After several years of being best buddies with Bon Bon, she soon learns the hard way that Bon Bon doesn't believe in humans. On this note, their friendship comes to an end. Now that they're apart for good, Bon Bon finds a pony that thinks the idea of humans is just as ridiculous as she does and the two form a strong friendship. The two then team up to throw Lyra in the local insane asylum.
I don't think it was a good idea to put Lyra in there. OVerall, a good and interesting beginning.
Great, Lyra and Bon Bon aren't friends anymore
Well-written!
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I loved chapter 1. Really good, I personally loved the fact that Twilight just so happens to have a picture of a human Flash Sentry to show to the front desk.
Good concept. The pacing of the story is a little fast though. If you can slow it down, I think you can have a pretty good story when it's finished.
Good chapter but seems a bit rushed.