It's a lovely autumn evening (fall, for all my 'murican homies). The sunset over the horizon is simply stunning, as its reflected light pools out and radiates across the sea. Feeling lucky to be alive, I sit at my typewriter and begin working my magic. Just as I'm about to press the first button, Spike barges in, looking rather frazzled.
"What the hay Marshall!" He roars indignantly, "You wrote a prequel?!"
Smiling, coolly I reply, "I thought it'd be fun." As if that was all that needed to be said.
Spike wasn't having any of it. "Fun? Wasn't the first story good enough for you? Haven't you torn up my character enough? How miserable do I have to be before you're happy!?"
"Hey," I begin, noticing his contradiction, "I hooked you up with AJ."
"Touche."
"Besides," I continue, "it isn't that bad. Just a bit of humor and quirk. No harm done boyo."
Spike had turned his glaring eyes from me and directed them to focus on the sunset outside. I noticed beyond the anger and frustration, a hint of fear. Then I noticed the other signs. He was sweating and nervously pulling at his hands, trying to get something out of his mind.
"Spike. What's bothering you?"
"What, me? Nothing!" Spike said defiantly.
"I just wrote a flippin' paragaph on how nervous you are, so what's wrong!"
"Well..." Spike begins in uncertainty, "prequels are known for stinking with a bad reputation. I'm just worried that it might ruin this story."
Then his pupils shrank and his knees buckled in an expression that could only be read as horror.
"Sweet mother of Celestia, you didn't include Jar Jar Binks did you? DID YOU!"
"Only Discord, my friend."
"That really doesn't make it any better..."
Well ladies and gentlemen, in case you haven't sussed it out already, there is prequel to this story! Though I recommend you read this story first, I hope you enjoy it all the same. Thus, may I present to you, the second story in the holy galactic library of Marshall_Evergreen.
Enjoy!
Marshall out.
omg i loved this
so nice
maaaan i love this brotherly relationship thing between Discord and Spike
i always image those two being very good friends someday
6331783 That's what I was going for
Sweet tea and biscuits!
5..55...559...5...559 views!!??
And how many likes...52...FIFTY TWO!!??
THIS IS AWESOME
Thanks for all the views and likes.
And a big thanks to those who have disliked. Evidently, I have something to improve on...SPLENDID!!
Thanks again. I'm glad you guys enjoyed my work.
Marshall Out.
Needs major polishing.
6413052 Yeah, that chapter was really added as an after-thought, mainly to steer people towards the second story in the series.
But if you were refering to the fiction as a whole, I still agree.
This certainly isn't the best story out there, and was more experimentory than official.
The fiction as a whole is probably rushed and I feel it very juvenial.
Fact is, as an author, you are rarely satisfied with your own stories... well this is true for me in any case; there's always some way to improve.
I've talked to other authors in the past who have felt the same with their own work. I'm just glad that some people have enjoyed it. The sequel kinda failed
As for this story, I might polish up the last chapter, but I'm gonna leave the rest. If anything, I can look back someday and hopefully see how far I've come.
In any case, I'd like to offer my sincere thanks for your feedback. I've rarely recieved constructive critism in the past and I really appreciate this. Though I love all the positive feedback, I still treasure these comments because they keep me challenged and motivate me to improve.
So thanks again!
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No problem. My issue is with formatting of things such as dialogue.
Things like
and this
and this
are unacceptable. You must change paragraphs every single time you change speaker. And either you indent every paragraph or you indent none of them. And you should always skip a line between paragraphs.
6413857 Holy crap, that's bad!
I did indent the paragraphs and tended to split each paragraph with a single space.
Much
Like
this.
When it should be:
like
this.
Noted. Thanks a bunch for correcting this. It's embarrassing to say that completely slipped my notice, Which it did.
Oh well.
"A man who asks is a fool for five minutes, but the man who doesn't, is a fool for life."
It's embarrassing, yes. But in the end this will improve the story a lot.
Or atleast make it easier to read, in turn making more enjoyable
...hopefully.
I'll get to editing it right away. Should take 10-15 minutes tops. Hopefully it will satisfy you.
Thanks again.
6414331
No trouble.
If you're writing in Word, don't bother with indenting in the document, because Fimfic won't detect that, anyway; highlight the body of your story in the chapter edit view and use the Increase Indent button to get a consistent indent everywhere. You must manually create your skipped lines by pressing ENTER twice; just having the computer automatically double space it won't transfer over to Fimfic. Any bolding, italicizing, or underlining must be done in Fimfic with the tags , , and written out in order to show up in the story view. Fimfic automatically aligns left, can be made to align center, and cannot align right. It does not justify. If you want to use a specific text color, you must select it within the story editor. The same applies for fonts and sizes. Fimfic only has basic text editing capabilities, so anything fancy you might want to try is unlikely to work. All these limitations may apply for Google Docs, which does not always import perfectly. Always go over each chapter in the editor before you publish it. You will catch many errors you did not even know you made.
6414592 After revising the spacing, I was able to find a couple spelling mistakes and other kinks in the story. Nothing too major. But over all, I feel much more satisfied with this story.
It'll certainly teach me to be more careful with my other stories. Good to see I'm improving.
I need to thank you and 6216891 for pointing out the problems in spacing with this story, allowing this story to develop.
6426492 Thanks. Though, be warned, the last chap isn't part of the story, it's basically just a link to the prequel story...which kinda failed.
But thanks again for your comments. I deeply appreciate them.
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Oh my...
HOW DID I MISS THAT!?!?!?!?!
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I am so grateful to you for pointing this out...
But I'm too embarrassed and humiliated to feel grateful right now.
It's been fixed.
Hope it didn't screw up the experience too much.
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Thanks again.
I hope these mistakes aren't paining you too much.
I love your stories man, AppleSpike FTW
6967613 Thanks dude.
This was a well written story. One of the things I enjoy about these kinds of stories is the fact that there is some time put into building up the relationship. Also this is one of my favorite ships. Bravo!