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Creativa-Artly01


Epileptic-autistic eldest of four, artist, creative, and horse crazy girl who is obsessed with entertainment media and history among other things.

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She was sent away from her kingdom when she was young, so she wouldn't be taken prisoner again by King Sombra. She grew up away from the empire. Now, she's the one who has to save it. First from Sombra, then from Chrysalis, and then from everything else that comes their way.

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Chapters (13)
Comments ( 11 )

all hail the queen

At what point in the show does this story take place?

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Takes place in an alternate version of the season 9 finale 5, 10, and 15 years after that where Sombra wasn't killed but kept hostage by the Crystal Empire's Princess Cadance and Shining Armor.

Okay, the transitions were rough, but I'm liking the story so far.

Okay, the sudden war needed a little more buildup and exposition, but I'll keep reading to see where this goes.

Is Radiant Hope going to be important to this story? Radiant Hope's mention feels like foreshadowing.

It's not bad, and I can see what you were going for, but (long pause) I think the text would convey everyone's emotions more effectively if the descriptions of everyone's facial expressions, body language, and tone of voice were a tad more detailed. :applejackunsure: I think a little more detail would also help capture the more subtle nuances of everyone's breakdowns. As it is, I feel as if Shining and Cadance are falling apart a little too quickly and suddenly.

Wow, Flurry's got trouble on top of trouble to deal with.

Okay, after all that buildup, this feels a little anticlimactic. At the same time, I am interested in seeing what happens next.

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