Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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Commence read. Keep on Peppy
I like, yet it does not satisfy my needs and I require more!
Lolwut? It seems like it should be "my pet" or something more endearing, since I don't remember NMM ever calling Twi her "princess".
Anyway, I like the quick release, but that cliffhanger....
I want my evil demonic overlord of long waits and sadomasochism back
1817861 It's supposed to be exactly what it says. She didn't use to call her consort or lover either.
1817901 In due time
Damn. At least this time Queen Moon won't hate Twilight if she can't do the grisly deed...also: media.tumblr.com/tumblr_magijs2Kfy1rw2gyh.gif
oh my gosh peppy updated and it hasn't been a month since the last update... Dear celestia I think we have a changeling on our hooves someone call the nightguard to handle this abomination!
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Shh, don't let Peppy know, but me and Jekyll actually put together a cloning machine. It works a bit better than changelings do, we tried that and it didn't work so well. They were kinda chewing on everything instead of writing.
1818184 oh that's sooo cheap. well as long as Peppy's story comes out faster I don't mind. Umm... do you have any left over changelings?
"Alright I'm done playing for tonight let's finish that draw- Oh? OH! ANOTHER UPDATE!?"
-completely forget his drawing and start reading-
Update already? What is this sorcery!
...Okay, you lost me. The two minotaurs caught the last two griffons, but I couldn't understand a thing that happened after that.
not a bad chapter at all
1818367 I.... I'm not sure how to explain it since I'm very certain the chapter did a very good job of doing so. Caught the last two. Tyra/Tyro took the leader to nightmare. Gilda killed the other. Nightmare is making Twi make a decision.
1818386 I think what confused me was that line about execution.
What's that about another pony? The griffon isn't another pony.
Peppy, another chapter already, u spoil us good sir
1818477 She was making a reference to the last time she had Twilight kill. And the future seeing as how some of the royal guard have joined the griffons.
Update? And I find it right after I get back from the Hobbit? but... my birthday's September second, and Christmas isn't for a week.
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Well here we see my point illistratied that Castle Mareland is indeed still harborring atleat one turncoat proven true. someone told the Gryphons about Tabitha and she's apprently worth the risk of loosing valuble opritives of an assasination attempte when Gilda herself isn't how very intresting that is. Though how well skilled said operitives are in the covert arts is up for debate givin the trail of bodies and broken glass left in their wake. Add in that they didn't notice Tyra comming untill it was too late as well.
Still they did a good job of getting in unnotice thanks to the cover of the storm and the luck they had with the lone century. though it wasn't enough to get them to their objectiv unnoticed. That aside they put up a good fight and I must say the kills we saw exicuted upon them were rather intresting, spines aren't ment to bend that way and decapitation is always a classic never goes out of style. Doesn't leave as much of an impact as impalement or cruxifiction but then again it's still got quite a shock value to it so exicent choice.
though the real meat of this chapter is again the character inneractions. Between the Minotaur Twins bantering and then shifting to deadly serious at the drop of a hat to the direct 180 that happens when Nightmare learns about the intruder it's always a treat to see these characters bounce off of one another in any number of ways from Moon Beams seeming unending cheer and childishness to Nightmare taking controll of a situation it's all good.
though as others have pointed out the real vital bit of this chapter is the choice presented to Twilight. Not just the fate of the intruder left to her but of the roll she wishes to play in the future by her beloved's side. While she's shown to kill before that situation was more a crim of passion then anything else. we still don't know if she's ready to take the big step and kill outside of that situation, outside of self defence but in a proactive direct, concious manner. Indeed that's going to be a big issue in the chapters to come. While she's willing to defend herself, and those deer to her I don't know if she's quite ready for war yet but we'll see soon enough.
Though I'm wondering how the events of this chapter will shake things up. Nightmare herself has said that the defencive stratigy they were using can no longer be employed. Couple that with how bad things are given the information we got in the last two chapters. Between the seeming unending flood of wounded and probibly dead as well, and the relitivly short and who knows how modern much less effectiv training we got glimpes of as well things are still rather grim for Equestria. Indeed even with help from the Minotaur it's still going to be a long drawn out conflict, I highly doubt that the troops will be back home for Hearth's Warming eve. All that aside i egarly await the next chapter.
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I wonder what'll happen to the Peppyclone when the real deal get's ahold of him?
1818892 I like to mix and match. You'll see a bit of both in there.
1818916 Well, with Gilda, she didn't know anything about the Griffon's plans and such as she turned way early on. Plus, Steelfeather doesn't want her killed just yet as she is his daughter and all. They were never meant to be skilled infiltrators, though. Their job was to move in and kill swiftly, something that a lone assassin wouldn't have been able to do. Too many soldiers and workers there to get anything done in an expedient manner. They did have a decent crew though. A spotter, one with excellent hearing (hence the name Aura) even if she was deaf, and then the semi-powerhouse (lol wuss compared to the taurs). Needless to say, though, without the storm they wouldn't have gotten even that far.
Can't have a story with twins if they don't bicker (especially when one is mostly serious and the other is a bit of an airhead). It's just not right.
As for me? I'll prolly be ground up for brain food when I'm caught
1818997 You mean you haven't set up insurance yet? get a plycary made, then hide it somewhere tropical, then when the real Peppy returns reform and spend the rest of you days chilling on the beach.
As for the squad... well dumb luck can only last for so long.
Indeed the twins are a real hoot it'll be kinda a bummer when they and the rest of the minotaurs leave after the war ends.
So Twilight has been promoted from Consort to Princess? Woot!
And by the way, I like the Peppy Look-alike! I just finished reading the story yesterday, and now a new chapter shows up immediatly. New Peppy > Old Peppy!
And why does Twilight have to be forced to kill
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LEVEL UP! Twilight Sparkle's rank has increase from "Object of Royal Affection" to "Princess"! Climbing the ranks, she is. I'm so proud ugu~
1818997 No, don't harm the Peppy clone! You and the real one should work together instead.
1818997 I just had a moment of fridge logic. You say that you're a sucker for happy endings, but the way things are now, Twilight is going to outlive the other members of the Mane cast. That would make the ending bittersweet at best...unless you plan on having the souls of the other members of the Mane cast be anchored by Twilight's soul in a similar way to how Twilight's soul is anchored to Nightmare Moon's.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Twilight_crazy.png
Also, any chance you could have Nightmare Moon's and Twilight's foal be a black coated unicorn filly named Nyx? (Yes, I'm asking for a shout out to Past Sins.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png )
Edit: Another thing I realized is that we never saw what happened to Sweet Scoop after she was caught. My advice: since she seemed to be having some misgivings about working for the griffons, perhaps you could have them have persuaded her to do some counterintelligence work for them.
1820287 She's also going to outlive her brother, her parents, and likely her own future children. Doesn't stop a happy ending, though. Just shhh and enjoy the ride~ Leave the ending to me.
Also, the griffons would never tell a pony about their plans. Plus, she's already spying for them against her own people. Why would they trust a spy with delicate information?
1819382 Not forced. It can go either way.
1820484 Okay, but does my idea for a shout out to Past Sins sound legit?
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you mean...?daaaawwwww
1820494 It does, but it's not gonna happen
1820548 Aww...
On a completely different topic, what do you think about my idea for if Fluttershy meets NMM?
Also, should we assume that Sweet Scoop was simply executed offscreen?
Do in this story, Cadence or Shinning Armor will be mentioned since Cadence was Twilight foalsitter and Shinning Armor is one OP guard when it comes to defense ?
Or it will end up with Shinning Armor joining Griffons and fighing again Twilight in the end ?
1820823 In a revision after I've finished it, but as of yet? No.
kill him kill him!!! but i'm so glad you've decided to update this story more, i love it
1837110 Nope. I actually wrote that long before I read anything by you. I'm sure it's obvious why Aegis is a popular guard's name, though
Hoo boy. Things are heating up around here now.
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Really? I've always considered internal monologuing to be a better way to "show, don't tell" than talking about their thoughts within the story. It gives you a better feel for what they're thinkig without making seem like you're explaining what's going on.
1845812 Which is why I have it in there. If internal dialogue is bad, then any actual dialogue that explains how they're feeling/thinking whether it be to somebody else or them talking to themselves is bad. If you go that far, too, then you might as well just say that all writing is sloppy which is just silly.
I honestly don't know where my stories would be without internal dialogue. As often as I use it, it would be like someone else wrote the dang thing without it. Whatever the case, who decided that it was bad, and why?
1846376 Dunno, and I don't care cause they are obviously pompous cockwads
1846629 Ahhh, enjoying the worst chapter by far. Quite a trooper, you are! (Also, by worst I mean poorly formatted. The writing itself I haven't checked in about a year )
1819285 You never know...it's possible that after the war is over, they could become something like ambassadors.
1853798 They could but Peppy likes to be evil, so I'm not betting on it.
RRRRRR YOU MAKE BUU MAD TO SHORT AND A CLIFFHANGER U PAY!!!
Anyway love this story its awsome!!!
So... in the last two days, i read the whole of this story, 20 unread updates, and a few one-shots in my read later list. That totals to roughly... 450k words. I'm not sure where i was going with that thought, but i figured i'd post it anyways.
Now, since i'm caught up here, i can make an observation or two.
One, i absolutely love the story, the premise of NMM beating the elements of harmony isn't new to my readings, but the direction it went, was. For that, i congratulate you and your helpers, peppy.
Two, i honestly expected more gore and blood by now, but i'm not complaining. I'm not a fan of very detailed gore, (you probably know what i mean, if you don't, just go look for gorefics, you'll know) but this level of detail is just fine for me.
Three, NMM and Twilight's characterization. NMM is spot on. The 'all-powerful queen' to start, and Twilight starts melting that seemingly cold heart of hers. Twilight to start is spot on, and grows into her own new personality (and body, by that point) because she never had her friends for more than the one night, and so didn't grow the same way she does in the show. Different situation and stimuli and all.
In short, i eagerly await more, and boy was this a hell of a read to catch up on. Not quite as bad as the 500k+ word read that Blue Angel was (flight physics documentation included!), or the 750k+ that FOE: Project Horizons was, but still in the top ten.
1869117 I remember when I first saw FoE:PH/FoE and almost shat myself. Quite the lengthy stuff, there.
I'm glad you're enjoying it though! While I love gore, unless it really is just stupid bullshit, like having some random serial murderer run through Ponyville and hacking up everything he sees in detail, I didn't want it to really be the focus here (cause the 'mance is where it's at ). I'm glad you were able to see Twilight's personality difference for what it is, too. Can't tell you how many times people have said she's OOC
I shall do my best to not disappoint, but I feel I should say that I have a new gfx card and sexy HD skyrim is calling.... Updates may be a teensy bit slower.
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I know the feeling about sexy HD skyrim, runnin with an i7 2600, 16 gigs of ram, and a pair of GTX 570s. For the record, it looks beautiful at 1080p, on a 50 inch plasma TV. Borderlands 2 is quite beautiful as well, in a 'must shoot everything in the head with ALL the bloom on' kind of way.
Awsome story. Hilarious and has sex.
1954467 I dunno about entirely hilarious, but it does have its moments Especially Blueblood.
Well still its a really amazing fic so keep doing what your doing.
P.S if you have any tips on how to make a good fic pease tell me because I only made one fic I never posted because it was bull.
1955476 Couldn't tell you. I am not skilled at providing tips. Or reviewing