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I wait in this cellar, for the madness outside to stop.
Warning there will be references to alcohol in this fic
Written as a writing prompt to Cutie (Re)mark.
Takes place in the Crystal Empire war timeline.
Special thanks to TheLuckyCosmos and RadicalDishonesty for editing this
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You need to remove some errant carriage returns in the middle of sentences, like:
Anyway, I am enjoying the self-hating Blueblood, here. Hating himself for his uselessness, even as he allows himself to stay useless by not doing anything to fix it...
6741957 Thank you very much for the comment I'm glad you enjoyed it.
If you have time, would you mind editing it or telling me what is wrong, because I tend to miss those kind of things.
Blueblood is a self-centered pony, isn't he? No matter how he tries to dress it up.
Unfortunately, by itself, this soliloquy feels incomplete - maybe like anything else Blueblood tries by himself?
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First of all, thank you for the comment, I'm sorry you feel that it is not complete. I think the interpretation of of Blueblood here that. He feels like he is useless and unprepared for war would just get in the way. He feels like there nothing he could do. And because of that he doen't even try to help and he makes up every excuse not to go.
In the end of the day he took the easy route here.
I think the ending line says it all for him here
Notice he don't call himself good, this is defeat, this not even trying and him hating himself for doing so.
At least that what I thought when I wrote it,now if you have more insight on this please let me know.
6749212 That's one of the main points, but I'm getting from this that Blueblood also doesn't truly care about the war:
Either he doesn't really grasp that it's defending all the ponies in Equestria, or he doesn't care about them. He's cynical and aloof.
Or at least he puts on that air - is his "I don't want to die" his core, and all the rest just his rationalizations? From the last line, he does have some inkling this's what would generally be called "wrong"...
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This is what reader is interrupting themselves. This story is what going in his head, while he is down there. Everything else is up to the reader to decide.
I loke this little story. Really gets into the psychology of a deserter. I don't think this is out-of-character for Blueblood and it was a quite interesting read.
7738204 thanks for the comment I'm glad you liked it.