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Brainiac has existed for eons. Seen planets and solar systems rise and fall. Witnessed stars die. Now he's in Equestria. But something's different about this world. He must blend in if he wishes to conquer and leave. A new body would work perfectly.
This version of Brainiac is a little bit of a combination of the animated series one and the one from the comics.
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The fact that Celestia is having a premonition about Brainiac's arrival feels wrong and a load of BS. I've read other stories much like this minus the premonitions and it just feels more plausible. Also please, if you could, explain why she gets a premonition.
Celestia has had premonitions of danger before. Honestly I didn't really think it was a good idea for Celestia to have a vision either but I had to pound in the danger of the threat to give her the excuse of staying in Canterlot to prepare a spell. Otherwise, why wouldn't she just go with them. Coincidentally that was part of my first draft but it felt a little too overloaded on side plot with it so I dropped it.
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Also I think you may be right about it being a little BS. Why would Celestia have such a specific vision in the first pace, it's not like she's ever known how everything's going to work out ahead of time
But seriously, thanks for the comment and the cirticism
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That's not to say that the story was bad , I feel that you could of done this a little differently maybe instead of a vision you could of had her visit a city other than manehatten and Brainiac so happens to attack the place. That being said seeing her own ponies fall to the beast could be a good and simple way of displaying just how big a threat Brainiac is. Just a suggestion but overall I found the story to be quite entertaining and humorous, it definitely deserves a like
Hope we can one day get a followup. I quite liked this story.
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Thanks! Got a lot of stuff I'm working on right now but I have a special place in my heart for this story
This was quite the read! Brainiac's always been one of my favorite comic book villains, and this story was just amazing! I strongly urge a sequel, and I eagerly await what you have in store for the future of this story. Great work!
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I've got a sequel story in mind. Granted I'm working on something right now that's taking up most of my time but I am determined to return to this world and expand upon it.
7485421 Have you done it yet?
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Sadly, no. My real life is starting to take up more and more of my free time and I'm finding myself with less and less incentive to write. I've got ideas but not enough time to really put down a foundation for them. It sucks too, because I really like the idea I had for this sequel. I might come back soon and edit this though. If and when I do I'll try to start it up again.
I know it's unlikely this will be responded to, but: I'm actually kind of curious what ideas you might have had for continuations in this setting beyond the obvious "Luthor's copy of Brainiac gets loose and follows over to Equestria", since from the looks of things it might be unlikely that we'll see them written up. Maybe Brainy would've ended up having to further reconcile his past and the whole divide between machine and organic, becoming sort of a thousand-year-early pony equivalent of canon's Brainiac 5?
In any case I greatly enjoy this story - this is reread number... two or three over the past few years? I'm glad that you've finished this story and most of your others; all too often good stories die early. Whether you write in this space or not ever again I hope you manage to get your writing mojo back someday.