• Member Since 15th Apr, 2012
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Ghost Cobbraaa

hi, Im simple =D

Comments ( 12 )

It's rather quick, and cuts out on a lot of their relationship; but, it's a nice one-shot story. :pinkiesmile:

Also, I'm not sure where you're going with the "blue eyes" thing, but it sounds like you're trying to say RD has blue eyes... if so, you should know that they're actually maroon. :rainbowderp:

It doesn't really earn a thumbs up from me, but I've seen so many horrible attempts here before that I should note this is far from a thumbs down.

One thing I would suggest is fixing the spelling errors on the story's description page; they give the impression that the rest of the story may be like that as well, and readers will stay far away from any story with bad spelling mistakes, and even thumbs down it before giving it a chance. :scootangel:

If I were to rate it in it's current state, I'd have to give it 1.5 stars. :coolphoto:

tbh i really enojyed that :) you have earned yourself your first thumbs up and a new fan! 4/5 stars :)


it wasnt realy ment to be a story, more of a... damn, I don't know what you would call it. A poetic wrighting (?) a prompt (?)

the point is that I left out the charactor development and evrything for a reasion. There is not suposed to be an actual story line. It's just... poetry (?) Not sure what it is realy. But not realy a story.

I think the 1.5 stars is a little of a low ball, but I respect your opinion :pinkiesmile:


wow, thank you :twilightblush:

Can't faveret this becuaes it's romantic, and you know how I have a very pregedics tast for the darker themes. But this is anther nice brack from all that:trollestia:

This had a bunch of spelling mistakes that need fixing; most notable one is where you've spelt 'genital' instead of 'gentle' :P


FUCK M.S.N SPELLCHEAK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
realy? I was expecting the "ewwwww, romance' from you :rainbowlaugh:


Uhm, I re-read it and I can't find that spacic error. Care to help? :twilightsheepish:

512223 I found it! Second paragraph, beginning of last sentence. :twilightsmile:

Other than a few spelling mistakes, it was good. :pinkiesmile:


thank you =D and sorry, having a 'genital smile' is not suposed to be part of the story :raritywink:

Not a bad little one shot. Kinda choppy and the spelling is a little confusing at times but still well worth the read :twilightsmile:

506892 They aren't maroon either, maroon is a very dark red. Rbd's eyes are more of the less either magenta more of a Wine Color or A Pinkish Rose. Actually yes, they are a Pinkish Rose Or A Bright Magenta. But i certianley think that they are a Pinkish Rose.:rainbowderp::derpyderp1::derpyderp2::derpytongue2:

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