FIrst time posting a comment in about 2 or 3 years for lurking fimfiction, so far i am quite enjoying your style of writing and the story itself. I just wish you could update it a bit faster sometimes it's a pain to have to wait so much time keep up the good work and for heavens sake finish it or i'll have santa strike you down from the good behaved list
5820412 Thankya kindly! 5820405 I really wish I could update more often, too, but I'm a terribly slow writer. The last few weeks in particular I've pretty much given up all video games and TV so that I could spend all my time writing and once a week is still about all I can manage. Sorry!
I prefer this Will to the one from before. Now he bares his decidedly non-herbivorous teeth to defend what he wants, and is actually able to enjoy himself and the good things in his life. Rarity and others better watch their mouths from now on.
Well this dinner date was incredibly nice. All the right measures of romantic, cute, casual and touching. You did a great job depicting it, Jeremy, excellent work!
Oh boy, that last scene. Will, you dunce, you better not get hung up on the ex that never was. Fuck, you two NEVER "made love", you just rutted until your genitals hurt, and don't pretend otherwise because you'll be dead wrong by doing so. FOCUS ON WHAT YOU HAVE, GOD DAMN IT.
5820588 Thanks! I was so worried after I wrote it that it was going to come across boring and clunky. Really just this whole chapter I had a weird feeling on, but I couldn't quite put my finger on what it was. Maybe it was just nerves or something. (Maybe I was sharing Will's nervousness for their first date. )
As for the second part... Well, I have no comments.
i'm glad this story is trying to keep the love triangle thing going. Too often i see fics that start with one love interest and then completely drop them in favour of another.
I beg of you, don't let the same happen to this story. Scootaloo is cute and all but, Rainbow is the one in the title and the cover art.
5820655 Yeah, I'm sure she would have said something. Then again, pony fashion is all over the map. A collar and tie can be worn to an event like the Grand Galloping Gala while suit jackets are worn to garden parties. Who knows what them ponies are up to!
5820661 I promise you, Rainbow is not done in this story. I know the focus has been on Scoots for a while, but that's only because things between Will and Rainbow have been so rocky. After everything that happened in Cloudsdale, they all needed a little time to cool off. We'll be seeing more of Rainbow very soon.
This chapter was everything I was hoping it would be with Will and Scoots! Very cute and enjoyable.
Aslo...
To one side of the clearing was a stone bench, upon which sat a mint-green unicorn mare wearing a long white silk dress with golden accentuations. She held a gold lyre in one outstretched foreleg while the other gently brushed across its strings, bringing to life the angelic music that had not only Scoots and I, but a small crowd of ponies humbled by its charm.
Sitting next to the unicorn was an earth pony mare I knew as the titular owner of Bon Bon’s Bon Bons, Ponyville’s own confectionary. Bon Bon was wearing a dress as well; a dark blue thing with pink highlights that matched her curly mane perfectly. In her mane was a lily of some kind, though unlike any I’d ever seen before, it was the color of dancing flames.
You cheeky little Luna. Making shout outs to Bon Bon's Acceptance. I see what you did there hahah. Loved it!
5820750 Oh it must have just been a coincidence then. Yeah it's a part of this shit story that some weirdo wrote. You don't want to read it. Really the author should feel ashamed for ever writing it.
Like I thought as soon as the date was ending that something was gonna go wrong. But I was wrong. That's what I like about this fic, always manages to throw me for a loops. Great chapter and as always I look forward to the next one.
5820944 There is totally a sequel planned. We are getting closer to the end of this story, but there's still so much to tell! I don't think at the moment that it will be as long as this one, but well... To Find a Rainbow was never meant to break 100k words. So, I don't know at the moment.
I briefly considered having either Rainbow or Scoots's dad crash the date, but... I figured that was far too cliched. Plus, I just wanted them to finally have some fun together. Too much drama in the last few chapters to make more here. Especially with what's coming up...
You write Rarity so well, did I mention she is one of my favorites.I'd kill if you commissioned stories. But yes, another great chapter. Also you're continuing to fuel me with all these ScootaWill kisses, man, and I appreciate it. All the nice moments in this chapter put me in a really good mood. I really enjoy Scootaloo and his dynamic, how well they compliment each other even with the age difference. It made for a really nice scene, and I even really liked the little bit at the end with the feather. Makes me wonder what's going to happen next. Rainbow Dash, probably, obviously, but you know.
Once again, you leave me speechless with this chapter. To say it was well-done would be the understatement of the century.
Regardless, I enjoyed this chapter so much more than I thought I would. But I can't help but think that they were being watched by a certain Pegasus up in the clouds..
And that Will was being watched from the outside of his room at the end, but that's just me...
5821051 Thank you so much for all your kind words! I'm really glad you liked the chapter! Rarity has always been a very fun character and I like her quite a bit, so I enjoyed getting to finally write her again after so long. And yeah, there is going to be some Rainbow coming up pretty soon!
But, I've actually always been open to the idea of commissions. I've just never had any takers before, so I don't really have any idea how I'd go about them. But if you're interested, just shoot me a pm with what you want and maybe we can figure something out!
Theory: After Rainbow watched them, she went to his home, pulled out one of her feathers and placed it on his bed before leaving and waited in the clouds to see what Will would do with it.
I always hate to hear that we're closing to the end of a great story. But, hopefully, you actually end this well and don't resort to some over used cliche' ending. I don't think that you will, though. You've done pretty damn well with this story so far.
5821141 We're looking at about... 3 or 4 more chapters minimum plus an epilogue. It's possible I might need one or two more to swing things, but I'm not counting on it at the moment. And well, personally I don't feel the ending is cliched. I think it's the ending that makes sense for everything that has and will happen before it's over. I've said before, it's not an ending that's going to satisfy everyone but personally I really like it and I hope that people will see where I'm coming from when we get there.
But fear not, there's totally a sequel in the works.
Bon Bon was wearing a dress as well; a dark blue thing with pink highlights that matched her curly mane perfectly. In her mane was a lily of some kind, though unlike any I’d ever seen before, it was the color of dancing flames.
She saw them in the restaurant, freaked out and jumped into his bed to soak in his scent. Acting like a completely crazy bitch she accidentally left a feather in there.
Oi author, don't have him be with Rainbow. That is the better outcome.
5820455 I don't know if you intended it to be as such. But I was flamin rocking the edge of me chair during that whole dinner scene, waiting, just waiting for somethin or someone(ie RD) to waltz right in and cock up the whole shemozzle! - Then durin the walk to the park. - Then the walk back to the boutique. - Then the spotlight kiss. - Then the stroll back to his donger. - Then gettin into bed. - Then the poke in the leg, (Cheers for the heart attack on that one cobber. I was sure it was gonna be you-know-who.) - Then... Nothin. It was relatively perfect first date, with no drama t'all.
YOU UTTER UTTER CUM SPONGE! It was like, two pumps before the vinegar stroke you've suddenly got a headache and wanna stop!
Don't get me wrong, I loved every minute of it. Once the ole pulse rate had dropped back to normal levels, I'd swept up me little pile of fingernails, smoked a durry and hit the dunny, I re-read it. And armed with the hindsight that nothing was gonna happen I enjoyed it for what it was. A well written and heartwarming scene. Just what they needed.
Good on'ya mate, Brilliant addition yet again.
One question. Why the flamin heck is this rip-snorter of a tome not submitted to The Good HiE List?
5821487 Your irritation only makes my urge to write stronger. Feed me your salty tears!
But yeah, I thought after everything that's happened lately they deserved just a little bit of happiness. And Rainbow's still off sulking in a corner somewhere. Or something, I don't know.
And it isn't submitted to that group 'cuz I thought it'd be narcissistic for me to submit it myself.
FIrst time posting a comment in about 2 or 3 years for lurking fimfiction, so far i am quite enjoying your style of writing and the story itself.
I just wish you could update it a bit faster sometimes it's a pain to have to wait so much time keep up the good work and for heavens sake finish it or i'll have santa strike you down from the good behaved list
Nice! looking forward to the next chapter!
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Thankya kindly!
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I really wish I could update more often, too, but I'm a terribly slow writer. The last few weeks in particular I've pretty much given up all video games and TV so that I could spend all my time writing and once a week is still about all I can manage. Sorry!
I prefer this Will to the one from before. Now he bares his decidedly non-herbivorous teeth to defend what he wants, and is actually able to enjoy himself and the good things in his life. Rarity and others better watch their mouths from now on.
Well this dinner date was incredibly nice. All the right measures of romantic, cute, casual and touching. You did a great job depicting it, Jeremy, excellent work!
Oh boy, that last scene. Will, you dunce, you better not get hung up on the ex that never was. Fuck, you two NEVER "made love", you just rutted until your genitals hurt, and don't pretend otherwise because you'll be dead wrong by doing so. FOCUS ON WHAT YOU HAVE, GOD DAMN IT.
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Thanks! I was so worried after I wrote it that it was going to come across boring and clunky. Really just this whole chapter I had a weird feeling on, but I couldn't quite put my finger on what it was. Maybe it was just nerves or something. (Maybe I was sharing Will's nervousness for their first date. )
As for the second part... Well, I have no comments.
I could have been working on The Third Roommate, but instead I spend that time reading this.
Hashtag#noregrets
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That's okay, I won't tell anyone.
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Sweetie might have gotten a little overzealous while picking out Scootaloo's outfit.
Or maybe Will was underdressed. Up to you!
i'm glad this story is trying to keep the love triangle thing going. Too often i see fics that start with one love interest and then completely drop them in favour of another.
I beg of you, don't let the same happen to this story. Scootaloo is cute and all but, Rainbow is the one in the title and the cover art.
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Yeah, I'm sure she would have said something. Then again, pony fashion is all over the map. A collar and tie can be worn to an event like the Grand Galloping Gala while suit jackets are worn to garden parties. Who knows what them ponies are up to!
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I promise you, Rainbow is not done in this story. I know the focus has been on Scoots for a while, but that's only because things between Will and Rainbow have been so rocky. After everything that happened in Cloudsdale, they all needed a little time to cool off. We'll be seeing more of Rainbow very soon.
5820661 Screw that noise.
The end?! Nooooooooo!
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The story's not over yet! We have a few chapters still remaining.
That is the end of the chapter, though, if that's what you meant.
This chapter was everything I was hoping it would be with Will and Scoots! Very cute and enjoyable.
Aslo...
You cheeky little Luna. Making shout outs to Bon Bon's Acceptance. I see what you did there hahah. Loved it!
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Yeah what were you thinking.
5820744
I have no idea what you're talking about. Is that referencing something that happened in that fic I've never heard of?
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Oh it must have just been a coincidence then. Yeah it's a part of this shit story that some weirdo wrote. You don't want to read it. Really the author should feel ashamed for ever writing it.
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How lame. I guess it has something to do with Lyra and Bon Bon? Who would ever write about them?
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I know! It's been done like a million times. So boring!
Also, if we're reaching the end of the story, you better have a fucking sequel waiting or something just as good. Or else:
Like I thought as soon as the date was ending that something was gonna go wrong. But I was wrong. That's what I like about this fic, always manages to throw me for a loops.
Great chapter and as always I look forward to the next one.
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There is totally a sequel planned. We are getting closer to the end of this story, but there's still so much to tell! I don't think at the moment that it will be as long as this one, but well... To Find a Rainbow was never meant to break 100k words. So, I don't know at the moment.
5820998 If need be, I will help!
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Thank you very kindly!
I briefly considered having either Rainbow or Scoots's dad crash the date, but... I figured that was far too cliched. Plus, I just wanted them to finally have some fun together. Too much drama in the last few chapters to make more here. Especially with what's coming up...
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I don't need any help at the moment, but if I ever do I'll keep you in mind. Thanks for your offer!
5821002 Why would you tell me this Incoming feels confirmed
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Unless I completely flub things up in the writing department, yes, feels are indeed inbound fairly soon.
You write Rarity so well,
did I mention she is one of my favorites.I'd kill if you commissioned stories. But yes, another great chapter. Also you're continuing to fuel me with all these ScootaWill kisses, man, and I appreciate it. All the nice moments in this chapter put me in a really good mood. I really enjoy Scootaloo and his dynamic, how well they compliment each other even with the age difference. It made for a really nice scene, and I even really liked the little bit at the end with the feather. Makes me wonder what's going to happen next. Rainbow Dash, probably, obviously, but you know.Once again, you leave me speechless with this chapter. To say it was well-done would be the understatement of the century.
Regardless, I enjoyed this chapter so much more than I thought I would. But I can't help but think that they were being watched by a certain Pegasus up in the clouds..
And that Will was being watched from the outside of his room at the end, but that's just me...
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Thank you so much for all your kind words! I'm really glad you liked the chapter! Rarity has always been a very fun character and I like her quite a bit, so I enjoyed getting to finally write her again after so long. And yeah, there is going to be some Rainbow coming up pretty soon!
But, I've actually always been open to the idea of commissions. I've just never had any takers before, so I don't really have any idea how I'd go about them. But if you're interested, just shoot me a pm with what you want and maybe we can figure something out!
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Thank you so very much and... I can't comment on the latter part.
Theory: After Rainbow watched them, she went to his home, pulled out one of her feathers and placed it on his bed before leaving and waited in the clouds to see what Will would do with it.
Once again, this is just me...
5821099 Of course you can't.
5820744 I love this so much.
I always hate to hear that we're closing to the end of a great story. But, hopefully, you actually end this well and don't resort to some over used cliche' ending. I don't think that you will, though. You've done pretty damn well with this story so far.
Can't wait for the next chapter, Jeremy.
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We're looking at about... 3 or 4 more chapters minimum plus an epilogue. It's possible I might need one or two more to swing things, but I'm not counting on it at the moment. And well, personally I don't feel the ending is cliched. I think it's the ending that makes sense for everything that has and will happen before it's over. I've said before, it's not an ending that's going to satisfy everyone but personally I really like it and I hope that people will see where I'm coming from when we get there.
But fear not, there's totally a sequel in the works.
5821107 My theory: Rainbow Dash snuck in and took a nap in his bed, and that's when the feather came loose.
5821215 That works too.
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FTFY
Also...
You coy bastard, you.
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I have no idea what you're talking about.
5821107 Better theory
She saw them in the restaurant, freaked out and jumped into his bed to soak in his scent. Acting like a completely crazy bitch she accidentally left a feather in there.
Oi author, don't have him be with Rainbow. That is the better outcome.
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Explain to me what it is that you love?
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Oi, reader! I can't talk about possible future events of the story!
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I don't know if you intended it to be as such. But I was flamin rocking the edge of me chair during that whole dinner scene, waiting, just waiting for somethin or someone(ie RD) to waltz right in and cock up the whole shemozzle!
- Then durin the walk to the park.
- Then the walk back to the boutique.
- Then the spotlight kiss.
- Then the stroll back to his donger.
- Then gettin into bed.
- Then the poke in the leg, (Cheers for the heart attack on that one cobber. I was sure it was gonna be you-know-who.)
- Then... Nothin. It was relatively perfect first date, with no drama t'all.
YOU UTTER UTTER CUM SPONGE!
It was like, two pumps before the vinegar stroke you've suddenly got a headache and wanna stop!
Don't get me wrong, I loved every minute of it. Once the ole pulse rate had dropped back to normal levels, I'd swept up me little pile of fingernails, smoked a durry and hit the dunny, I re-read it. And armed with the hindsight that nothing was gonna happen I enjoyed it for what it was. A well written and heartwarming scene. Just what they needed.
Good on'ya mate, Brilliant addition yet again.
One question. Why the flamin heck is this rip-snorter of a tome not submitted to The Good HiE List?
5821487
Your irritation only makes my urge to write stronger. Feed me your salty tears!
But yeah, I thought after everything that's happened lately they deserved just a little bit of happiness. And Rainbow's still off sulking in a corner somewhere. Or something, I don't know.
And it isn't submitted to that group 'cuz I thought it'd be narcissistic for me to submit it myself.
5821465 Oi author, I'll leave you to it then and not try to spoil the story.
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Mate, don't be a wooly woofta and submit it ya big girls blouse.
ALL THOSE IN FAVOR,
SAY AYE!