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She got WAY too into it too quickly.
It would have been better if you had another two chapters.
I liked the story but it seemed like the wife gave in too quickly I think it would have been helped if she either just as angry or more angry than her husband about this then like her husband gave after realizing there was other choice because we know there is nothing else for them if they leave now and went back to Earth but that is just my opinion I still favorited it so it was still enjoyable for me
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I had Jen purposely be portrayed as more timid, easily deceived, and more likely to be "broken" than Jack. As Jen would be more vulnerable to stallion Musk than Jack would be to mare Heat.
7363178 Still would have been better id you'd left it another chapter for her to reach that point.
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Maybe, but I am seeing how this story works so i can consider a bonus chapter of what happens to them a year later.
7363194 I would love to see that
Could see a murder suicide in their future, with human relations maybe taking a hit if they learn that they were bought as sex slaves.