A unicorn's magic is a very personal thing, it being a vital component in their lives and their primary means of interacting with the world around them. However, for some unicorns magic is something much, much more. When Castor's horn was lost due to an unfortunate injury, this budding young spellwriter's self image was taken with it and she was left no longer knowing who she was. Physically surviving the blow to the head was one hurtle to overcome, but the days, weeks, and months following the injury revealed just how large of a piece of herself that she had lost.
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Interesting, will follow.
This story is excellent, and I can't wait for the story to move on from this point - grief and bitterness - towards hope and acceptance.
I only hope that you don't give this story up - it is an excellent read for those that have suffered serious disabling injuries and can't seem to come back up.
After all, one of the things that really help one that suffers such a life-changing event is both love and friendship.
Um... just in case the author wonders about me favoriting it without apparently reading it: I've been lurking around quite a while, and only now made an account.
And I cannot wait to see how you will guide Castor Star towards her future. :)
Yeah... being a patient in a hospital is a raw deal.
I like the fact that you managed to describe the hospitalary environment and its effect on Castor, as well as the emotions she felt when looking at a unicorn using magic in front of her.
The other thing I quite like about this chapter is how you handled showing, not telling what Castor was going through. That in itself is quite a feat.
This is quite a human thing for someone who suffered a big loss in functionality - to try and do something to prove to yourself that you're not as useless as you think you are.
Sadly, though, we can be very stubborn to accept help.
This story (Yeah, even the future chapters I've read as a lurker) give a very unique perspective that not many authors are able to successfully portray.
I congratulate you on the skill shown in this tale. Please don't forget us readers. :)
Certainly you managed to grasp the notion of people that believe that saying "I'm Sorry" will make things better for both victim and cause of the incident. One can only feel simpathy for Castor, since the cause of her disabling injury had a lot of gall to show up that early.
Forgiveness is all well and good, but if the cause of such terrifying injury (which could have even caused death) was done by the stupidity of someone else that called itself friend - well, how much of a friend was he to behave in such stupid way?
Since I've read this story up to the last chapter posted, all I can say is "one can forgive, but can tell someone to go to hell and never come back", if the cause of the rift is meritory of such action.
That pegasus sure doesn't deserve any mercy - in fact, I was shocked that you didn't portray Castor and her parents suing him for the harm done. If anything, he should have paid for the expenses incurred rather than her parents suffering debt because of his foolishness.
Well, it is good to re-read this story. :)
Welp, I cannot help but agree with Dante's mother about cutting him off until he learns responsibility - after all, it was HIS fault his entire family suffered a big loss.
I've seen people being cut off completely by their families for much less, but then again it might mean they are merciless.
I wouldn't feel full of mercy if one of my offspring - systematically irresponsible - caused that much damage in my household. I would hold him accountable.
We'll see if Dante learns responsibility at the expense of both his family and legs.
I like how you portrayed the desire of someone that suffered a big loss in functionality to be independent as soon as possible.
It is quite impressive the way you managed to give plausibility to Castor's situation - considering human beings don't have horns.
Only thing, there is a need for minor checkups for words missing a letter - but I'm certain that a keen-eyed editor might help smooth out even further your work, which is already a pleasure to read as it is.
The classic battle between adaptation and pride... quite a human thing to suffer when disabled.
But, as it is, it is one of the most distressing situations one previously autonomous person could suffer: to be reduced to a state of dependence.
Good job portraying that in this chapter.