oHey there. Mina the Echidna here. This is going to be the first book in the series "My Little Ponies and Me". This book will be starring me (my OC known as Mina Reddel), Twilight Sparkle, Spike, Sunset Shimmer, Starlight Glimmer, and all of the Mario Kart Wii characters. It will be about my OC, Twilight Sparkle, Starlight Glimmer, and Sunset Shimmer going into the world of Mario Kart Wii. My OC will be in all of these series. I could use some help about which ponies and equestria girls are going to be in this story, as well as which video game it should be about. I only know Mario games and Sonic games, so pick any game from Mario or Sonic. Ok? I hope you enjoy the story!!
Chapters (6)
Will you send a comment of a video game, a My Little Pony Equestria Girl, and a My Little Pony? Please? Because I need some ideas for the second story of the series.
6834608 captain toad, sonata dusk, and pinkie pie. :P
Pretty sure the rules say don't advertise in your own story.
Oh god!!!
Just when I thought bronies couldn't get any worse, it got mixed up with the horrendous Sonic fandom.
> Four out of six chapters have less than 1,000 words
Author, ya done goofed.
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6843362 You haven't seen the RD x Sonic shippings.
Do you guys want me to make a Sonic story or a Mario story? Your choice.
6844722 why restrict yourself with two series only?
6844722
How about neither? Is neither an option? How 'bout -- since this is a My Little Pony fan site -- just a My Little Pony story?
<<Elric of Melnipony
Good plan. Unless you have another choice for #2, I will take it.
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Good plan. If you have other ideas besides Mario and Sonic, just give them to me please.
6854698
No crossovers -- just ponies.
What did i just read?
Ok, so, she just acts like a completely overpowered Mary Sue, and instantly defeats her opponent? No final battle to the death whatsoever?
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Sorry that I didn't do any battle. I will do one next
Okay, all the grammar errors and that long-as-heck title and chapter names... I'm not even going to mention them because it'll be a huge waste of time.
Basically, you need a better story. While reading this, I was thinking, "Seriously, Mario Kart? My six-year-old brother would enjoy this." Why are you so focused on video games? Like 6855634 said, just make a regular MLP fic.
Also, your OC is what I would call a Mary Sue. First of all, she just randomly gets accepted into the Mane Six. Why? Starlight Glimmer got in, and I see why, but... your OC? That seems very unlikely. Also, after dying God knows how many times, she just magically springs back to life as if she had merely been sleeping. Seriously? After those last few times, I thought that she should've been dead a long time ago. Also, why the frick does she have some evil counterpart twin? I could list more reasons why I think you should alter your OC a bit more, but that would take up the entire comment box.
Please, don't take this personally. I'm trying to help you with your fics, and I may seem a bit harsh, but that's because I didn't really like the fic. But, I think that if you take baby steps and just start out with a regular MLP fanfiction, that your writing will improve and you can come back to creating amazing crossovers.
This story is bad
Duke Nukem Forever, Flash Sentry, Butt Stallion.
You're welcome.