Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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It's fine where it is...
Also, since I love doing this (despite always being wrong) INB4 Griffons are dumb enough to try to assassinate Twilight in the Dragon's home...
I think: MOAR!!!
Mostly not dead is at least 20% better than being dead.
Eh... If Twi actually dies, I don;t think I'll read anymore. I don't like fics where members of the mane six die.
3843694 Twi's already died.
Calling it. The griffons will do something that is unquestionably an act of war towards the dragons while Twilight is still recovering.
3843694 Technically, she has already died and been revived by Nightmare Moon.
3843699
I meant permanently, and I'm sure you knew that
3843666 Who knows? Sillier things have happened.
3843680 Despite being hulking beasts known for their greed, some of them know how to keep themselves from brash actions. Too bad it's not in favor of the pones.
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3843687 Just a smidgeon.
3843737 Who knows?
3843743 I most certainly did, but we'll just have to see, won't we? Honestly, there're things much worse that I could do to her than death.
3843751
I suspect you're just trolling me, but nonetheless I'll bite.
Firstly, if what I said sounded like a threat, I'm sorry. It was merely a statement of fact. I don't expect anything to change (except maybe now you do do some of those horrible things to Twilight now, just to spite me)
So why did I say it at all? So you would know. Do you care? Probably not, but I didn't know that when I made my original statement,
I understand that there are far worse things you could do to Twilight. If they happen, I'll probably quit reading too. To be fair though, you haven't even hinted at that possibility until now (that I've seen anyway) so I hadn't really thought about it.
3843833 Nah, just making silly comments. I do have things planned, but what they are shall not yet be discussed. I do care, though, but that only extends to the fact that I'd be losing a reader. I won't change any plans to keep a reader, but it'll suck. If Twilight dies, she dies and oh well. If the worst happens, oh well there, too. If none of it, then goody.
I recall you made a christmas special for 2012 or something, or it was just a christmas chapter in the middle of the year where she was alive, the war was over, but she had some severe scars.. I think (and hope) that was a clue as to Twilight's fate.
3843699 To be fair she was only mostly ten too as Nightmare kinda sorta gave the grim reaper the finger and dragged Twilight back to the land of the living. And by the sounds of it Twilight and Frodo are part of the "I got stabbed by a morgal blade and lived club." And Keeli can't join because peter Jackson's a hack that ruined a good book by making it a fan fic. But if I start ranting about the Hobbit trilogy I won't stop until my fingers bleed so moving on.
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I have to say I was pleasantly surprised by the ponies in Fancy pant's group mobbing and curb stomping a griffon like that. Granted between panic, living in fear for months and not wanting to DIE I can see them finally snapping and being sick of the whole damn war. We also see the reason the predators like lions, wolves and the like are lucky that zebras and deer haven't figured out that they not only have the numbers advantage but how damn powerful a weapon their hooves are. I don't blame him for being sickened by witnessing that kind of brutality.
I also loved how we finally learn more of what happened to Twilight and we get hints of just how badly Moo beam is taking it. And I don't blame her She nearly lost her mother and well with the dragons not being willing to help for the most part I can see her getting frustraited especially as the dragons don't seem to have much in the way of medicin.
The political bit was well done as well. The meeting was interesting and I liked how very the dragons designs were. And that it was the one you least expected to be an advocate of helping the ponies. As for a name of the capital? Why not name it after the serpent that kills thor from Norse myth. or the mother or chromatic dragons from D&D? Who names I won't disrespect by butchering with my notoriously bad spelling skills.
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3843932 Hmmm....
Jormungandr and I have no fucking clue, because I've never done anything D&D.
Anywhore, I feel ya on that LotR bullshit. The Hobbit had me fuming.
Honestly, I was wondering how long I could keep the lesser ponies not actively participating in the war relatively calm. They've seen, and been through, so much shit that it was only a matter of time before they snapped. Fancy has some resolve, though, even if he is something of a coward (but who could blame him when he's no combat experience and was tasked to guard a bunch of terrified ponies?). Yeah, them African horse things would fuk dem predz up if they figured out how pr0 they were.
It's not really the dragons Moonie is upset with (aside from them hating her for 'no reason'), since she (regular Moonie) has no idea what's really going on. Plus, can you really blame a society that is so wide-spread for not having large stores of medicine, let alone medicine suited for healing ponies?
As far as the dragons themselves, I had originally planned on keeping them in the regular show's format, but then I thought of how boring that was and spruced them up a bit. Yay serpentine, scaleless, and other dragons!
3843904 We'll see.
and here i thought the big twist was that Twilight was preggers
3844085 WELL YOU THOUGHT WRONG!!!
3844044 Tiamatt or the like. Actually from Sumerian/Babylonian myth but part of D&D since first addition from what I've heard.
They ruined Bilbo and Smuag's riddle game/ first meeting that being done well and Riddeling in the dark being done well was all I wanted when I heard they were making a bloated three movie monstrosity out of this and I only got half of that! I don't care how awesome Smaug the golden looked I'm pissed off and I'm more upset that I can't just drop this cause I have to see how it ends!
Indeed, got to give dragons neat designs, I think the Lunar Games did that pretty well even if there are only five dragons you meet and nine times out of ten they aren't bosses.
Is Moonie ever going to start recalling what happens when she Hulks out? I don't want her truamatised but she kinda needs to know you know?
Don't mess with hooved herbivores for they can crack our skull. And to steal a line from Metal gear Solid. "A cornered Fox is more dangerous then a jackal!"
3844120 Not sure Tiamatt would really work for a city name, but Jormun could certainly work.
And, yes, they did. They ruined that entire damn movie. Added in some bitch elf for no reason other than to even out the awesome bromance. Added in Legolas, because why the fuck not!? Added in a ton of shit from the Simarillion (at least I hope it was from it) just to make the movie three parts long so they could milk it for money. Ended the goddamn movie with only two chapters remaining, those being the death of Smaug and Bilbo's return to the Shire. Downplaying the werebear guy's role into nothing. Sigh.
The rest is to be found out later.
3844171 I've heard she was added as a role model for girls. Witch falls flat on it's face because... she wanting to get all feely with Keelie. as for Legolas, well his dad's the king of mirkwood so it would make sense for him to have a walk on like Frodo, or just show up at the battle of five armies but yeah not super secret agent legolas.
The rest of the stuff add is taken from The unfinished tales, the appendices from return of the king, and probably the silmerion too. Though they even botched some of that as Mirkwood had been under evil magic for 2K ears before Thorin's party blundered through it. Witch says something about how the elves are just as if not more stubborn then the dwarves. The white ork was apparently killed before Thorin set off to serve Smuag's eviction notice and yeah Beorin got the shaft, but he atleast made it into this move.
also the black arrow is something you could fire from a long bow, not a baleesta shot. Add in that Laketown welcomed Thorin's group with open arms and resupplied them merrily.
Though much as I hate to admit it they DID at least get the atmosphere of Mirkwood right. The place screws with your head and has rivers that'll put you into eternal sleep. Pity that got dropped in favor of Bomber's amazing barrel brawl bonaza.
Back to the fic. I'm hoping that wilight wakes up soon as I'd love to learn what's been going through her head. Though much as I want to t tell moonie that everything will be all right Ihope that the two dragons have time to convince the others to join the quest before Twilight comes to.
Twilight still alive? Interesting... we'll see where this goes. I may be apart from the crowd here but I've always routed for the good to win. Even if that means Nightmare , Twilight, or any/all of the main six die with Celestial returning in the end. I know I know I could be considered evil for that statement XD Anyways keep up the good work!
3843932 Tiamat? (and on the Hobbit i didnt think they fucked it up THAT badly but i havent read it in 10 or so years)
3845326 It was pretty terrible. 80% of that film wasn't the Hobbit.
3844342 I know that feel, but I've always been a fan of the evil winning. It never happens. Plus, if Nightmare wins, it's still technically the 'evil' winning.
3845326 It's a fun movie, but a terrible adaptation. It's almost like they let Tim Burton have at it. and I'm not saying more on that.
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3846041 I mean a hard-disk copy.
Great chapter, but I already picked the end for this fic:
1) Twilight survives and comes back to Nightmare
2) Twilight foals Nightmare's newest offspring
3) The ponies win
4) Everypony is happy
1,3 and 4 like in those cursed "???"-chapters
And you WILL make this story end happy or else...
Keep up the great work, I can hardly wait for moar
3848348
You realize that telling Peppy to end the story in a "happy" way is only going to make him do the exact opposite. You've doomed us all.
Oh, and this was an excellent chapter Peppy! Can't wait for the next one!
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I'm trying to think positive here
In the end, he'll end everything fine, I'm sure of it
3848758 3848808 Peppy is an evil, spiteful little man. Warnings have been given.
I am so happy Twilight is alive!
3850652 Wat wat.
3850903 Wat do you mean wat.
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You will give this story a happy end
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3851048 Your silly frog has no power over me!
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3851048
You're only making it worse! Stop before Peppy recreates the red wedding!
3852338 You would be too if you were a slave.
Also:
That is all.
3852814 The notes are a place for laziness.
3853004 And fixed that.
3851561
Okok, I'm stopping.
It's just that this story is so awesome and it would be a real shame if Twilight and/or Nightmare died.
Peppy has taken so many time to delve into the characters and come up with excellent background.
The death of one would be a real shame
3852357
you wouldn't..... you wouldn't do that to us....
would you?
3858976 Wouldn't... what?
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make them get invaded... as this griffin crap is going on....
i feel as if you hinted it... so... i'm worried.
Like, dragons. Dragons are being jerks, so why not get invaded by dragons?
You wouldn't do that though would you? make us get invaded by something else on top of griffins?
3862356 It was in response to a comment on an early chapter. Who's to say, though?
3865719 Not really, but it's the closest comparable word for it.
I'm really happy that you updated a new chapter.
So apparently Twilight was pretty much gotten beat up huh? On one hand I'm kind of disappointed because I expected worse. I expected something a bit more tragic because the story was hinting that something awful was gonna happen to her. On the other hand I'm really happy that both her and Moonie are ok.
I really feel bad for Moon beam. She's worried sick for Twilight. I really do hope she gets better. But I will admit that it was cute the way Tyra refereed to Moonie as an adorable weapon of cuteness. At least it managed to cheer her up. Maybe it's me but I noticed that Moon Beam acts almost like Luna. in which both are very cheerful and innocent, they have a sense of naivete and they cannot handle anger and when they become angry they become uncontrollable. Maybe Moon Beam is not aware of her power and she just acts on emotion.
I'm amazed that despite all the horrible psychological and emotional trauma she still has the will to live. Even though her motivation is to make sure both Luna and Moonie do not become monsters. Maybe she still blames herself with what happened to Brook that she wants to make sure that whatever happened to her would not happened to NMM and Moon Beam. At least that's what I figured.
Also when will Luna meet Twilight again? Apparently in one of your past chapters something happened to Twilight that nearly traumatized Luna and that event motivated their relationship to become stronger(and she wanted to give Twilight emotional support). Since she can enter dreams(not to mention her soul link) maybe she can figure out what's the thing that's traumatizing Twilight.
At least i want to see Luna helping Twilight to cope with emotional pain and to mature emotionally. (At least Luna learned to grow up emotionally)
I DID IT! I'M FINALLY CAUGHT UP! It only took 2 months of reading on and off but yep finally done. So far I love the story and can breathe a sigh of relief knowing that Moonie and Twilight are safe, I was legit worried after a bit. Anyway I was wondering what happened to Jekyll and his Editors notes your guys's stuff at the end of the chapters was the best, just hoping I can see more of it.
3894410 Ibfeel like a reading maniac now because it only took me 3 days to get from chapter one to this chapter. :I
3905049 well I read about 3 hours a day and 6 on the weekends. It just wasn't only this story.
3908562 I read like 6-7 hours a day, I also read about 8 other fics at the same time.
So, I saw this had updated but I hadn't read it yet. Just rolled a J, started reading and:
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Fancypants is friggin' awesome and I love how important that side character has become in this story. He just never quits, but he's amazingly faliable and average in an arena of god-like creatures at war within the castle he's sworn to protect. I love the uncertainty and dread and yeah, Twilight has already died once.
Props. You made Twilight even more OP. I love OP Twilight. So I hope she lives. Nightmare Moon was winning so hard in the last chapter, I'm sure we will see more of her.
Moon Beam and Dragon politics was amazing. I love the different breeds of dragons you've cooked up and their fierce tempers. Awesome chapter.
... need more chapters.