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"Adagio say's that we should never, ever, ever, hurt each other, but Adagio doesn't seem to know anything. She doesn't know about the scars on my chest. She doesn't know what Aria and I get up to in the attic these days.
She might know, but is afraid to tell. I think it happened to Adagio too."
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this is... intresting...
This is going to be fun.
I'm terrified. And excited. I want to see where this will go.
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That's the exact reaction I want to give the readers.
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Glad that you like it.
5966497
Indeed.
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It's also the reaction I'm trying to get from readers in my stories (particularly my FNAF BvM stuff), but I think that you're doing a better job than I am. But maybe I'm just being too judgmental of myself. Dunno. That's why I comment on other people's stories: to provide constructive criticism and illuminate well-done stuff.
And to just talk when I have nothing better to do.
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I'm sure that they do get that reaction while reading your F.N.A.F. stories. but they just never pay much mind to it, because, they know that it was probably supposed to make me feel that way.
In this story, however, the reader had no idea where this story was going, so it was a strange twist thing you know.
Oh no you're doing great.
This was a really good story. My only complaint is that it felt rather slipshod, especially at the end. For instance, I don't understand how Aluizotale (really bad spelling) got into the human world. Is there another version of the Equestrian Aluizotale or is the one able to jump between worlds?
Plus, the plot just moved too fast. The story was high suspense, but it's like a crazy thunderstorm that Just stops as quickly as it began.
I understand if this was more of a story you didn't want to go on for a long time, but I'm just giving you suggestions for future stories. These are things I'm trying to avoid in my own writing. And it's why FNAF Cybersense is taking so long for me to write and why I have so many short chapters where not much happens. I have the characters, their overall personalities, and the gist of what I want to happen, but the trouble is nailing the suspense and presenting the events smoothly.
Just thought I should give you some advice. Can't wait for your next story!
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The story was generally supposed to be a little rushed. I mean, I tried to pretend that I was Sonata telling you the story. So if you know Sonata, then she probably would tell the story in a more rushed than it actually happened, at least that's how she is in the story. 
Thank you.