Get back up
You're almost doing it Scootaloo! Just a little more...
The orange pegasus filly puffed short, sharp breaths, gritting her teeth and curling her lip in annoyance as her tiny wings flapped back and forth so fast you could barely see them. She looked almost like a hummingbird. Most ponies would have made an amusing spectacle out of her struggle to lift off the ground. I have to admit, it did look kinda funny. Her huffing and puffing and straining every muscle as her feathers tried to grab the sky and repetitively failed. If you were watching, you may have laughed at her vain efforts.
But it was hard for me to laugh at this.
She was fired with so much determination, the thought of flight locked and sealed as if stamped in her brain. The way she kept at it... It was admireable. I continued to view her practice as she gritted her teeth so iron hard I swear you could hear it, and her wings (against all odds of the eye) began to flap faster. You would think they were about to fall off. She inhaled and exhaled with short breaths, her very being poised in the act of success.
And for a moment, she did it. Her feathered tickled the wind and her hooves began to loose weight, her violet hair blowing slightly in the sudden wind. Soon all mass was lost from the ground as she hovered in midair, eyes wide with self-accomplishment as if she was trying to catch the moment and never, ever let it escape her. But her almost trance-like state shattered as gravity regained control and she cascaded down, her face meeting the ground in a less then friendly welcome. I was tempted to call out to her, anything to reassure that she was OK. But it soon presented itself as she lifted her face out of the woodland clearing's dirt, coughing with an angry tone and spitting out some additional flecks of grass.
"Well that was a waste of time..." Scootaloo sighed mournfully over lost moments. She proceeded to lower her head in a depressed attitude and stomp away from the failed flight launch site. She just looked so... Lifeless. Almost like a doll.
I was so absorbed in my thoughts that I barely noticed her change in direction. Her path had been altered from that leading to the schoolhouse to that deeper into the friendly back-forest. And that was exactly where I was hiding.
Her eyes widened so big that I thought they were going to pop right out of her head. An expression of anger- no... annoyance- no... confusion- no... It was embarrassment mixed in with absolutely livid fury.
"RUMBLE!? WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE!?" I shrunk back into the leaves instinctively, flattening my ears to the back of my head and letting a nervous laugh escape my muzzle. The fillies eyes burned into my soul, so to speak. But really, she was SCARY. "What," she repeated, "are you doing here?" I searched desperately for an excuse that wouldn't sound... creepy. Really creepy.
"Uh... I just... like watching you practice." I said slowly. That wasn't too bad. It didn't sound creepy... at least I didn't think so. Scootaloo, however, did not appear amused.
"RUMBLE! What I do here is my thing! And when I faceplant, its embarrassing WITHOUT some nosy colt watching!"
"I'm sorry, I just-" I paused, the roof of my mouth becoming dry while small beads of sweat accumulated and rolled down my face, sticking in my fur.
"You just what huh!?"
"I... wanna help you." Scootaloo immediately jerked her head back, eyes menacing.
"Why would I need any help?"
"No reason... I just thought I could give you a hoof with the flying thing." Scootaloo looked at me, the anger replaced with curiosity.
"Hmmph. I guess you could show me how other ponies do it. But, ya know, I could totally learn on my own." I relaxed a tad. She was actually going to let me help her. I soon tensed again as she lifted an orange hoof and pointed it at me. "But I still don't forgive you for the whole stalker thing." I smiled sheepishly.
"Sorry..."
"Whatever. Lets get to practice!"
I gently took the eager fillies lead and leaped, slightly clumsily, out of the dewy holly bush that had been my retreat. I felt the wind tickling my wings, feeding me the nature given pegasi instinct to fly. My feathers relaxed and spread from my back, revealing my pair of grey wings. I then felt the breeze curling around me, talking to me in a language that only the ones with wings could ever possibly understand. The gale caught under my wings in a sudden swoop as I began flapping them slowly and feeling my feet lift from the ground as I hovered in the midair. I breathed in a deep breath, feeling the everlasting calm of being here, the sky above me and ground below me. Scootaloo only breathed out in excitement.
"How are you doing that!?" I smiled shyly.
"You just have to practice. Have another go at it." She tried to imitate my motions, and I watched as she spread her smaller-then-normal orange wings. The breeze was drawn towards her, but I could feel it becoming unstable as it caught one wing, then another as her feathers ruffled unpleasantly and her wings flapped for all she was worth. Of course, this pattern ultimately led to the wind deciding that it didn't want to carry her, and her wing following the lead with a cramp. She dropped to the ground again, greeting the un-welcoming dirt once more. She lifted her dirt scattered face out of the ground and blushed slightly in clear embarrassment. I sighed, but my face was full of excitement. "Try again. You'll get it."
"Ya think so?"
"I know so."
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Awwwww2
Where's the romance?
5197410
Someone asked me for a rumbleoo fic, and I decided i'd put the romance tag so long as I hinted at some stuff.
Thanks for the fave!
I have to agree – where's the romance?
This story could have gone places... but then it didn't.
She didn't even get any real flying instruction, just "What you were doing, do it some more."
Add that to a few grammar errors, and this goes into the 'meh' pile.
5197434
Respectful.
I agree that the romance may have been missing, and I think meh is a good grade.
Thanks for your opinion!
This was cute. Even if yes, I agree with ocalhoun. There's no romance, maybe just friendship, and flight instructions: WHAT KIND OF MENTOR IS HE?? XD
5197842
LOL
"ok Scootaloo! Just do what you've been trying to do and failing at for years!"
*Blinks*
I'm glad you thought it was cute.
I promised someone rumbleoo, and I just needed the tag...
Thanks for reading!
Not mainstream romance but I could see the romantic hints within.
Rumble watching scoots= affection.
Rumble impressed by scoots determination= smitten.
Rumble not laughing at scoots= respect to her feelings.
Rumble helping scoots with encouraging words=shy affection to scoots.
The romantic hints are here, most people simply think of romance as in your face.
But no this is the start of a affectionate relationship, schoolyard romance if you will.
Flowed well, style great a few errors a sentence near the front was jumbled.
Overall great fix loved it!
"admirable".
5198268
Thanks!
Yeah, I found a way to sneak little bits of childish romance in there.
I mean come on.
Hes stalking her.
XD
But really, thanks for pointing out the mistakes and I'm glad you enjoyed
5198935
Many thanks good ma'am/sir.
Cool story bro but, where's the romance? There better be a sequel to this story! You got so much potential here, you know what, F#CK IT!
We'll do it live!
PM me if you want to make a story deal. There's a lot of unused potential for this story, don't let it go to waist!
5199728
I might be up for something like that.
A sequel sounds nice too.
Do you mean like a co-write?
5199740 if you'd like, I am one to know his way around a romance story. I even helped with one and I'm working on another romance story with another person. But I can squeeze you in on my schedule for co writing stories.
1,031 words?
Short enough for a quick review
Narration, wich is fine thinking that this is a fic, but a Sin anyways.
Also, Scootaloo
Haha, it's funny because it looks like a chicken... oh.
Oh, so it was narration!
Also, Rumble
Do not confuse with Hoofing
Fangirlin'
Also, I think I've spotted a mispelled word.
Gravity is a dick to chickens
Also, did I'd memed right?
No commas where hurted in the doing of this fic
What?
Mad Father all over again.
Yes it did
Shadow of Scootaloo
That's racist
A little fic, with nothing about Shipping, unless the constant creeping out of Rumble counts, and in that case, I prefer the other kind of Stalker. Paragraphs problems, and a lot. I said it before in this review, and I say it again, no much comma use.
Overall is a nice little fic, nothing too serious.
5201289 Wow, your REALLY good at reviewing! I have never see such a good review before, you spot everything list is politely, and that makes a WORLD of a difference. Really cool.
5197417 OHMEHGURD YOU ACTUALLY WROTE IT!!! :D!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU ARE THE BEST WRITER EVER!
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5201682
Urmurgurd
Dat number doh
XD
Thanks
5201682
*bows*
Thanks sir/mam
5201704 You are welcome Sir/Madam (profile pic threw me off, its an epic pic BTW.)
Simple, but cute. I liked how Scootaloo and Rumble were characterized and it managed to get a smile out of me, which is something I highly appreciated. Great job!
5224787
Aww, thank you! I'm glad it made you happy <3
5224805 You're welcome.
5201704
I kindly thank you for the review, it made me smile <3
5237326
It was my pleasure
The ending didn't really seem like it was the end. Still love though, it's real cute!
We need a sequel fore the romance part