It can be taken for granted that being a Wonderbolt is crazy tough work. Coming home from wing-breaking work and having to deal with an excessively snarky fancolt certainly doesn't help matters.
Then again, there are circumstances that make staying at home all day an even more arduous task. Depending on who you're asking, Quibble Pants might have one of them.
Dialogue-only story. As far as i can tell, this isn't forbidden by FimFic rules, and I wanted to try something (slightly) different.
Spoiler Alert/Squick Warning: if the idea of MPreg grosses you out, you might want to stay away. Hopefully you're a tolerant enough soul that you're willing to read this story without checking the spoiler, though.
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Well... this is..... diferent!
Interesting. Odd, but interesting, and I think I like it.
I'd like some more words to help flesh this out though, because right now it's easy to lose track of who's saying what in the middle of it all. But there are also bits to help clue me back in. The actual character interactions here are representative of stuff I'd like to read more of.
I give this:
Hmm... this is the first time I've ever read an Mpreg that wasn't gay, but I have to say, I quite like it. You really do a good job of capturing both of the character's emotions through dialogue alone- and trust me, that's pretty difficult.
So quibble is the pregnant seahorse.. can we get a backstory?
7915408 it's implied, though not outright stated, that Quibble elected to undergo surgery and related medical procedures in order to act as a "surrogate mother" for his and Rainbow Dash's attempts to conceive a child. The stated reason was so that Rainbow Dash could continue to be an active member of the Wonderbolts during that time, and the conflict stems from how each perceives the other's attitudes towards the growing responsibility of it all.
Wait who's pregnant XD
I'd like to think it's RD... because in my opinion, male pregnancy is disgusting.
But anyway, this is nicely written. Great job!
So how is Quibble expected to birth the child? How is Quibble even able to come to term? The male mammalian anatomy does not allow for either with a ridiculous amount of artificial intervention which can have massive negative affects on the male.
Bit of advice, while dialogue only stories are nice and all, almost 85% of all communication is nonverbal and if have a pauses in the dialogue it can throw off a reader of who is talking without specifying when the conversation starts again.
While I cannot buy the premise, and I find the use of only dialogue rather minimal at best, it's not a bad story.
TL;DR, I cannot like it, but I don't dislike it
I love how unique this story is, plus I need to see more of QuibbleDash so
Great job!
Okay, that was pretty clever. Great work! As for the MPreg bit, it's not exactly like this site has weirder stuff...
The idea is good, and I'm always down for weird and unusual done seriously but I have to echo what was said here 8040912. The story, as it is, doesn't really make any sense. I hadn't read the spoiler, so I did get the twist as a surprise. However, it doesn't stay that way because everything said in the comment linked comes back to taint that emotion, in a way. Why can't Rainbow carry the foal? Seriously, how can Quibble carry the foal and even if he can, why is it that he's permitted to when it puts him at a risk far greater than from Rainbow carrying the foal? The dialogue is nice and all, but you never offer any structure to anything beyond their cute dynamics.
Admittedly, the one way that a male can be pregnant, and thus make your story work would be if Quibble was a transgender stallion, as transgender males can carry and birth offspring, and it's something that's happened before. But this is never touched upon, nor is it treated like a possibility, thus making the fic a huge "wat" trip.