Spike's Dilemma

by Creativa-Artly01

Chapter 6-The Final Chapter

That afternoon after Ember is gone, Spike is celebrated with an apology party from Twilight and her friends. He smiles and giggles as they embrace him in a hug and present him his own little miniature hoard of comic books and action figures. "Awe, this is the sweetest thing, anypony has ever done for me!" says Spike, his eyes filling with tears. They then bring over his favorite: a plate full of gemstone pancakes. There's ruby ones, emerald ones, and his personal favorite, sapphire ones. They all just stand there and watch as he downs the cupcakes and follows it up with a fiery burp. This just makes them laugh. They're all so glad to have their Spike back. They truly don't know how they'd ever do anything without him. That, in their eyes, is as true as it gets.

The End

Comments

[kildeez]

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You could say that about the whole story. There's no imagery, nothing to put the reader in these places or make us sympathize with the characters, no concrete details to put the story in our minds. Dear author, slow down, give us more, because this feels less like a story and more like a summary of crap happening.

[Creativa-Artly01]

That's why I stopped working on it. With this one, I bit off more than I could chew.