With the Peace and Harmony of Equestria threatened by the Zebras and the Caribou, Equestrian salvation may lie with the deadliest weapon ever to ride the rails
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I'm calling dian surviving by some miracle to come back again later on, sombras going to find some sap to control to get his powers back from leopard, and something is going to happen during the party.
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Hello ShadowLight96,
And yeah, Danin survives, as do a handful of others. However, their survival is not really a miracle, and does have a simple, and very plausible explanation, that I will get to in the Epilogue, which will be after Chapter 28.
As for Sombra, I have 2 ideas for that; 1 is what you said, while the other is his almost dying from his lack of powers, and host, and eventually returns to Leopard, this time to stay, as a spirit-voice, forever.
And yes, something WILL happen, but that will be explained during the Epilogue, thus setting up at least part of the sequel, "Beyond the Express", which will pick up immediately after "Battleship Express" leaves off, as well as be the central point of the sequel's sequel, "Battleship Express: Back in Action".
dropbox.com/s/ygmvizo41q43x8l/um.png?raw=1
You did this through the whole story. Generals, kings, lovers, friends--every single person says 'um' to each other constantly.
Please never write the word "um" in dialogue. Never, ever, ever. Just do a find replace with nothing. You could cut every single one out of your story and it would be richer for it.
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Well, well, long time no see Starscribe! I've missed hearing from you.
Anyway, down to business,
the truth is, I have a problem. I tend to write, the way I talk in real life. Due to mild Autism, and sometimes struggling to find the right words, I use "um" a lot. This also transfers over into my writing. I've tried to do better with it, but I don't think that I've been doing too well with that, since you've just pointed it out. It'll take a bit to finish hammering out all of the kinks with this story, as there are misspelled words, and other typos, as well as the "Ums" to work with. I'll get it right some day, I hope!
Why am I still alive?
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Hello Funtime_Foxy32,
And all I have to say is this. Wars do strange things to people, and a guy starting a small herd, is just one of them! That, and victory sex.......
v is for vendetta, AWSOME ENDING
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Hello Jimerjam,
And yeah, that scene from "V for Vendetta" inspired this scene. I'm glad that you liked the story, but it's not quite over yet. You have a few more chapters, as well as the Epilogue to read. And the Epilogue triggers a sequel, "Beyond the Express", and believe me, you're NOT gonna want to miss "Beyond the Express"!
that name wouldn't happen to be a shortened version of the word PTERODactyl, would it? it's a clever useage, don't get me wrong, but still,
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You might be right. Again, this was the result of my crappy naming skills, so after a lot of thinking, I somehow came up with Dactyl. Unfortunately though, I can’t remember if I got that from Pterodactyl or not
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I wouldn't worry too much about bad names.
IRL we have:
Hopeulikit, Georgia
Blue Ball Village, Maryland
Pee Pee Township, Ohio
Intercourse, Pennsylvania
And finally...
Lake Chargoggagoggmanchauggagoggchaubunagungamaugg, Massachusetts
I think you're good.
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Yeah. Not to mention
Accident Tract, Maryland
Peculiar, Missouri
Frankenstein, Missouri
Humansville, Missouri
Flippin, Arkansas
Hell, Michigan
Tombstone, Arizona
Hot Coffee, Missouri
Tightwad, Missouri
And wait. Lake Chargogagg+, Massachusetts is actually a real place?! How the hell did they come up with that?!
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my guess is they were drunk when they came up with the name for that lake,
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I Googled it, and it's actually an Algonquin phrase that some say means "Fishing Place at the Boundaries—Neutral Meeting Grounds". However, others say that it means "lake divided by islands". However, most folks in that area simply call the lake "Lake Webster" for simplicity's sake.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lake_Chaubunagungamaug
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Fixed them