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Rumble has always had his eyes set out for Scootaloo, but he never had the guts to tell anypony. Not even Thunderlane, his brother. However, Scootaloo almost runs into him on her scooter one special day, and that's when the feeling of love begins.

My first shot at a shippingfic or whatever you wanna call it, and an attempt at a story with no dialogue. :)

Also, this is a story with 1,000 words! I never thought could do that.

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Comments ( 12 )

Short sweet and to the point little repetitive grammar early but nothing that hurt the story. Good job. 4.5/5 (cuz there is always room to improve)

Eh. It was a thousand words. I'll give you that. Overall: Meh.

Scootumble is nice.

A tomcolt(Scootaloo) and a tomfilly(Rumble) make a cute couple.

A sweet story not the best grammar but still a good story

Rumble was unlike most male fouls

foul; English definition of “foul”:noun [C] /faʊl/
C2 an act that is against the rules of a sport, often causing injury to another player:
ex: He was sent off for a foul on the French captain.

try to ride the scooter himself

Trust me, you don't. I learn it the hard way.

4445915 I'm confused...did I spell "foul" wrong or something? Did I use it wrong? :rainbowhuh: :twilightblush:

4457356 Did you mean to say

Rumble was unlike most male foals

D'aaaawwww.:rainbowkiss:
.......
Sequel please? :fluttershysad:

5161200 I doubt it. I'm not a big romance fan. :twilightblush:

5182363 :raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair::raritydespair:

Your stories are still good though!:rainbowkiss::trollestia:

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