The mythical chapter 2 appears!

I noticed you were confusing colts and fillies. Colts are young male horses, while fillies are young female horses. Unless you're saying that this Sunset was male back in Equestria, I'd edit the chapter to have it make more sense.

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actually no the author worded it right.....

Sunset is best sex teacher.

7832005 How so? You can't just say that. You need to back it up.

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because they are girls talking about who they like....

to flip the gender role, it would be like colts having "filly talk" about which filly they would want to clop with

7832567 Yeah, that doesn't make sense. Human girls call it 'girl talk' when they talk about the guys they like. I'm sure it would translate in the same way with ponies.

I don't know where you got your info, but you might want to double check those sources.

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and you got to keep in mind Sunset is from Equestria and we don't know exactly the terminology is "behind the scenes" (yes I made that joke on purpose), so we just have to go with what Sunset says. Let's just agree to disagree because I am not in the mood for an internet fight because i'm a bit under the weather.

Keep it going! This is great!

Too many unnecessary comma's. The grammar needs an edit. Makes it hard to read and enjoy.

This is good

I love that ending, and I'm REALLY looking forward to the next chapter.

When's the next chapter coming??

plz continue!

Update?

Fluttershy squirmed and let out a whimper as Sunset pushed her two fingertips less than one cm into her vaginal entrance, and proceed to move
Fluttershy’s fingers clockwise, around, and around. Fluttershy trembling with each circuit of pleasure.

fix paragraph.
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Some paragraphs need separating. That's really the biggest problem I've noticed in your chapters. Nothing a scroll through the chapter to make sure everything's nice and separated can't fix.

But I'm looking forward to more of this. It's a pretty interesting ship.

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Chapters still need touching up. But still a fun read.

Just a sort of update, I'm "ending" New Licks, but will continue it in new individual stories.

I've decided doing one off stories as chapters, my original game plan, just, does to really work well with FimFic.

Expect the story, and sexual exploration, to continue in June!

“Canterlot High did cover sexual education, right.”

Shouldn't that end with a question mark?

Her body had groan flush again, but this time with excitement and sweat with her breathing becoming very audible, for both Sunset and Twilight.

I think you mean "grown". "Groan" is a noise one makes, which expresses one's unwillingness to deal with a situation of some kind. "Grown" is the opposite of "shrank".

Normally, Spike enjoyed not being left out of things. Sure, he was a dog in this universe, but he didn’t like feeling like a sidekick. However, he would have much prefered to be left out of this conversation, even if it meant missing out on one of Fluttershy’s instinctive belly rubs. Unfortunately for him, he soon found himself trapped between Fluttershy and Sunset on Twilight’s bed, unable to escape without being noticed. He did get that belly rub though.

I would have expected that he would want to stay with Twilight. Spike's defining character trait is his desire to help others and especially Twilight. Sure he doesn't like being in the shadows but he still often puts the desires of others before his own. You have been doing quite well in portraying that overall here but this seems just a bit too selfish for him.