Well... that was all very touching and sweet, but I still feel like Will should have banged his sister. I also think Scoots should have tied Rainbow down and tickled her until she said yes to the herd. Because of that, I have to give a low rating of 9.2/10 for the whole story.
6002707 I have to rate this a miserly 9.3/10 for getting Rainbow to admit she loves the both of them.And the feelings.Can't wait to see where this finally ends up.
im more interested to see the parents reaction will "mom, dad.... i want you to meet my mare friend." scoot "....hi...." dad "..........hello....." mom ".... so what will the children look like?" scoot & will "... wut...!"
Thank GOD there's no herd in this. And finally Rainbow's soggy secret comes up, we just had to wait until the end of the fic for that bridge to be crossed.
I don't think this needs a sequel, it would be severely overextending the life of the plot as is and I really don't see Will going on some kind of insane adventure. He's a casual at life after all.
ADDENDUM: I really don't care about all the downvotes, peepul. This isn't a shitpost, and I can live with a bunch of fellow internet surfers disagreeing with my opinion.
6003020 Thank you kindly as well! Though I hate to admit I don't think it'll be 'hot.' I mean, there might be some people into that kind of thing, but I don't think it's quite what you have in mind! Honestly, I've grown pretty tired of clop. I'm not going to be including it as much in my works from now on unless I really get the urge to write some. Not cutting it out completely, mind! But expect about as much in the sequel as there was here. More of a side note where appropriate than the main attraction.
Yessssssssssss, I love this ending. I think it wrapped things up in a nice little bow. I really enjoyed seeing them all together, and acting semi-normal again. It's good to see all the best buds together again. And seeing something go well for Rainbow as well, that was really nice. And it was cool seeing Scoots little proposition come up and get dealt with. I'm looking forward to how these relationships show in the sequel.
6002799 I'm really sorry you felt that way. It was a really hard segment to write because how do you go about explaining something like what happened to him? Something completely impossible by every stretch of the imagination? Especially when your only proof is a bunch of photos. Something that's far easier to believe were manipulated than actually being real? Not to say I did that chapter flawlessly as I certainly know I didn't, however I did do the best I could. Again, I'm sorry it wasn't to your liking.
As for technology, what use would he have for most of it? What would he even use a computer for in Equestria? I guess there might be a few convenience things he could do with it, but... he's been making do without just fine for months. A cell phone? Wouldn't work without signal. He's already got a TV. What technology would really make a difference? And that's assuming he even could make it work. Most things in Equestria run on magic, not electricity. He'd have to find some way to rework them, and he's no engineer, magical or no.
And as for the gun? Just... no. That goes against everything the show is about. Even if he had wanted to bring a gun, which he wouldn't, the mane six would never let him use it. They don't kill things to solve their problems.
6002985 Well, I can't say much if I don't want to spoil what the sequel will be about, but all I can really ask is you give it a chance. I personally believe there's still a lot to tell about these characters and where their lives are going, but if you disagree I can understand. Thanks either way for sticking things out to the end!
Well I applaud your bold and mature decision to break from the norm and not taking the Harem ending. This story is great and you are a talented writer. Now having said that, I hope you choke you dream crushing, ship sinking SoB.
6003091 Thank you so much! This was probably the easiest chapter to write in a very long time. Believe it or not, I don't actually like my characters being all sad and hurting. That being said, the sequel is going to be MUCH happier now that all the drama is mostly behind us! And we have a certain Rarijack side story coming up next that I think you'll be interested in...
6003121 I only ask that you stay tuned for the sequel.
6003142 Oh thats when you <censored> on her <censored> <censored> while dangling a <censored> with <censored> and a <censored> <censored> <censored> so you have to <censored> sideways. I think the term bread comes from part with the <censored> yeast.
6003101 I'll check it out when you post it, your writing abilities warrant it. Whether or not I'll follow it is something that we'll see when we get there.
I... actually wasn't expecting the herd thing to be avoided. Well played indeed!
I'm glad Rainbow finally had her closure and everyone was happy in the end, but maaaan! I think I'm not the only one who was expecting a threesome or something similar . Still, I loved this chapter, it made me feel and giddy and mushy and stuff. I still think the last few paragraphs felt a little bit rushed and eager to just wrap things up, but maybe I'm just ahead of myself and everything will be perfect within the epilogue. I'll be eagerly awaiting for it!
And the side-stories too.
And the sequel as well.
And yes, Will should have banged his sister.
Again, thank you for the amazing story, I haven't been this hooked to a fic in a very long time, and I don't regret a single second stuck to the screen reading it. You are an amazing author! :D
6003164 Yes, my wallet agrees with your claims, it tells me it's going to be a good time and worth it. So worth it. But yeah man, it's good to see the last chapter of this. And to see some things resolve and everyone being happy campers again, for the most part at least.
You HAVE to include cheetos somewhere in the sequel. I just want to see Scoots or Rainbow high on a catnip-like induced state. It would be just hilarious
6003230 I Know right?! I mean it just makes so much sense!
I guess my earlier prediction of this story was somewhat viable. I can't remember what chapter it was but I said something along the lines of "Chasing a Rainbow led will to finding a pot of gold ."
Thanks for the chapter. Can't wait to see what else you have next.
Amazing story, I love it. Though I'd like to point something out that might bug some people. A story named "To find a Rainbow" didn't end up with the guy being with Rainbow. There's nothing wrong with it, but I know that it might bug some people. But hey, screw expectations! This story was awesome!
As this chapter comes to a close I have to say i am thoroughly satisfied with how this story has ended. Seriously I know I gave you a lot of shit in the past and although we hashed it out in a PM I did feel like I needed to post this.
You knew what you were doing and that is exemplary. I am sorry for giving you a hard time and I am happy I read it through to this point. I am a hard-ass and it has come from a lot of people fucking it up. You didn't fuck it up and you are amazing for it.
So you get a solid 9/10. I'm not getting over the portal thing since it is a personal gripe of mine for a LOT of stories but I'll relent to say it certainly moved the plot along and formed a very solid ending, and that made it all better.
An excellent ending by the way, to a fic that absolutely nobody thought was going to be more than a fic where you fuck Rainbow enough for her to want a relationship. Seriously did anybody who joined early on think that it was going to end this way? We were all expecting this clop-fic of barely any plot where we can read then move on. It moved past that and into pretty epic proportions I'd have to admit.
The relationship between all three of them was absolutely wonderful. It really gripped me to the end and you DIDN'T go the herd route (spoiler-ed for those getting into the story who can see this comment on the main page), which really if anything goes to show you know how relationships actually do work. How many other fics would have been "Welp we all fuck now story over everyone got what they wanted and nobody was hurt". Life isn't like that and you portrayed it very well.
Congrats on a job well done, can't wait for the epilogue.
Lastly for some reason all I could listen to was this as Rainbow flew away as in credits music.
The status says INCOMPLETE, so there is still more coming...
Oh... Dude, is Scoots gonna break up with him? I mean, that'd be heartbreaking and all, and the drama that ensues will be massive, but I feel like he belongs with Rainbow. The name of the story is To Find a Rainbow, so... Ugh, conflicting feels.
6003071 Clop no clop, the story was awesome. I was just hoping it would end with..ahem a bang.
On a more serious note, I can't wait got the sequel. I can't help wondering if it will somehow involve more of Will's family. Which should make for some interesting situations.
What a let down. I feel like i've been railroaded along this fic from the start.
Protip author: if you're going to write a scootsXhuman fic, then dont make the title and cover art about Rainbow Dash. Will save a lot of dissapointments and dislikes.
Downvote this comment all you want but i am entitled to my opinion as much as anyone else
“Squirt, herds need everypony involved to want to be together. Two out of the three liking things just isn’t enough! I can’t have… I can’t do herd stuff with you.
And yet Thunderlane is in a herd with twin sisters.
This feels like a contradiction. It doesn't have to be -- maybe Equestria is really tolerant of incest -- but given the seeming Western/American-centric values (by both the source material's source, as well as the very high age of consent which in the Western world only really applies to some states of the US), this threatens my suspension of disbelief. It's also certainly not explained very well in the story, and I'm pretty sure our protagonist doesn't pick up on this. As it would be such a massive clash of values, one would expect him to react with shock (and also throw this back at Twilight when she mentions his liaison with Scoots).
The alternative of course of that various herd members don't have to be personally involved with everyone else, which then completely negates Rainbow's comment.
6003823 I agree completely with you. Don't get me wrong, I like this story, but having us think that it is centered around a character when said character is pretty much referenced in the title just to have it flipped is kind of upsetting. But that's just my opinion.
Maaan, I am so glad that there was closure. Its one of my favorite feelings. While I would've liked the herd, I still appreciate the fact that you wrote it not happening. It certainly must be harder to do than "hey you wanna be in a herd?" "Sure" "sure!" "Okay lets all fuck now." It made me appreciate your writing a tad more when you didnt herd them.
I can't wait for the sequel!!
Also now that its finished (apart from the epilogue) I can recommend it to the site mod that does interviews!
Well... that was all very touching and sweet, but I still feel like Will should have banged his sister. I also think Scoots should have tied Rainbow down and tickled her until she said yes to the herd. Because of that, I have to give a low rating of 9.2/10 for the whole story.
Bravo! Another awesome chapter
6002707 I have to rate this a miserly 9.3/10 for getting Rainbow to admit she loves the both of them.And the feelings.Can't wait to see where this finally ends up.
6002799
6002707
im more interested to see the parents reaction
will "mom, dad.... i want you to meet my mare friend."
scoot "....hi...."
dad "..........hello....."
mom ".... so what will the children look like?"
scoot & will "... wut...!"
Thank GOD there's no herd in this. And finally Rainbow's soggy secret comes up, we just had to wait until the end of the fic for that bridge to be crossed.
I don't think this needs a sequel, it would be severely overextending the life of the plot as is and I really don't see Will going on some kind of insane adventure. He's a casual at life after all.
ADDENDUM: I really don't care about all the downvotes, peepul. This isn't a shitpost, and I can live with a bunch of fellow internet surfers disagreeing with my opinion.
6002933
Erf, the meeting with the parents. That'll be a wild card event for sure. It could go in any direction really.
It's been a ride for sure! Amazing story. I'm sad it's over ish. I'm looking forward to the epilogue, I hope it's hot.
6002998
hopefully the hilarious route!
6002707
Well maybe, just maybe, you should stick around for the epilogue! You never know what might happen!
6002758
6002805
Thankya kindly!
6003020
Thank you kindly as well! Though I hate to admit I don't think it'll be 'hot.' I mean, there might be some people into that kind of thing, but I don't think it's quite what you have in mind!
Honestly, I've grown pretty tired of clop. I'm not going to be including it as much in my works from now on unless I really get the urge to write some. Not cutting it out completely, mind! But expect about as much in the sequel as there was here. More of a side note where appropriate than the main attraction.
My thoughts as I went through the chapter!
"Oh shit, relationship drama. I want in." *grabs popcorn*
"Oh hey they're going to avoid the herd poly thing that's omnipre--"
"Oh. No. No they're not."
"Yes they are!"
Needs a comma to close it off!
I loved this ride. I'm not actually against the herd trope, but it's done everydamnwhere and it's refreshing to see a fic avoid it. Bravo.
Yessssssssssss, I love this ending. I think it wrapped things up in a nice little bow. I really enjoyed seeing them all together, and acting semi-normal again. It's good to see all the best buds together again. And seeing something go well for Rainbow as well, that was really nice. And it was cool seeing Scoots little proposition come up and get dealt with.
I'm looking forward to how these relationships show in the sequel.
6002799
I'm really sorry you felt that way. It was a really hard segment to write because how do you go about explaining something like what happened to him? Something completely impossible by every stretch of the imagination? Especially when your only proof is a bunch of photos. Something that's far easier to believe were manipulated than actually being real? Not to say I did that chapter flawlessly as I certainly know I didn't, however I did do the best I could. Again, I'm sorry it wasn't to your liking.
As for technology, what use would he have for most of it? What would he even use a computer for in Equestria? I guess there might be a few convenience things he could do with it, but... he's been making do without just fine for months. A cell phone? Wouldn't work without signal. He's already got a TV. What technology would really make a difference? And that's assuming he even could make it work. Most things in Equestria run on magic, not electricity. He'd have to find some way to rework them, and he's no engineer, magical or no.
And as for the gun? Just... no. That goes against everything the show is about. Even if he had wanted to bring a gun, which he wouldn't, the mane six would never let him use it. They don't kill things to solve their problems.
6002985
Well, I can't say much if I don't want to spoil what the sequel will be about, but all I can really ask is you give it a chance. I personally believe there's still a lot to tell about these characters and where their lives are going, but if you disagree I can understand. Thanks either way for sticking things out to the end!
6002933
6002998
I do rather like writing about character's parents...
Well I applaud your bold and mature decision to break from the norm and not taking the Harem ending. This story is great and you are a talented writer. Now having said that, I hope you choke you dream crushing, ship sinking SoB.
6003071
Luna yeah! I'm hoping for bread sex.
6003125
I like to think I'm fairly well-versed in a lot of things. But...
What is bread sex?
6003142
Damn... Guess there won't be any... Oh well, but you haven't lived until you've had bread sex. Plus, pegasus love it!
6003077
Thanks for the catch!
6003091
Thank you so much! This was probably the easiest chapter to write in a very long time. Believe it or not, I don't actually like my characters being all sad and hurting. That being said, the sequel is going to be MUCH happier now that all the drama is mostly behind us!
And we have a certain Rarijack side story coming up next that I think you'll be interested in...
6003121
I only ask that you stay tuned for the sequel.
6003156
Pegasi also love cheetos, I hear...
6003167
Yes. This is 100% true. They go nuts for them.
Im so fucking mad at Rainbow. YOU MOTHERFUCKER!!!!!! You played him so fucking hard.
I got tp cool down>.<
6003142
Oh thats when you <censored> on her <censored> <censored> while dangling a <censored> with <censored> and a <censored> <censored> <censored> so you have to <censored> sideways. I think the term bread comes from part with the <censored> yeast.
6003188
See. This guy gets it.
6003188
OOOHHHHHHHHH, okay, I get it now. Thanks, bro!
6003101 I'll check it out when you post it, your writing abilities warrant it. Whether or not I'll follow it is something that we'll see when we get there.
I... actually wasn't expecting the herd thing to be avoided. Well played indeed!
I'm glad Rainbow finally had her closure and everyone was happy in the end, but maaaan! I think I'm not the only one who was expecting a threesome or something similar . Still, I loved this chapter, it made me feel and giddy and mushy and stuff.
I still think the last few paragraphs felt a little bit rushed and eager to just wrap things up, but maybe I'm just ahead of myself and everything will be perfect within the epilogue. I'll be eagerly awaiting for it!
And the side-stories too.
And the sequel as well.
And yes, Will should have banged his sister.
Again, thank you for the amazing story, I haven't been this hooked to a fic in a very long time, and I don't regret a single second stuck to the screen reading it. You are an amazing author! :D
6003213
Thank you! Finally, someone with some sense.
6003164
Yes, my wallet agrees with your claims, it tells me it's going to be a good time and worth it. So worth it. But yeah man, it's good to see the last chapter of this. And to see some things resolve and everyone being happy campers again, for the most part at least.
6003167
You HAVE to include cheetos somewhere in the sequel. I just want to see Scoots or Rainbow high on a catnip-like induced state. It would be just hilarious
6003230
I Know right?! I mean it just makes so much sense!
I guess my earlier prediction of this story was somewhat viable. I can't remember what chapter it was but I said something along the lines of "Chasing a Rainbow led will to finding a pot of gold ."
Thanks for the chapter. Can't wait to see what else you have next.
~8chill
6002707
Scoots should lock all of them together in a cabin.
6003305
I...love this idea! It's perfect! It's the only way this herd will work. Brilliant!
Will admit, (heh) little sad he didn't get with Rainbow. Ah well, still awesome story, and excited for sequel!
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Amazing story, I love it. Though I'd like to point something out that might bug some people.
A story named "To find a Rainbow" didn't end up with the guy being with Rainbow. There's nothing wrong with it, but I know that it might bug some people. But hey, screw expectations! This story was awesome!
6003305 XD "Hey Scoots, go see if Lyra will lend you her family's cabin! And tell me if there's still a spider in the kitchen!"
As this chapter comes to a close I have to say i am thoroughly satisfied with how this story has ended. Seriously I know I gave you a lot of shit in the past and although we hashed it out in a PM I did feel like I needed to post this.
You knew what you were doing and that is exemplary. I am sorry for giving you a hard time and I am happy I read it through to this point. I am a hard-ass and it has come from a lot of people fucking it up. You didn't fuck it up and you are amazing for it.
So you get a solid 9/10. I'm not getting over the portal thing since it is a personal gripe of mine for a LOT of stories but I'll relent to say it certainly moved the plot along and formed a very solid ending, and that made it all better.
An excellent ending by the way, to a fic that absolutely nobody thought was going to be more than a fic where you fuck Rainbow enough for her to want a relationship. Seriously did anybody who joined early on think that it was going to end this way? We were all expecting this clop-fic of barely any plot where we can read then move on. It moved past that and into pretty epic proportions I'd have to admit.
The relationship between all three of them was absolutely wonderful. It really gripped me to the end and you DIDN'T go the herd route (spoiler-ed for those getting into the story who can see this comment on the main page), which really if anything goes to show you know how relationships actually do work. How many other fics would have been "Welp we all fuck now story over everyone got what they wanted and nobody was hurt". Life isn't like that and you portrayed it very well.
Congrats on a job well done, can't wait for the epilogue.
Lastly for some reason all I could listen to was this as Rainbow flew away as in credits music.
6003572
And the sexnasium! We can't forget the sexnasium!
The status says INCOMPLETE, so there is still more coming...
Oh...
Dude, is Scoots gonna break up with him? I mean, that'd be heartbreaking and all, and the drama that ensues will be massive, but I feel like he belongs with Rainbow. The name of the story is To Find a Rainbow, so...
Ugh, conflicting feels.
6003071 Clop no clop, the story was awesome. I was just hoping it would end with..ahem a bang.
On a more serious note, I can't wait got the sequel. I can't help wondering if it will somehow involve more of Will's family. Which should make for some interesting situations.
Now we have to wait for Rainbow's Acceptance.
What a let down. I feel like i've been railroaded along this fic from the start.
Protip author: if you're going to write a scootsXhuman fic, then dont make the title and cover art about Rainbow Dash. Will save a lot of dissapointments and dislikes.
Downvote this comment all you want but i am entitled to my opinion as much as anyone else
And yet Thunderlane is in a herd with twin sisters.
This feels like a contradiction. It doesn't have to be -- maybe Equestria is really tolerant of incest -- but given the seeming Western/American-centric values (by both the source material's source, as well as the very high age of consent which in the Western world only really applies to some states of the US), this threatens my suspension of disbelief. It's also certainly not explained very well in the story, and I'm pretty sure our protagonist doesn't pick up on this. As it would be such a massive clash of values, one would expect him to react with shock (and also throw this back at Twilight when she mentions his liaison with Scoots).
The alternative of course of that various herd members don't have to be personally involved with everyone else, which then completely negates Rainbow's comment.
6003677 Now THAT is an excellent idea!
Gee, where have I herd that before? Hmm. . . .
Loved it!
Too bad there's no threesome. That would have been HOT!
6003823 I agree completely with you. Don't get me wrong, I like this story, but having us think that it is centered around a character when said character is pretty much referenced in the title just to have it flipped is kind of upsetting. But that's just my opinion.
Maaan, I am so glad that there was closure. Its one of my favorite feelings. While I would've liked the herd, I still appreciate the fact that you wrote it not happening. It certainly must be harder to do than "hey you wanna be in a herd?" "Sure" "sure!" "Okay lets all fuck now."
It made me appreciate your writing a tad more when you didnt herd them.
I can't wait for the sequel!!
Also now that its finished (apart from the epilogue) I can recommend it to the site mod that does interviews!