funny how they forgot about sombra but i am curious after how they separated will sombra still want to be with leopard

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Hello forrest yuchnitz,

And no, nobody's forgotten about Sombra yet, there was just more important things to deal with at the time. And in this story's sequel, and the sequel's sequel, Sombra will play a major role. Let's just say that he finds another sap, one who's hell-bent on killing me, and dupes him into helping him get his powers back. In Sombra's mind, all he has to do is kill me, and then he can get his powers back. In the end, there will be a final showdown between me, him, and *REDACTED*, who is now Sombra's "pet". It'll be an amazing bit when the time comes let me tell you!

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Just do a control-f when your chapter is done and manually remove each and every time you use the word "um." The truth about writing is that there are a few times when it would be appropriate to use that word--but considering how badly you've abused it, it would be far better if you never use it at all, just to be safe. I've seen from these comments that lots of other readers are complaining about your dialogue. Removing this will be a big step towards improving it.

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so there never was any love in sombra just someone he can play with when he wants

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Hello Starscribe,

And I'll try that. It's a little bit too late for this story, as all I have left is the Epilogue to write, but soon, as I'm sifting back through it to correct typos, then I'll take your suggestion, and put it into action. I'll also do the same with this story's sequel.

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Hello forrest yunchnitz,

And I don't know, was there? Did Sombra actually care for Leopard, or was it all truly just for his own selfish gains? For now, I'll leave it up to you, but soon, the answer will be revealed. There's much more to Sombra, than what meets the eye.

Spitfire licked her lips. "Oh, I can't WAIT to see what that'll be like!"

I died on the inside!
The Gayest Pony who ever Gayed is what I'm going to call breiburn from now on!

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Hello Funtime_Foxy32,

And yes.........that begins to set up the herd, though it won't be very large. It was a decicion that I made early on with this story, though I don't know if it was a very good one.

And I actually got that from a meme about Braeburn. I liked it so much that I decided to include the phrase into this story!

I purred in response. "Nyah!"

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"Today, this war finally ends,(——“ I said softly as I signed the document.

I hope the humans trade technology with the ponies. Like sharing blueprints of the big boy.

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Haha, yeah

Fixed it

And this does happen, but in the sequel(s)