Equestria Babies

by TwilieTheFoal

Chapter 8- The Plan

In the basement, under CHS, there was a scientist. His name was Dr. Regressor. And he was in the middle of studying the magic inside each necklace. The first one he was looking at was Sunset Shimmer's. The magic from her necklace was the one that gave off the strongest vibes and signals. The scientist took out a few monitors and hooked them up to Sunset's necklace, the readings were off the chart. Dr. Regressor's hand made contact with the necklace , his eyes started glowing with white . From his understanding, her power was being able to see others thoughts and memories by touching their arm. He let go of the necklace and went back to normal, his eyes no longer glowed white, turning back into his regular, light yellow eyes.

Dr. Regressor than took out Twilight Sparkle's next. After he hooked it up to a monitor, he touched it and his eyes went all white again. Then he saw that Twilight was able to levitate objects using magic from her hands. She can also use them to pull things apart such as vines. She was also able to use these powers to unlock a door. 'This could come in handy.' he thought

Then, he took out Rarity's beautiful purple necklace and placed it on his table, hooking it up to a monitor, and then touched it, making his eyes, once again, glow a bright white as he saw Rarity's power. For, she can create a diamond shield. 'That will provide an excellent source of protection.'

He then took out Applejack's necklace and began hooking it up to a monitor or two, and then he touched the glowing necklace and his eyes went white as he saw Applejack's powers. 'It seems like she's got super strength. Interesting.'

Then, he took out Fluttershy's necklace and hooked it up, and then touched the glowing necklace, his eyes glowing white as he saw her powers. 'Fluttershy is able to communicate with animals. Not what I was hoping for, but ok.'

Dr. Regressor then took out Rainbow Dash's necklace, doing the same steps that he did with the other necklaces, then he touched it, seeing Rainbow Dash's powers. 'She's got super speed? That will certainly make me unstoppable.'

And finally, took out Pinkie Pie's necklace and did the same things that he did with the previous necklaces. He touched Pinkie's necklace and saw her powers. 'It looks like this one can blow things up like a bomb when she touches something.
Very weird.'
After that he began writing down jot notes about each necklace on his clipboard.

"The tests were a success." Dr. Regressor said.

"Now, let's see where you necklaces came from. What is your origin?"

He then used some tweezers to examine each necklace, but he needed a better light then a flashing light bulb, so he went into the storage space of the basement to see if he could find some kind of lamp, and he did. For, Dr. Regressor found a small table lamp that was used in offices when they were examining papers late in the night. The lamp was a silver color, and after testing the lamps light bulb, he placed it onto the table that had each necklace on it, plugging it into one of the sockets. He, then turned it on as he examined it with his tweezers, continuing to study it. The first necklace he was examining was Sunset Shimmers.

He took out a strange device, it was supposed to tell you where the powerful magic is, it was a rectangular shape, and was a magenta kind of color. It was a little broken up since it wasn't used for the past year, but he was a scientist and he was more than capable of fixing a few... bugs. He found that strange device in the storage closet that was in the basement . He, then took out an old x-ray machine from one of the nurses office, obviously in a storage closet. It wasn't in great shape to work but it was still able to carry out the task nicely. He then took the device and shook it a little before using it, he then turned it over and opened it up, dust flying out as he did so, making him sneeze. He then noticed that the 2 double A batteries in the device were dead and needed to be replaced. Good thing he always carries a package of double A batteries around. He opened the package and took out 2 double A batteries, Dr. Regressor took the batteries out of the device, and placed them in a nearby recycling bin, placing the new batteries in the device, closing the battery panel and turning it over. Now it worked.

As soon as Dr. Regressor placed the device over Sunset's necklace. The device began to whir, signalling that there was a lot of magic stored in that necklace. He grinned evilly as he took the tweezers to dissect it. The tweezers reached directly into the necklace as he found out that there was more magic in the center. As soon as the tweezers entered the magic zone, he came into contact with something hard. Dr. Regressor moved his tweezers on the hard object and began pulling, pulling stronger than before, until...it popped out, the necklace form now gone, which only left a bright red crystal. He looked at it with curiosity, touching it. He brought it closer to his face to examine it more carefully when he suddenly saw a flashback, of a pink female with smooth and wavy magenta hair and lighter magenta highlights, the side of her hair was tied into a small braid, white sunflowers were draped over the front of her hair. Her eyes were a light green. She was inside of a cave near a rock quarry, looking for something, when she stumbled upon a bunch of crystals, that suddenly turned into a strange look necklace around her neck. Obviously it was of Equestrian origin, I mean, he was a unicorn scientist from Canterlot, the capital city of Equestria. He then left the red crystal on the table as he took Twilight's necklace to see if it had the same crystal trapped inside.

He then placed the strange device, and as expected, it roared, telling him that the magic was right in front of his face. He placed the tweezers and carefully placed it in the necklace, feeling once again, a hard object, which was another crystal. He then carefully extracted the crystal from the necklace, making the necklace form disappear, and a purple crystal appear in it's place. Dr. Regressor was filled with glee at his discovery. He then did the exact same thing with Rarity, Applejack, Fluttershy, Rainbow Dash, and Pinkie Pie's necklace each crystal a different color. Rarity's crystal was a pearl white color. Applejack's crystal was orange. Fluttershy's crystal was yellow. Rainbow Dash's crystal was blue. And Pinkie Pie's necklace was pink. Dr. Regressor than had a thought, and brought the crystals together.

"Hmm, I wonder...." Dr. Regressor muttered as he tried his experiment.

He put all seven crystals in a neat circle, each crystal touching each other. Then, with a flash of white light, the seven crystals merged into a light purple-pink necklace. He placed the device over the necklace and the readings were off the chart, as if there was more than one source of magic, you know, the crystals.

"These will help me rule the world!" Dr. Regressor yelled maniacally.

"Although. I will need someone to test it out, in case something goes wrong." Dr. Regressor said. The last thing he wants is for himself to be turned into a freak or worse, but if it happened on another person, he would see what would happen to that person. And then at least, he would be able to perfect it, and then use it on himself. It was totally fool proof.

"Yes. That's the plan. Recruit someone. Convince them to use the magic. And then total control of the world!" Dr. Regressor listed maniacally.

No one will know what hit them. Not until it's too late.

Comments

[Shadowmane PX-41]

It could use some touching up in a lot of places, but executed right, this could be a good fic.

But, and this comes as a friendly tip for everyone on this site: DO NOT POST YOUR TWIST IN THE STORY DESCRIPTION. IT KILLS THE ATMOSPHERE AND LOWERS OUR EXPECTATIONS. KEEP. YOUR. AUDIENCE. GUESSING.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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Thanks. I fixed that.

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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The same can be said with your narration. Don’t just repeat or reveal everything that’s happened or is going to happen in the narration; especially in your last chapters. It does NOT make for a good read.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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Thanks. I tried to fix it. Hopefully it's a bit better than before.

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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You’e repeating or telling us stuff you’re supposed to keep a secret until the last chapters in “The Plan.” PLEASE STOP THIS.

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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I know. That’s where he’s giving away everything.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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Alright, how about now? I'm really glad that you're giving me advice or whatever.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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I AM A GIRL!

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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In the basement, under CHS, there was the mad scientist Dr. Regressor, who was planning to rule the earth using the magic from all of the girls necklaces. He was the one responsible for regressing the mane 7. But, he only did that to distract Principal Celestia and Vice Principal Luna. And right now, he was studying the magic inside each necklace. The first one he was studying was Sunset Shimmer's, for, it's magic is the most powerful. The magic from her necklace was the one that gave off the strongest vibes and signals, meaning that Sunset Shimmer's power is something incredibly powerful. The scientist took out a few monitors and hooked them up to Sunset's necklace, the readings were off the chart. Dr. Regressor touched her necklace with his hand and after, his eyes glowed with white and he was able to see what Sunset Shimmer's powers were. And as far as he could see, Sunset Shimmer was able to see peoples thoughts and memories by touching another persons arm. He then, let go of the necklace and went back to normal, his eyes no longer glowed white, turning back into his regular, light yellow eyes.

This entire first paragraph is like a Where’s Waldo page of writing no-no’s...

Feel free to get an editor and/or proofreader...

[TwilieTheFoal]

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I have no clue what you're trying to say.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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Please explain.

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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I’ll highlight everything that needs to be fixed:

In the basement, under CHS, there was the mad scientist Dr. Regressor, who was planning to rule the earth using the magic from all of the girls necklaces. He was the one responsible for regressing the mane 7. But, he only did that to distract Principal Celestia and Vice Principal Luna. And right now, he was studying the magic inside each necklace. The first one he was studying was Sunset Shimmer's, for, it's magic is the most powerful. The magic from her necklace was the one that gave off the strongest vibes and signals, meaning that Sunset Shimmer's power is something incredibly powerful. The scientist took out a few monitors and hooked them up to Sunset's necklace, the readings were off the chartS. Dr. Regressor touched her necklace with his hand and after, his eyes glowed with white and he was able to see what Sunset Shimmer's powers were. And as far as he could see, Sunset Shimmer was able to see peoples thoughts and memories by touching another persons arm. He then, let go of the necklace and went back to normal, his eyes no longer glowed white, turning back into his regular, light yellow eyes.

Either re-word or delete those words.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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Alright. Give it a look now and tell me anything else.

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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This levitation can come in handy.

That will provide an excellent source of protection.

It seems that Applejack had super strength. Interesting.

Not what he was hoping for, but ok.

Dash had super speed. That could be very useful.

Looks like, that she uses sprinkle cylinders to use as little bombs, that glow pink after she's touched it, and then explode when she throws them. Weird.

THIS. THIS will get you story downvotes.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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why?

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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NEVER. PUT. YOUR. CHARACTER’S. THOUGHTS. INTO. NARRATION.

EVER!

[TwilieTheFoal]

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alright, got it. Anything else?

[Shadowmane PX-41]

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I want to say, but it’s RIDDLED with things that only an editor can fix...

[BlankFlankedFoal]

How to improve: none because this is perfect

[TwilieTheFoal]

8594755
Aww. Thank you so much!😊

[KittyTheNerd]

So detailed! Such passion! You are talented.

[TwilieTheFoal]

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Aww, thank you. I'm so happy you enjoyed.

[OmegaBlade]

You can continue whenever.