferences and every artist has their own style. I happen to use a more realistic style, sorry if it's not to your taste, though the presence of boobs is normally a pretty good indicator of a character being female, and the presence of a face is a pretty good indicator of a character having a face.
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I hope not to disappoint. I'm especially happy you thought I kept them in character. I put a lot of thought into considering how the two of them would interact in the roles of RAs, both with each other and with their residents. 
Wow, thanks so much for the comment! I'm really glad you like the story.
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but they look too guyish even rarity
I look forward to more chapters.
950023 Ok, while the face comment that you said was funny, I think what he meant to say was that some of the faces may or may not look a bit manish, not to insult of anything, I've seen a few artists do, I'm just trying to clear stuff up. Anyway, good job on the story, I hope to read more
Ew, Human Tag.
*Reads*
Give me more.
And they do look like they hgave male faces, but who cares?
Pinkie doesn't.
Fluttershy went to thailand to relocate Tigers?
Fluttershy is now best human.
Oh goodness Rarity and Applejack, Vinyl and Octavia, Fleur and Rarity? I can see some fun drama on the horizon. I love humainzed fics and I love college stories so I definitely enjoyed this first chapter, and I find it funny how this is the second humanized story involving the mane 6 in college with a TwiDash romantic subplot (the other being The Sleepless Brony's 'Ponvyville University') So yes not my ship but I'm still looking forward to seeing where this all goes.
Well shoot, now I'm all sorts of interested.
Since you always do this to me: you already know how I feel about the chapter, but KICK ASS GIRL!
Can't wait to see some more crazy random Pinkie!
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I was being a little snarky because the comment wasn't offering anything useful, but I understand how the style looks. I'm glad you enjoyed the story though.
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I know the human tag is rife with all kinds of dreck, and I'm hoping to put out a solid offering that people can enjoy.
Haha, you, sir, have the best of reactions.
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I wasn't sure if people would realize it was her, but I wanted to make sure she got a mention so she wouldn't come out of the blue in the next chapter. I'm glad you like the story! 
Nice catch spotting Fleur there!
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Don't you hate it when that happens?
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Cool so I guessed right, I figured it had to be with the pink hair and speaking French (and I love how Derpy is her roommate) I don't recall any others at the moment, then again you have plenty to work with as it is so yea I can't wait to see where all this goes (I especially like how Fluer seems to be a night owl like Vinyl)
THIS...
~YOU!
I love this so much. Cool idea, great execution! I only found one thing I had a problem with, and it can be fixed really easily, which is that Pinkie says "Okie Dokie Lokie" instead of "Okie Dokie Loki" (Loki like the Norse god, and the villain in the Avengers movie). I don't even like TwiDash (more of a FlutterDash gal myself
) but I'm super looking forward to RD's forwardness with her RA (see what I did there, eh, eh?) I am, however, a total OctaScratch shipper, so I love their pent-up-sexual-frustration, you're-infuriating, I-want-to-kill-you-and-kiss-you-at-the-same-time banter. Can't wait to read the next chapter! 
goood goood, very good indeeed
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the human tag tends to be what actually pulls me into any story
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ME! 
Actual homicide is unlikely, however.
THIS!
I prefer the spelling to be consistent with 'ie' endings for all three parts, but I can see why that would be humorous. I'm glad you like the story. I'm not confirming any ships but TwiDash for this fic (so far), but I can promise you there will be lots of Tavi and Scratch interacting in passive aggressive and aggressive manners.
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Thank you!
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Everyone has their own tastes. I'm rather fond of human fics (I should hope so since I'm writing one) but I don't find a lot that I like, so I decided to write to fill that gap!
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Always glad to see another FlutterDash shipper, and I too enjoyed the BST between Octi and Vinyl.
Well, this looks very promising. I've always wanted to read fic like this one and enjoy it, and this looks like the perfect chance
. I also like that Fleur and Derpy are roommates.
The only thing bugging me is Rarity's age, I mean, I get the rest of them (Pinkie, RD and Twi around the same age, Fluttershy a year older than Pinkie, and AJ older than her), but to me she'd be the oldest of them. Sure, in-show she has a lot of dramatic fits, but she acts with maturity in most situations. She also has her own business, has considered marriage more than once, and if her previous relationship with her sister is anything to go by, there is quite an age gape between them compared to AJ and Applebloom. I'm sorry if this sounds like a petty issue, but it's something I wanted to get off my chest
Bwah Bwah Bwah. All they say is Bwah Bwah Bwah.
Good story.
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I usually avoid Human stories... But there are some good ones out there. Such as this one.
The reason for my avoidance is that I already read fics from other fandoms based on humans, so I'd rather read stories about MLP with ponies, not humans.
If that makes sense.
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Haha, same here! So I decided to write it
Not a petty issue at all; I'm happy to hear your thoughts. As for Rarity's (and the rest of the mane 6) age(s), I decided to determine ages based on the roles I wanted them to have in the story and their backgrounds. This, unfortunately, meant tossing out a few small canon details like Pinkie being a year younger than Shy.
I personally never viewed Rarity's distance from Sweetie as a product of age so much of differing personalities. Add in the fact that AJ and Applebloom live together on the farm (working together all the time, etc) while Sweetie lives with their parents and only comes to visit Rarity on occasion, and I feel their differences in relationship aren't too unfathomable.
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That's a good point. Maybe I jumped to conclusions, but I find it odd that they were so distant, Ponyville is a small town after all. Still, that Sweetie is a schoolkid while Rarity has a boutique and whatnot must surely mean something.
Anyways, if it's for the sake of the story, I guess it must be worth it
. As long as Rarity doesn't turns out to be a valley girl or something 
I'm so happy this is good. I need more good Schoolfics
This... this is some good stuff. And it's Twidash so it's even better!
Thumbs up and a fave. No spelling or grammatical errors whatsoever, plus I like you're writing style. It flows very smoothly to me.
Da. Was good.
I'll write a more complete review once more chapters are up but for now know that I enjoyed this chapter. I particularly like the way your able to dip into Twilight's thoughts without seemingly any effort.
Also I have to admit that I'm not a fan of the cover art.
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Thanks! I'm glad that you like it!!
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Haha, why thank you! I hope you enjoy the TwiDash. I'm an English major, so I try to hold myself to a pretty high standard for my copyediting. Feel free to let me know if I've missed any spelling or grammar mistakes in the future. I'm glad you like my writing style though, I'm quite fond of it myself
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Thank you! I'm glad that you like it. I should have the second chapter up sometime this week.
As for the cover art, I know my style isn't for everybody. I'm happier that you like the writing.
957826 Heck yea, I'll enjoy the Twidash. Anybody who knows me can tell you I love Twidash, even says so on my profile.
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I'll take 2% of the credit for that compliment, but you should see how good her writing is before she sends it to me, and how awful my writing is before I send it to her. This girl works miracles!
Don't mind me, I'm just going to be silently creeping this story
.
I hardly ever read stories like this, but I figured I would give this a shot. Have to say, you peaked my interest and earned my respect. I can't wait to see more of Twilight's awkward moments. I never thought knocking on a door would be that difficult until I read this.
I just want to let you know that I am really enjoying this story so far, especially since it reminds me of the girls I lived with in my freshman year of college...down to the DJ who hated when the girl across the hall from her practiced her instrument in her room.
I can't wait to read more!
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Oh you. Thank you. But be careful about those compliments or I'll get a big head
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Creepers gotta creep. Feel free.
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I'm glad you like it! I have to admit that I get this happy little feeling when someone reads this and likes it when they hadn't anticipated doing so. I hope to continue to peak your interest.
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You'll have to let me know in future chapters if more similarities crop up.
Wow, that's eerily familiar sounding!
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Eh screw it, I'll write that review now. I've got the spare time and nothing better to do.
The opening to the story isn't particularly good. Indeed I'd go as far to say that it's genuinely bad. The idea of Twilight being nervous to knock on a door isn't particularly amusing and the way you've written it feels pedantic, even though that was sort of the point. Twilight putting off knocking on the door simply wasn't funny. The whole opening scene felt bleh to me.
After that you introduce Fluttershy with the all but traditional at this point "I didn't quite catch that" scene. While I have nothing against it and it makes sense given the situation and context, it feels almost like your including it for the sake of having it, as opposed to using it as a way to characterize either Twilight or Fluttershy. After that you get into the brunt of the conversation and it feels much more natural. Now it seems like your using this as an opportunity to make us like both characters rather than just retreading the show's material.
Another thing I've noticed is your using character names a lot. Perhaps you should vary that up a little by occasionally replacing Twilight's name with a title like the RA or maybe the purple haired girl or something like that a little more often.
"Faust 4"
Nice name drop by the way.
Here's a mistake:
"Classes started less than a week;"
I think you mean "Classes started IN less than a week;"
OK the character introductions were well done, setting up the stories primary characters personality's there conflicts and there relationships pretty much right off the bat. Though you could have done so slower, I understand and appreciate that your trying to jump into the brunt of the story rapidly.
"Applejack, apple farmer cowgirl (and hat), apple birthmark. It was all a little too much, if she was being honest."
Nice drop of the character and corresponding element there. Though I'm not certain that last comma is strictly necessary. But I could be wrong about that.
Not sure if it's your intent or not but Octavia comes across as a bit of a bitch here. Maybe that's the angle your taking with her characterization so that might not be a problem, but just letting you know that she seems condescending and like she wants to pick a fight.
OK so at this stage I'm enjoying the way your characterizing Twilight. Her un-sureness might become grating if you repeat it too much but for the majority of the first chapter it's charming and likable.
I've said it before but I'll say it again: You should really try to improve the name variation. Particularly for Twilight because her name gets repeated a lot.
"A few seats over from her, Pinkie had pulled out an airhorn (from somewhere...?) and sounded it off."
You really don't need the last part of that sentence. All the readers already know that the air horn is the source of the noise. You saying "it sounded off" seems more like your describing the sound the air horn makes, not stating that the air horn was just used.
To Twilight's surprise, Vinyl didn't get angry. “No,” she said, “it's just that everybody has different tastes, which you ought to respect.”
It's unusual to see Vinyl portrayed as the voice of reason in this particular pairing. Normally its Octavia that serves to ground Vinyls eccentricities. But I like the way you've reversed that a little bit so Vinyl's the relaxed one who makes Octavia seem irrational. It's a slightly refreshing take on a common pairing.
“I think ze weeknight hours should be from one in ze morning to nine in ze morning,” the French girl declared, “and ze weekend hours should be from three in ze morning to noon.”
Now maybe it's just me, but I thought a German accent was the one thick with the ze's.
I'm glad to see Applejack being the most mature one in the room. It matches her characterization in the show very well but I have to point out that it sort of puts her in a stronger leadership position than Twilight at the moment. Maybe not what your going for and maybe just me over thinking it, but yeah that's how it looks at the moment.
Ah Twidash. That means the pairings at this stage will probably be Twidash, Octascratch and Rarijack. Normally I prefer Appledash but I've enjoyed quite a few Twidash or Rarijack fics in the past so I think this seems fine to me. Anywho the opening interactions between all the shipped pairs is perfectly fine for now, but there's really not enough for me to go on here to make any strong judgement on your ability to write interpersonal chemistry. However at the moment it all looks good to me.
And that's the review. This is what happens when I'm bored. Also don't go expecting one as long as this for every chapter. I hope this has been helpful.
Personally, I prefer TwiShy, but TwiDash is acceptable.
As for everything else, this is a good start, and you've caught my attention.
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Thanks for the thorough read! I love getting feedback like this.
Regarding the opening: I can see where you're coming from. I'll admit the opening is slow. I knew the icebreaker scene would have introductions coming fast and hard, and I wanted something slower paced in the beginning that would establish Twilight, Pinkie, Shy, and Scratch (at least a little) so they wouldn't be "new" to the reader in the next scene. You can probably skip it and start at the icebreaker scene and appreciate the chapter just fine.
As far as Shy and Twi's first meeting, I originally wrote it differently, but changed it to mimic their first exchange from the show as something of a shout out. Not particularly clever or original, I'll be the first to admit. If I come back to edit the chapter, I might revert to the previous version.
The character name usage is mostly my writing style, and isn't likely to change much. Writing Twi as "the RA" or "the purple haired girl" would distant the reader from her, and as this chapter is from her perspective (albeit in 3rd person) I generally try to avoid addresses like that. I'll watch the name-usage-density in the future, however.
Their dorm building name is 'Faust' and having them live on hall 4 as a shout out to FiM being gen 4 was too easy to pass up.
Mistake fixed. Thanks for catching it!
Tavi and Scratch should continue to surprise.
Twi gaining confidence will be part of her character arc. 
I... actually have no idea how a French accent should sound. 
I will consult with my French major friend before the next chapter. AJ is older and wiser, 
but stll has stuff to learn. 
I'm not confirming any ships but TwiDash for the fic yet, but I promise Tavi and Scratch interactions and lots of Rarity and Applejack butting heads.
Thank you very much for the review!
It really has been helpful to read, and while I won't expect a gem like this every chapter, I'll appreciate them whenever they come along. 
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I'm glad you appreciate my review but seriously, don't go expecting another one like this to pop up every chapter. I only write these monstrously huge ones when I'm bored. And I already have someone else who's called dibs on my next fit of boredom review.
So yeah. Glad to help and I'm liking this story so far.
A/N: Rarity's POV took a little longer than I'd expected to work out, but I'm pretty happy with how it came out. I'm trying to do things a little differently with the characters than what I commonly read, so I hope to surprise. Or at least entertain and keep you awake or something. *shrug*
Preread by PonIver and a stoic English major friend. Thank you both so much!
Next Chapter: Parties, flirtation, and awkwardness!
Also: More Dash, so don't fear. 
clever
Oh my Luna. I cannot even express in words how much this chapter was worth waiting for. Brilliance! I love how you're writing Rarity, it definitely suits how I see her; she's trying to fit in with the 'popular' people who will get her high social status, but on some level she still wants (and needs) to be herself.
And Discord, oh, that was pure genius. "Insane or not, she would learn all she could from Discord while looking at him as little as possible" = my favorite line 
who doesn't?) and seeing how Rarity's side of things progresses, especially where you're going with her relationship with AJ. Although, be warned, Mac is watching you as well 
So don't try anything funny (at least not until he looks away... 
)
Second thing I love is Celestia's speech, and how you got the message of the show in there so well, without it seeming random or like not something someone would actually say.
I look forward to more Dash (
It's funny, because I was just looking at some stories I read and checking to see when they last updated. I was hoping for an update, and wasn't dissappointed. This is interesting. It's different from the other stories I've read, which is a good thing. After a few more updates, I might make a short review, just to let you know what I, your average reader, likes and doesn't. Keep up the good work.
"The de Lancie Center for Creative Arts" You just love dropping those names don't you?
Oh and I couldn't help but notice the title structure you've adopted. I don't know if it means much to you but I figured I'd let you know I noticed and appreciated.
Anyway that was a good chapter. You did a good job distinguishing Twilight's voice and Rarity's. Oh and is it just me or is it weird that they were in a chapel?
It was fun, girl. Wish I was a better reader and could have actually found somewhere to give input on the story, but you took your time with this one, and it was perfect from start to finish.
Fantastic chapter. Well worth the wait. This is SUCH an interesting read! Very nicely done with Rarity's perspective. And throwing Discord in there was extremely awesome. Keep it coming.
Is this a typo, or intentional: nothing but an apple trees
Shouldn't trees be singular?
In other news...
Dearth? That's a word?
*looks it up* Mother of god...
Your vocabulary is AMAZING!
Celestia was awesome. Discord was awesome. DeLancie Center was awesome.
But the part at lunch and afterwards, with Rarity... was amazing.