Rainbow Dash is the element of Loyalty. The living embodiment of the concept of being there for someone, through thick or thin, but no matter who you are, the road of redemption is a long one. And a hard one- even with help from somepony like Rainbow Dash
(Oh, you're going into this story blind, but Rainbow Dash isn't the only character)
You just lost the game. That's what you get for trying to sneak a peek at the story by looking at the comments. :P In all seriousness though, interesting start. This is going to be good.
I don't think it would spoil too much to add the other character tag.
Anyway, strong start and good structure. I eagerly, and maybe a tad impatiently, await your next chapter
Definitely a good start, and I look forward to seeing how this goes.
Why am I such a sucker for these stories?
WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!