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Shimmer Shy


"I know. And counting on my own experiences, they'll forgive you." ~Sunset Shimmer :heart: SunLight FriendShipper. Sorry guys, I'm not going to be active here anymore!

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Takes place about a month after the Battle of the Bands.


Now that the Dazzlings are reformed, they go to Canterlot High. But that doesn't mean anyone else has forgiven them, except for one Pink-Haired girl...

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 22 )

"Yeah, you may have destroyed our pendants, taken away the one thing that allows us to sound beautiful and ultimately ruined our lives forever. But ah, what the heck, let's be friends!"

Let me give you a little bit of constructive criticism here. This story is interesting, but I don't think Adagio would accept Pinkie Pies friendship just like that, it just felt, I dunno, a little bit rushed. Thats all I have to say. I hope this comment helps you out.

6317198 Yeah. I'm not very good with these type of stories. :twilightblush: Thanks. I'll try to make future stories a bit better. :raritywink:

6317198 I can agree, It felt a bit rushed. I still did enjoy it, tough. :twilightsmile:

Such a sweet ending, upvote! :pinkiehappy:

6318840 Your welcome mate. Anyway if you got time on your hands, you should check out my very first fanfic. The name of the story is Hysteria, I won't bore you with the details, but give it a read. And if you like it, don't forget to give it a like, its an okay story if I do say so myself.

6319292 Well, I don't really read stories with the sex tag. :twilightoops::twilightblush: Sorry.

6319413 Not to worry, no actual sex really happens its just there for sexual references.

6319413 There we go, I got rid of the sex tag. I guess it was just a little misleading.
:pinkiehappy:

6318942 So did I, I finished the whole story. Anyway have you checked out my very first fan fic yet. If not, give it a go and if you like it, please give it a like, I worked very hard on the first chapter, making sure everything was perfect, but the fic isn't finished yet. The first chapter is up and the story is named Hysteria. I hope you like it.

Good story, but like Midnightrun said, Adagio would not be the type to jump in on the party wagon, but instead Pinkie would have to persuade her that its gonna be fun.

Good, but being nice, with Aria, I would think she would take the longest and perhaps get Adagio to help

Good story,but I don't like the idea of reformed Dazzlings

WOW, I'm impressed, a party for all three of the dazzlings, good job pinkie pie

6550630 Everyone gets a party no matter what the cost! :pinkiecrazy: :raritywink:

Looking at this story I think it can be improved.
Firstly, I do not think you need to separate this story into 3 chapters. A single one-shot would have done better personally.
Secondly, Maybe you can make the story better by adding on more Pinkie Pie Cartoonist behaviour in this story as she prepare each party. Like she dashing off in a puff of smoke or breaking the forth wall.
Finally, you could have made the setting for each individual party different as in the theme of each party suitable for each siren.

Overall, I would say I give this story an A for effort but thanks for trying. :pinkiehappy:

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