• Published 25th May 2016
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Please Forgive Me - RuinQueenofOblivion



Scootaloo has always wanted to know who her real family was, when an assignment from Ms. Cheerilee gives her a chance to look into it, what truths will she find?

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New Life

Scootaloo's POV.

I was in Rainbow's Cloud Mansion, it was the day after Rainbow had adopted me and brought me home. I took a deep breath, I had finally run out of time to work on this paper, but now I had an idea of exactly what to write.

I took the pen and paper and started to write.

My Family
By Scootaloo Dash

When I was given this paper, I wasn't sure exactly what to think about it, I didn't know who my parents were, or anything about my family really. When I was just a little foal, I was left on the steps of the Manehattan Orphanage by somepony. I never knew who my parents were or where I had come from. I had sometimes felt like whoever my parents were, they didn't want me. I never understood why nopony would want to adopt me, and the other Ponies in the orphanage didn't help, Manehattan was a nightmare.

Eventually I left Manehattan and came here to Ponyville, that's when I met Rainbow Dash. I always felt she was the coolest Pony I had ever met, especially when she agreed to be my honorary big sister. She was always like the family I never had before and always wanted. She helped me practice flying, when I felt down she was always there for me, she was even there when I got my cutie mark. She was my family, I didn't care what anypony thought, she was exactly who I had always wanted to be like.

When I was given this assignment, I set out to find out who my family was, knowing who they were was something at least. She told me the truth after I had asked Twilight to find out for me, and I admit that it wasn't what I had expected to learn, my mother this whole time, is Rainbow Dash. I couldn't believe it, she had been both my mentor and my honorary big sister, but she had never told me the truth about our relationship.

I admit, I was angry at her for not being honest with me, she had a lot of chances to tell me the truth after all. I ran away, planning to leave Ponyville forever, but I got attacked by some... thing in the Everfree Forest. I was terrified, I was almost killed by that, thing but Rainbow Dash saved me. I hated her, but she still saved me, I guess she cared about me after all.

When we talked on our way back to Ponyville, she told me why she had given me up, that she wanted me to have a better life than she could've given me. I guess I started to understand why she had done it, but I wished that she could've given it a try. Well, she did at least, she wanted one more chance to be the mom she always could've been, and now we're a family.

Family, its kind of a funny thing really, I had always wanted a family of some sort, but now that I have one, I wasn't quite sure what I expected. When that, thing was reaching out to me, I came to a realization that family isn't about who you're related to, its about the ponies that you're closest to. My friends are just as much my family as anypony else, so Rainbow Dash and others have always been my family, I was just too blind to realize it.

Now though, I have a family, I've got a mom, and she's the coolest mom a pony could ask for. I don't know whatever happened to my dad, but now Rainbow Dash is my mom again. Maybe in a way, she always was, after all she was there for me like I said before, and because of that she was always my mom in her own way.

I felt a soft tickle as Rainbow, no, mom wrapped her wing around me as I finished writing. I looked up to look into her eyes, and she smiled.

"Are you done now, squirt?" She asked.

"Yeah," I said with a nod. "Do you think Ms. Cheerilee will like it?"

"Of course she will, you did a great job," Rainbow said with a nod. "You need to get to bed now though."

"Okay mom," I said as I got to my hooves and headed for my room. I had a new cloud bed that mom had set up for me and laid down, looking up at the ceiling.

"Good night, Scootaloo," Rainbow said as she tucked me in.

"Good night," I said, closing my eyes with a smile.

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"Keep it up Scootaloo, you're doing great!" Mom called out to me, but I couldn't see her, I was flying, I was actually flying, doing loops through the sky, moving as fast as I could.

I knew it was a dream, but it felt so real, I couldn't help but wish it was real, even if it was a dream, it was still enjoyable at least. I came in for a landing on a cloud when the world around me froze again and Luna appeared out of a portal.

"Princess Luna," I said, bowing politely.

"Scootaloo, I am glad you are okay after your encounter in the Castle," Luna said with a smile. "And I heard you and Rainbow Dash have reconciled."

"Yeah, we did!" I said happily. "I mean, its not going to be easy, but still, I felt like she deserved a chance, you know?"

"Of course," Luna said with a nod. "I am glad you both were able to make up."

"That, thing that attacked me, what was it?" I asked, Luna tensed up briefly.

"That is, something you shouldn't worry about," Luna answered. "You must understand, there are, depths to this world. Horrors from before myself and Celestia took the throne that terrorized the world, the being locked under the Castle is one such creature. You should not worry about it, it will not bother you again."

"Okay," I said. "She, really does care right?"

"There is something you should see, Scootaloo," Luna said and her horn glowed and the dream world around us changed.

"Hey Squirt!" My mom's familiar voice called out, I thought she was talking to me before somepony's voice called out.

"Mommy, you came!" A voice called out, I looked to see, myself, I was younger, we were in Ponyville park.

"This was a dream she had many times since she had to leave you," Luna said, and I turned to look at her. "Watch on."

"Of course, did you really think I'd miss my filly's big day?" Dream mom said as she hugged the dream me. "Are you going to be okay out there?"

"Are you kidding, I'll be fine!" I said with a grin as Dream mom nuzzled the other me.

"Racers, to the starting line," an announcer said, I watched as dream me hopped on my scooter and took off to get to the starting line.

"Be safe Scootaloo... I can't lose you again," dream mom said, trying not to cry as she went to her seat.

"You know, she gave you that scooter," Luna said, I blinked, I didn't know that. "I cannot tell you why, she wanted to do something to make up for her mistake perhaps."

I sighed and nodded with a smile, she really had cared about me all these years, that's all I needed to know.

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Rainbow Dash's POV.

After I took Scootaloo to school the next day, I spent most of the day working with the Weather Team. I had to take a deep breath, I had never really thought I'd be a mom, but I wanted to do it now, Scootaloo needed me to be there for her.

Finally it was time to pick her up from school, I couldn't help but smile as Scootaloo ran up and hugged me.

"Hey Scoots, how was your day at school?" I asked.

"Great, I turned my paper in and got an A," Scootaloo said with a big smile. "You know, we really should thank Ms. Cheerilee, it was the assignment that gave us a chance to be a family again."

A family... I couldn't help but smile at that, we were a family again just like she said. After 10 years, I finally had my daughter, and the mistake I had made, I had finally been able to make up for it.

And I couldn't be happier.

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???'s POV.

Scootaloo... that was her name...

The filly, I had been so close to finally ending my solitude, until that, Rainbow maned mare broke my hold.

I had been alone, so alone for so long, the seal on me was weakening which was how I could reach out to her like I had. Scootaloo, she was so alone, so afraid like I had been for centuries.

I'd find her, I would break out and find her... my loneliness would soon come to an end.

Very, very soon.

Author's Note:

And that's finally the end to Please Forgive Me, I hope everyone and everypony enjoyed it, I certainly enjoyed writing it.

But its not quite over yet is it? There's still the matter of that, creature to attend to, but that is another story.

Comments ( 56 )

This story made me wish I was actually in the story contributing to the plot well done!

Would it have been a Nightmare Scoots?

7291321 *facehooves* It wasn't Nightmare Moon, I promise you, it was something else entirely, don't you think Luna would've said "It was the Nightmare" or something like that instead of what she said in the final chapter?


7291312 Glad you liked it, I'm not sure when I'll start a sequel, but there will be one eventually.

7291374 Now if I can only get people to stop thinking its Nightmare Moon, how many times do I have to say it? Its something entirely new.

7291379
It seams more like the tantabis. Actually now that I think about it, it seams more like a villain I created.

7291404 Huh, someone else said that too actually, but nope, wasn't that either, or probably what you made, actually still working on it, but its going to be kind of lovecraftian.

where = location
were = would past tense
Please learn the differences.
Anyway, this was quite interesting. I was going to ask if you were going to do a story involving that...thing in the former Castle of the Two Sisters. Glad to see you are.

7292334 That's the plan at least, I just, honestly have no idea how to start it.

7294161 You know it generally makes more sense if you actually read the rest of the fanfic.

7294562 I admit, I probably screwed that scene up. I, have a problem about not thinking plot points through all the way (or I think them through way too much which can be almost as bad), you're right, I handled that badly, I don't have any fair way to justify it even, I screwed up, plain and simple, I apologize.

I am glad you enjoyed it otherwise.

7294562 I'm going to attempt to fix some of these problems honestly, can't promise it'll be perfect.

7504323 Aww thanks, I tried my best, glad you liked it :scootangel:

7504360 I enjoyed writing it, I'm currently working on the sequel... slowly.

7504392 Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo are two of my favorite characters in the show, so its always fun to write fanfics focusing on them, so I had a lot of fun with this one.

7504411 That they are, they're the two most awesome ponies in the show.

7504451 And their relationship does make this fanfic somewhat plausible.

7504482 And its way more popular than I dreamed, kinda funny since it was a random idea I came up with that then became a thing because of a prompt. Actually planning on writing another one shot or two for it.

7504556 Yeah, I'm just glad I took a chance on it and wrote it :twilightsmile:.

7504618 Yep, and I really look forward to writing more of this universe in the future.

Great read I loved it!

7507749 I think you have it confused with a different story, but I'm glad you liked it.

cuthulu, I know it's not really your thing, but please protect scootaloo.

7508710 Well, that's not a sentence you read every day :rainbowhuh:.

IT'S SO BEAUTIFUL!

7820751 Actually if you read the Sequel its stated to not be the Nightmare, but in the same class as the Nightmare.

7881834 Because, most people have good taste? I dunno, honestly it surprises me too sometimes.

7902401 Well I'm glad you're enjoying it, and yeah, that's exactly why she didn't tell her before... read the sequels and prequel too if you want.

7902420 I'm glad you did too, thanks for enjoying it.

Great!

You're the first author and story that I have had to hate other than myself!

YOU RUINED YOURSELF!!!

Why?

BECAUSE I DON'T AGREE WITH THE ****ING THEORY THAT RAINBOW DASH IS SCOOTALOO'S ****ING MOTHER

GAH!!! ****!!!

(*Takes a Very Deep Breath in* Much Better now *Screams in anger out loud*)

Anyhow other than that I think it would be a very good story.... IF IT DIDN"T HAVE JUST THIS ONE STUPID ELEMENT!!!

(Sorry, I've been in a very angry mood lately, I'm getting better though.)

7904103 Uh, you know its an alternate universe right? I don't actually believe that in the confines of the show, I just wanted to write a story with the concept.

7904107
Oh, I did not notice that
(*Gives a very shy smile* )
Sorry.

(Okay, now I don't hate the story at all, but I don't like it either, so that's why the dislike will still be up, sorry.)

7904111 Fair enough, I'm a little annoyed because I don't like it when people dislike a story just based on the concept, but at least you had the courtesy of saying so.

7904116
Hey, I'm always kind and nice, or at least I try to be, and until I actually read your story (which I might just do,) that dislike will still be up there. But hey, maybe your story will be so good it can persuade me, who knows? :)
(Reading right now... please wait.)
Done.
See above comments.

7904124 Well I hope you do like it when you eventually read it.

Only question I have i about what you said before that you said it would be a good story if it wasn't for that, its kinda built on that. I suppose it could've been done otherwise if it was just scootadopt, but... eh, yeah.

7904141 That is actually exactly what I was thinking after I wrote that scene, I've been meaning to get a picture based on it done.

7904181 Well there are sequels, its become my favorite alternate universe to write.

7904177
Yes, it is well written so I changed my dislike to a like (you're welcome)

And while I still DO NOT agree or support the theory, I can like a story because of how well written it is or its themes, message, (general) idea, etc.

7904145
You really should.
Because that would be great.

7904183 Thank you for giving it a chance, I'm glad you liked it despite not agreeing with the premise. And again like I said I don't think its the case in the show, this was just to explore the possibility.


7904184 I definitely will at some point.

This now has a playlist Audio Narration (and if you want it in One Video please say so since it was under an hour long total).

Note: 3&4 are a bit out of order, just a bit.

This is a very good story.

8164436 I suggest reading its several sequels and one prequel too.

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