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Spike is starting to learn the hard way that the ponies don't treat him better than any slave. What will he do, leave them behind or stay with them and endure more abuse? After all, it was Twilight who hatched him and the ponies who have raised him since then. Should he go back to the Dragon Lands? This is going to be the hardest decision of his life.
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Waaaaay too rushed. Twilight is out of character. The other ponies don't gush about him in the show. Space it out and develop the story more. A lot more.
I’am liking it so far
I hope Spike comes back to Ponyville
This is making me sad I think Spike thought wrong I hope the ponies don't treat him like that again or he might never come back at all and some of the tags are missing it's Rarity and the main 6 but it was a very good could of been better and sad story hope you continue it
This honestly feels like the rough summary for the first part. If you really went into detail, this could be either a really long chapter or a couple decent sized chapters.
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That's what I said. I had looked at the first chapter... And wondered why it was so short. Feels like the summary instead of the story.
Does that mean Spike and Ember are in a relationship?
One word: Editor. I've said this before, and I'll say it again, like most of Evictus' stories, this has potential to be really good, but only if handled correctly.
It's supposed to be Spikey Wikey
And can't wait until chapter 4 and why would Ember do that she would never do that she would be proud out of character sorry and please don't rush I think this has to be 20% cooler so tell me, why are you rushing?
Ember said in the last chapter that she's fine if Spike goes back.
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True
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This is messed up! Don't you think? (Going crazy)
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It is.
Sorry for my friend but please don't get messed up and take your time you can always save it or you can find a editor like write it up on your blog saying that you need a editor
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What does Ember think of having Spike as her bride?
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Please don't spoil it I haven't read chapter 5 yet
I shouldn't have.
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Male is groom.
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You could say that about the whole story. There's no imagery, nothing to put the reader in these places or make us sympathize with the characters, no concrete details to put the story in our minds. Dear author, slow down, give us more, because this feels less like a story and more like a summary of crap happening.
That's why I stopped working on it. With this one, I bit off more than I could chew.
Too fast paced, Twilight is out of character. And I've not really seen any ponies gush over him in the show.