Unexpected End

An alternate ending to Cutie Map where Starlight soon realizes trapping five of Equestria's greatest heroes in a shed, was more of a mistake than a smart move.

Idea by a friend.

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NotSoWickedWitch

NotSoWickedWitch #1 · Aug 17th, 2016 · 5 · ·

... this. This was ...

HILARIOUS.

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ConfettiColored

ConfettiColored #2 · Aug 17th, 2016 · 5 · ·

Hey, Starlight! Guess what!s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/49/25/cb/4925cbece77ad0b2dc1929c2a0195d00.jpg

Beatle Boo

Beatle Boo #3 · Aug 17th, 2016 · 1 · ·

I...uh...I love it

ThatRobotGuy

ThatRobotGuy #4 · Aug 17th, 2016 · 6 · ·

That was hilarious.
I just can't stop thinking about what Starlight's reaction would be when she wakes up.

DerUbermensch

DerUbermensch #5 · Aug 17th, 2016 · · ·

Uh... that was great? I have no idea what to say after reading this.

Molly Dreemurr

Molly Dreemurr #6 · Aug 17th, 2016 · 3 · ·

7486981 "I'm serious, that's what it says: A horrible person. We weren't even testing for that"

NightmareTRXY32

NightmareTRXY32 #7 · Aug 26th, 2016 · 1 · 1 ·

Nice job, one thing that threw me off was Smarty Pants. That was Twilight's doll from Lesson Zero back in season 2 XD.

Tavitima

Tavitima #8 · Apr 1st, 2017 · · ·

Uhm... I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO SAY BUT THAT WAS AWESOME!

EndertheDark_0326

EndertheDark_0326 #9 · Jun 5th, 2018 · · ·

Jesus that was really freaking me out.

Pete100

Pete100 #10 · Mar 28th, 2021 · · ·

Twilight’s eye twitched again. Now that Fluttershy got a good look at her, the recent alicorn’s appearance didn’t look that well in comparison to the rest of her friends. Perhaps four days of solitary confinement, lack of food, and constantly being asked the same annoying question every four hours of every day was starting to weigh in on them and she hadn’t noticed.

How many of you would crack?

Rarity was probably the most sane out of anyone still being her perfect self. Except she wasn’t complaining that much about the dirt of the shed. Nor the dust, nor the fact that her eyeliner was starting to fade, in fact now that Fluttershy looked, Rarity’s equality sign was pulsing justa smidget.

I think there’s an error here.

“Um, well. I was thinking that, maybe we should...try playing dead to trick Starlight?” she suggested.

I mean, that’s not so bad.

Fluttershy continued, bracing herself. “Maybe if we tricked her into thinking you five were dead, oh not literally! I mean, um...just acting it out, she might feel bad enough and um” her hoof gently traced a circle on the ground, “...give you your cutie marks back” she said slightly losing her confidence halfway.

Why would she give cutie marks to dead bodies?

But when Fluttershy tried to speak, and Starlight noticed the quick flash of what she perceived as anger in her eyes, the unicorn quickly backed away towards the crater with shock and fear. Immediately she looked to her followers for support, but not a pony would look at her.

Damn, she about to kill her?

“Kh- Ahem. We are...gathered here today, to honor these five mares who died from a...” a bead of sweat trickled down Starlight’s neck. “Rather sudden and spontaneous explosion, that I in no way, shape or form, ever expected to happen given the-”

Imagine if fluttershy just starts accusing her of killing them.

“We say goodbye to these five mares today. They were good mares and didn’t deserve this...and I’m sorry.” Silence filled the area at Starlight’s heartfelt words. That knot in her stomach doubled as she realized that this really wasn’t a joke, and that because of her own thoughtlessness, four- five mares had just suddenly died due to some unknown spontaneous combustion of random energy.

Why did she say four at first?

Maybe if they had their cutie marks they could’ve survived Starlight thought as she trotted her way towards the five’s grave burial. Maybe I went a bit overboard and too far...but how was I supposed to know a gas leak could be sparked by spark of magical aura! With grit teeth and frustration the mare sighed.

I’m surprised she didn’t question that.

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