Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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The meeting with Rarity will be... interesting to say the least...
And poor Moon Beam!
NEW CHAPTER!
But now I have to wait again.
still awesome..... but I'm kinda afraid for what will happen when Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash will have finished their training since they will then be at New Mareland and more than one.... and I also fear that RD might get promoted fast during the war.....
There are a lot more side stories then I thought. So, because the MEGA-comment I was talking about would be longer then then this, and probably the next, chapter, I'll be splitting them up. Tune in to the comments of the next chapter for the great Rebelfire's side stories.
Have a nice day.
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Hmm, Jahurl finaly got his wish to have Nightmare and Twilight out and about in the city. Though I must wonder just how wise of an idea that is, not only do they not know the value of the currency they also seem to be unused to the pricing diffrences as well. Add on that there seems to be an element of haggling to this system of economics and that both Twilight and Nightmare seem to be rather free with the money they were given and i can see why Tyra was hesitent to bring them shopping in the first place. Though I will admit that her little observation about Nightmare and Twilight was intresting too.
Speaking of the two of them the inneraction between the two was quite nice. I love that twilight used her puppy dog eyes on Nightmare. Also I'll admit I'm bad about buying books too, granted I tend to go for libariay sales rather then splurges at books shops but still. Though I wonder what the significance of both The Great Migration and the book on Basilisk Theory is?
As Intresting as the visit with Rarity promises to be I almost dread reading it because i just know that it isn't going to go well at all. Granted I don't see Rarity providing shoddy work as she loves her craft too much for that I don't see much else from that meeting ending well. There will be a rather dramatic confrontation here and even if Twilight is allowed to get a word in edgewise i don't see Rarity taking stalk in any of it though i do expect a few rounds of passive agressive snark from out of this mess.
I really don't know who to feel more sorry for here with the attack on New Mreland Castle. I mean first you have those that were ingured and killed when the griffons attacked. Then we get to see Cherry's wounds not only reopened but in the worst possible way by her new found friend Moon Beam. Speaking of her she really gets hit hard here not only is her home once more attacked and she looses some friends in the process when she stand up for herself and those around her and tries to serve up some poetic justice she not only doesn't get to fully wreak her havic on the monsters who have hurt her so very dearly in the past she is also somewhat turned upon by her only friend even remotly close to her age and in one of the worst possible ways being called a monster for defending said friend. She's really going to need some reassurnce and soon.
The bits with Rainbow Dash while not as dramtic as some other parts of this chapter were needed. Not only are we given some more details on the after math of the attack on the Ponyville recurts we are also let in on how Equestria is slowly but surely learning how to deal with the war they are in. While it is a small step to take feeding false information like that is a good idea it should help keep things safer in the near future. Well done Peppy keep this up and I think we'll get to see some truely intresting devations in how ponies wage war.
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Well I've run out of steam fo the moment thaks for listning to me prattle on all.
muahahaha i guess ol commander will have to explane to cherry how moonbeam is a shapeshifter ally and bestest ally at that too
and also why moon beam the cute lil filly is not a monster o next chapter is gonna be soo much fun also when i first saw new chapter i was like squee then i was like dawww then i was like wingboner aghem ... anyway you sir are doing a fabulous job keeping this story interesting. it just jumped back to the 2nd top of my list with EOP right in fromt lol.
im so happy, almost all of my favorite fics (aka my drugs) updated almost at the same time (this is one of them if you didnt guess that already)
as usual it was an awesome chapter. the problem of i.want.MORE persists as usual though
while i do love every single view of all the characters in the fic i especially love seeing twilight interact with her previous (?) friends, especially now since they havent seen twilights little change yet (oh, the drama! ), i havent seen a whole lot of that but im hopeful now that rarity is going to be asked to create a new dress for twilight while dash and shy have joined the army (with NMM being the ruler she should at some point address her soldiers and where NMM is you'll find twi)
oh, i've not said this before! you have really good editors, normally i dont pay much mind to small spelling error but i dont think i've seen a single error nore a single annoying sentence (like a sentence that's makes it presence know by being...well...strange), so you're really awesome as well editor 1&2!
324593 I feel so special!
Also: you think you've got distractions?
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^ my life for the past few days there.
Anyway, a great chapter! All teh pretty ponies spening all teh minotaur monies; and now we've got an excuse to bring Rarity to the castle! seems like everypony is being drawn there.... hmmm
Rarity is probz going to wtf at the new Twilight look.
heh, i believe fics that includes minotours got a boost ever since Iron Will appeared. and, since Iron Will was relatively a nice guy, this fic was nicely prescient on a minotaur race friendly with ponies...
which begs the question, any chance of Iron Will making an appearance?
is it just me or did Jalhur's talk at the beggining seem ominous? myabe i'm just paranoid...
Yay, twi gets to explain what a bitch brooke was! lthough rarirty probably won't beleive her, still will be fun to see he react to twi's change. And then moonbeam scared off cherry, you are a jerk dude. But like most abused girlfriends we keep coming back for more...
Peppy another great chapter!! And here is some mental support!!
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I wonder which would be worse for Twilight: Rarity refusing to come or Rarity coming and things not going well?
325216 325289 I saw both of your posts at the same time and 'd so damn hard.
325111 He isn't so much in the minotaur lands. He's obviously a travelling motivational speaker, so he won't be in Valtaura or Grandimino. I'mma have to watch the episode a few more times to get his personality down before I ever put him in the story though.
324935 Yes, they truly are amazing. If I ever meet them irl, I'd probably have to hug them into pulp. Just saiyan gaiz.
324935 324578 Shy won't be joining as a soldier. She could never kill another being, be it animal, pony, or griffon. She will be playing a role, though.
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As for all the Moonie/Tart comments. I loved writing the little 'battle' scene between the servants and the fillies. (Nightmare might have shat brix if she saw her servants shirking their duties so blatantly) It made me all warm and fuzzy inside because, should I ever have kids, that's how I'd want to spend time with them. BUT, the next scene had to happen. Character building and all that stuff. Made me sniffle a bit.
My Distractions:
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And the various stories that keep updating
great update can not wait for more
i hope that you are not to evil that moonie and cherry become friends again
also when will twilight get her magic back
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Moonie at least seems to get better by the winter holidays.
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Mass Effect TWO? OG right here, he plays that OLD SCHOOL SHIT. Real talk.
Anyhue. Moon beam... -sniffle- Cherry Tart... -sniffle- eeeeeeeeeeeeaaaahhhhhhhhh!!! (That's me crying at a ridiculously high pitch)
ALSO! It's too late. Twi cannot be thinxing "how could forget her so easily" ESPCIALLY after that emotional bonding session. If she was 100% before that, then she should be 110% now, ORRRRRRRR that means Queen Moon isn't so sure herself... MAYBE I SHOULD JUST READ THE STORohwait. I can't. Because it isn't done yet. You stop the reapers. (/spoiler)
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All of those spelling errors were unintentional. I was not trolling. The amount of typos in that post was so mindbogglingly high that I am obligated to let everyone stare in amusement and leave it unedited. Holy hell that was horrible.
326127 ME2 Cause I haven't started playing it until recently. Since ME3 came out i need to finish me2
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I know she's not a soldier but she could become main Medic and if story says so, the current doc gets killed in an attack and Shy gets to replace him, that's why I'm kinda afraid for her and RD.... well let's just say she'll probably be part of the minority that will survive (unless all soldiers are actually written)
To d'aww or not to d'aww, that is th-FFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!
Also, can't wait to see Rarity's reaction to Nightmare Twi.
Oh... why you...
Both for timing, and for dat ending. WHY, MOONIE? WHAAAAI!? (Echos unto the night)
327022 All i can say is lol.
328643 Truer words...you just spoke them.
I caught up with this. I'm amazed. Now we need moar, please...
But um, whenever you're ready is fine...
332485 Doin my best. In the mean time, feel free to check out my other stuff
Hey Peppy, I just discovered Stories can get personal Banners. Are you going to get one for ATFN? Also if you do, let me know who makes it for you so I can ask for one as well .
Great work on this chapter too. Looking forward to the next one
Two words dude. LOVE. IT.
334968 Wat?
336765 *insert rape face pic here*
336773 Check this story out. Where the site banner should be, there's a story one. The Ambassador's Son
I say, Fluttershy's going to save the queen's flank *LIKE A SHY!*
I also want to know how Rarity's going to react. I asked myself, who is she going to believe? The poor filly who had been her friend long ago and who Twilight has killed, or the pony who would've become her best friend under different circumstances.
FINALLY READ FROM CHAPTER 1 TO 34! Now I can finally comment without having to fear about spoilers.
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I bucking love your story. There aren't many NMM fics out there, and most of them are pretty high in my favorites (not the actual list). I dearly hope you continue to update this in a regular basis. It's already at chapter 34 with 150k words in, and it's not even close to being over. ALL OF MY STARS, TAKE THEM!
Until the next chapter!
353345 But.... We don't have stars anymore As far as updates go, I'm alternating between this and Necro Domina (or maybe two chapters of each depending on whichever I feel like writing at the time of a ch completion.) I'll try and get them out as quickly as I can with how fubar'd my sleep/work schedule is Glad you enjoy it though. I write this stuff for you gaiz!
353587 then use staches they seem to be in style dont you think?
355368 I... actually find that pretty annoying
355452 ok then the stars were always better, why wont the mods put that method back into use?
then ok what do you prefer
betternot be reading this. anyway hope ya have fun sry bout the screwed schedual
356806 Totally not your fault. Somewhat mine, but mostly work's fault. Mine cause of distractions. I like the like/dislike feature. It makes it seem more legit than the star system like knighty was saying. People rate without giving much thought to it. They either rate a story with 1 star if they just don't like the shipping invovled or if the story doesn't please their fancy brain cells or 5 star if they just liked the story. There is rarely anything between 2-4 so those were pretty pointless. Only the true critics and such rated properly. Thumbs up/thumbs down cuts out all the bs. If ya like it, ya like it. If ya don't, ya don't. End of story, no gray area, no decimals. It was fine though, but I like the newer one
356829 ok if i read it i rate it usually but most of the time i read something that requires six or seven stars but could only give a MEASILY 5 STARS so usually i didnt rate the story's i did read. meh i'll rait your story at the top along with end of ponies and a few others. it is that awsome anyway cant wate till the next chapter lol i wanna see how moonbeams situation is resolved.
367259 I'll go through and fix them soon as the next chapter of ND out. Thankee Thankee As far as the protege thing goes, I cant make the e thingy without copypasta'ing it and thats a pain in the mangina so I just leave accents out.
367421 And not in this one.
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367509 Oi, I've seen what you've done! Being a Grammar Nazi is my job!
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I'm not so much a pre-reader/editor when it comes to the grammar. I'm the idea guy, someone who brainstorms with Peppy to weed out bad plotlines, add good ones, etc. Being that I'm the senior editor of ATFN, I was the only one around to fix things... and I'm not a Grammar Nazi.
...But now that we have two Grammar Nazis on the team, we hope mistakes like these don't get by.
Oh. The Author/Editor notes are intentionally bad.
And... I would like to introduce the new member of the team, the Prince of Hyrule.
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God damn bucking ninja.
368420 I'm not gonna fix Apple Jack cause that's the way I prefer it just like Apple Bloom and stuff. Wyndigo is how I prefer to spell it. A lot of words like that are just based on where you're from and how you've been taught to spell them.
368456 a.deviantart.net/avatars/n/o/nopeaviplz.jpg
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368483 Now that's just silly. Why spell it wrong on purpose?
368535 The same reason you made your username a horrible train wreck?
368554 For teh lulz?
368559 Probably.
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