Although now I wish Will had come back to a ravaged Earth, or an entirely different location or time period, anything that would force him back to Equestria and make him stay there.
Also, did Twilight learn to drop teleport beacons in certain locations? Because she's never been able to do long-range teleportation in canon, let alone between cities.
Poor Dashie she missed the time. But It's not over yet.
I'm looking over what will happen next. How mutch time passed in Will's universe. How he will explain to his family wat he went trough.
PS: I loved that SB almost talked out Will and Scootaloo's secret oh and now AB was the frown pony and not Scoot. Oh and I tought Twilight would found out aboot Scoot and Will immediately by the smell since I don't remember they would have a shower before they went to sleep. It's bit odd that the others havn't got the smell.
5879474 Twilight teleporting them was admittedly a bit of an easy way to get them to Canterlot on my end. But I figure she's been an alicorn for roughly 9 years by this point and has only gotten stronger and more skilled with her magic over the years. Maybe it might still be a bit much for her to teleport them that far, but I felt it was a safe enough stretch to get away with.
I mean, he just... Thats somewhat uncommon. HiE where the human has a seemingly great life among ponies, but actually leaves when the way back opens.
And so emotional, all in such a rush, and yet it all worked. Great chapter. Really. Can't wait for what happens next, and the epilogue, and the sequel. Can't wait for anything anymore!
Wonder what's going on at the other end of the portal right now
5879552 hehe, you sly fox. I'm pretty sure there is...but I have no clue as to which side moves faster. There could be two very different outcomes depending on which one. This is going to be the longest wait yet between chapters.
This chapter pissed me off just from my head canon, and the probabilities. First Earth cannot support magic, any attempt to move magic across universe will result in the magic returning to the parent universe in the form in which it left, however material items will be able to pass back and forth. Second how did Will know where the portal would drop him off, there is a bout a 99% of dying if the portal's location is random, falling, drowning, going to the core of the earth, so on and so forth. So why didn't he ask Twilight where the portal would drop him off. For all he knew that portal was a one way ticket to death.
DAMMIT WILL WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING YOU FUCKING IDIOT!!! YOUR EARTH LIFE AIN'T SHIT AND YOU DECIDE TO GIVE UP EQUESTRIA, YOUR JOB, YOUR FRIENDS, AND SCOOTAFUCKINGLOO FOR THAT!!! HUJKBFknejfnjsknf n,vsnfjaKNFJKSZnfm'ow;eSk fioelk/snvocelj, sf';l.gaj0s-a[ pw'KFlmrgd
5879484 The way this chapter ends totally seems to say that Sarah is just gonna be like, "Hey dude why are you so late for dinner?" rather than "Where the hell have you been for the last months I though you were dead!?"
Boo. I mean, sure family Is important, but what your family would really want is for you to be happy. Hell, sometimes you move far away and it's hard to see them at all, but that's ok. Sigh, I really hope he goes back.....bad move, bad move.
5879705 Well, as to your first point, you kinda said it yourself.
just from my head canon
So I can't really tell you anything.
The second point I can give you, though. I was writing it largely from the logic of how portals worked in Equestria Girls, even though that isn't canon to this universe. The portal, since it's the same one that he came through months ago, just open now, will always lead to the same place. But you're right, that's probably something I should have addressed in the story.
5879768 Will had a lot to lose either way, but Scoots wanted him to be happy just as much as his family would have wanted him to. And when you really love something, you have to let it go.
We can only see where things go from here. There's potentially still time before the portal closes, if Twilight's estimations are to be believed...
Fuck man... I get off work, check my story updates, STOP EVERYTHING to read the new chapter, amd I fuckin cried. I couldn't keep myself composed. If it were me in his situation, with MY Earth life... shit, I'd only slightly hesitate, but I'd stay in Equestria. All I've got here is my mom, and a few somewhat good friends, but romantic companionship would take the highest priority to me. I wanna see whats going on on the other end, as well as many other things. God dammit I want him to go back!!
5879721 Everything this gent said x2. Seriously a bone headed move on his part. If he had a wife and kids sure (I'm married with a child you see...) but his life as I understood it from reading the story? Dumb ass move. [Edit: before we go on, just so you know I still *do* like the story] First just to toss out some things to think about (that they should have thought about in story..) The "Sliders" effect. Like the old Sci-Fi show. What if the universe you go to isn't exactly like yours? The "Rip Van Wrinkle" effect -- what if time doesn't pass 1:1 as it did in Equestria. You show up 30 years later. How about if time *does* pass 1:1. "Where the hell have you been all this time boy?" The *best* case is you already have a damn good cover story in your head and you don't get tossed into an institution for "your own good". Oh and you probably owe the IRS and your family will now question everything about your motives and what you say you've been up to all this time.
Literally the only why it would even work out for him -- ignoring all the shipping and the fact he actually had a life back in Equestria -- is that he come back to *his own* universe at roughly the same time he left it. Let's say *I* wouldn't have put money down on that kind of gamble were I in his shoes.
5879823 5879828 Well... Let's remember Will's track record for doing stupid things when he gets emotional. But that's neither here nor there. It came down to a choice between his family and the life he knew versus a few friends and a life that'd been pretty hectic for a while. He chose the ones you can't replace, but there's no telling if he'll regret that decision or not. Like I said, only time will tell.
And to further talk about the portals thing, I mentioned a little of my thoughts on it here: 5879795
In EQG, the worlds seemed relatively in sync with each other and the portal always connected to the same things: the mirror and the statue outside the school. And like I mentioned, this is probably something I should have handled better in the narrative. That was my mistake.
5879879 You probably didn't catch my second set of edits. But yeah you are right. A good story that happens to have a guy grabbing that Idiot Ball for dear life.
5879550 I don't think it's a stretch if she has a "landing pad" ready. A pre-made ethereal transportation lane would greatly reduce the energy cost of casting the spell, at least in my book.
But, getting to the topic at hand, everyone is freaking out over nothing. Will is going to go back; at most, he'll be in the human world for a couple chapters. And for people saying he's got nothing left in our world, realize he still has family, could make new friends, find another person to love, start his own family and business, etc. Add to that the fact he's no longer treated as an outsider; being able to walk down the street without anyone staring at you has merits most of us can't even imagine. The friends Will's made have made his time more enjoyable, but let's not forget that Celestia had the Wonderbolts briefed on him in case he turned against pony kind.
5879951 Sarah is his sister. He talked about her a little with Scootaloo in Chapter 7, but she hasn't been mentioned a lot since then. He has a... complicated past with her. Which is about to finally be revealed next chapter.
5879879 Maaaan, it's cool! Even the best of writers make mistakes, so I'm not too picky about it. I'm just being emotional about horsewords. S'what I do :P
5880033 Well, I haven't read too many HiE fics, but from what I can tell...
You're either going to make a convoluted ending that's gonna suck and I'm gonna get super p*ssed off. (Though personally I don't think that's gonna happen, you're a good enough author to end your own story in an awesome way) Or you're going to make a really cool and original ending that I haven't seen ever, and I'm gonna love it.
One thing's clear, though. The way this story's going, it's gonna be an original ending one way or the other, and I can't wait to read it.
“I’ll miss you,” I said feebly. She let out a noise somewhere between a chuckle and a choke. “Yeah, I’ll miss you, too.” She pulled away from me and wiped her eyes one last time.
"I wasn't talking to you." I said, standing up and tossing the necklace through the portal. "Bye, Sarah! Enjoy that ass of a husband."
Things he'd lose back home: Family, childhood home, closure.
Things he'd lose in Equestria: Friends, a job, a house, closure, a girlfriend/marefriend, the potential to start a new family, the potential to have a three way with surrogate sisters, a lawsuit from the girlfriend's father.
It's really a no-brainer which side of the portal to stay on.
5880025 Funnily enough, that story has been on my read later list for a couple years. It would seem I need to bump it to my hot list. Or go read it right now. RIGHT NOW. lol if we're gunna throw emotion-wrenching stories at each other, how about The Games We Play? Fantastic story man. I read it twice and cried both times.
5880455 It's a Pinkie/Dash fic, right? I've meant to read it for ages but I just never had. It's that good? Well, as soon as I get the chance I'll check it out!
.....Words cannot express the sheer amount of rage I an=m feeling at our dumbass MC for leaving what was a pretty sweet life in Equestria for shitty Earth.
I both love and hate this story. MC cant do that man, he cant just leave, WTF!!!!! anyway, my pathetic ramblings aside it was a very emotional chapter and I thank you for it. Keep up the good work mate. [you have received x5]
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10/10. I cried.
Poor Dash. Not Being Able To Get Her Feelings Out. She Was Not Even Present To Say Goodbye.
You sit upon a throne of lies.
Good lies.
And as for the chapter...
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I knew the story couldn't end here.
Although now I wish Will had come back to a ravaged Earth, or an entirely different location or time period, anything that would force him back to Equestria and make him stay there.
Also, did Twilight learn to drop teleport beacons in certain locations? Because she's never been able to do long-range teleportation in canon, let alone between cities.
Poor Dashie she missed the time. But It's not over yet.
I'm looking over what will happen next. How mutch time passed in Will's universe. How he will explain to his family wat he went trough.
PS: I loved that SB almost talked out Will and Scootaloo's secret oh and now AB was the frown pony and not Scoot.
Oh and I tought Twilight would found out aboot Scoot and Will immediately by the smell since I don't remember they would have a shower before they went to sleep. It's bit odd that the others havn't got the smell.
Hmm wonder if there is a time difference between universes.
I'm surprised Scootaloo didn't grab hold of him at the last second when he touched the portal. That is the kind of thing Scootaloo would do.
Well Scootaloo was couring him back Will when he missed his sister.
5879474
Twilight teleporting them was admittedly a bit of an easy way to get them to Canterlot on my end. But I figure she's been an alicorn for roughly 9 years by this point and has only gotten stronger and more skilled with her magic over the years. Maybe it might still be a bit much for her to teleport them that far, but I felt it was a safe enough stretch to get away with.
5879484
You'll have to wait and see.
This chapter. I did not expect-...
I mean, he just... Thats somewhat uncommon. HiE where the human has a seemingly great life among ponies, but actually leaves when the way back opens.
And so emotional, all in such a rush, and yet it all worked. Great chapter. Really. Can't wait for what happens next, and the epilogue, and the sequel. Can't wait for anything anymore!
Wonder what's going on at the other end of the portal right now
Why?! Why you sick bastard!? Why?! How could you let him leave like that?!
I wanna see Rainbow getting the message and arriving too late.
5879552 hehe, you sly fox. I'm pretty sure there is...but I have no clue as to which side moves faster. There could be two very different outcomes depending on which one. This is going to be the longest wait yet between chapters.
Ow, my heart. So many feels here, and I'm curious whats going to happen in the human world. Looking forward to the next chapter.
This chapter pissed me off just from my head canon, and the probabilities. First Earth cannot support magic, any attempt to move magic across universe will result in the magic returning to the parent universe in the form in which it left, however material items will be able to pass back and forth.
Second how did Will know where the portal would drop him off, there is a bout a 99% of dying if the portal's location is random, falling, drowning, going to the core of the earth, so on and so forth. So why didn't he ask Twilight where the portal would drop him off. For all he knew that portal was a one way ticket to death.
DAMMIT WILL WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING YOU FUCKING IDIOT!!! YOUR EARTH LIFE AIN'T SHIT AND YOU DECIDE TO GIVE UP EQUESTRIA, YOUR JOB, YOUR FRIENDS, AND SCOOTAFUCKINGLOO FOR THAT!!! HUJKBFknejfnjsknf n,vsnfjaKNFJKSZnfm'ow;eSk fioelk/snvocelj, sf';l.gaj0s-a[
pw'KFlmrgd
5879721
pretty much this.....
5879484 The way this chapter ends totally seems to say that Sarah is just gonna be like, "Hey dude why are you so late for dinner?" rather than "Where the hell have you been for the last months I though you were dead!?"
Boo. I mean, sure family Is important, but what your family would really want is for you to be happy. Hell, sometimes you move far away and it's hard to see them at all, but that's ok. Sigh, I really hope he goes back.....bad move, bad move.
5879572
5879611
5879721
Well, I couldn't be too predictable!
5879612
Stay tuned.
5879769 love how you ignored my comment.
5879705
Well, as to your first point, you kinda said it yourself.
So I can't really tell you anything.
The second point I can give you, though. I was writing it largely from the logic of how portals worked in Equestria Girls, even though that isn't canon to this universe. The portal, since it's the same one that he came through months ago, just open now, will always lead to the same place. But you're right, that's probably something I should have addressed in the story.
5879705
I think that's your problem my good sir. Your head canon can not apply to things that aren't in your head and differently not to this story.
5879779
Patience, my friend. I'm only one person and can only type so fast.
5879768
Will had a lot to lose either way, but Scoots wanted him to be happy just as much as his family would have wanted him to. And when you really love something, you have to let it go.
We can only see where things go from here. There's potentially still time before the portal closes, if Twilight's estimations are to be believed...
Fuck man... I get off work, check my story updates, STOP EVERYTHING to read the new chapter, amd I fuckin cried. I couldn't keep myself composed. If it were me in his situation, with MY Earth life... shit, I'd only slightly hesitate, but I'd stay in Equestria. All I've got here is my mom, and a few somewhat good friends, but romantic companionship would take the highest priority to me.
I wanna see whats going on on the other end, as well as many other things. God dammit I want him to go back!!
5879721
Everything this gent said x2.
Seriously a bone headed move on his part. If he had a wife and kids sure (I'm married with a child you see...) but his life as I understood it from reading the story? Dumb ass move. [Edit: before we go on, just so you know I still *do* like the story]
First just to toss out some things to think about (that they should have thought about in story..)
The "Sliders" effect. Like the old Sci-Fi show. What if the universe you go to isn't exactly like yours?
The "Rip Van Wrinkle" effect -- what if time doesn't pass 1:1 as it did in Equestria. You show up 30 years later.
How about if time *does* pass 1:1. "Where the hell have you been all this time boy?" The *best* case is you already have a damn good cover story in your head and you don't get tossed into an institution for "your own good".
Oh and you probably owe the IRS and your family will now question everything about your motives and what you say you've been up to all this time.
Literally the only why it would even work out for him -- ignoring all the shipping and the fact he actually had a life back in Equestria -- is that he come back to *his own* universe at roughly the same time he left it.
Let's say *I* wouldn't have put money down on that kind of gamble were I in his shoes.
Edit:
You know what, the more I think about the more stupid it is. I'm officially calling out the tropes:
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/WhatAnIdiot
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/TooDumbToLive
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/EightDeadlyWords (except only applies to Will)
Yep, character backlash in full effect. Screw this guy, hope he dies/lives the rest of his days in sorrow/will always have regrets, and I hope Scoots and Rainbow finds someone who cares for them and isn't a god damn idiot.
Whew, done... sorry for the vent mode. Good story though.
5879823
5879828
Well... Let's remember Will's track record for doing stupid things when he gets emotional. But that's neither here nor there. It came down to a choice between his family and the life he knew versus a few friends and a life that'd been pretty hectic for a while. He chose the ones you can't replace, but there's no telling if he'll regret that decision or not. Like I said, only time will tell.
And to further talk about the portals thing, I mentioned a little of my thoughts on it here: 5879795
In EQG, the worlds seemed relatively in sync with each other and the portal always connected to the same things: the mirror and the statue outside the school. And like I mentioned, this is probably something I should have handled better in the narrative. That was my mistake.
5879879
You probably didn't catch my second set of edits.
But yeah you are right. A good story that happens to have a guy grabbing that Idiot Ball for dear life.
5879550 I don't think it's a stretch if she has a "landing pad" ready. A pre-made ethereal transportation lane would greatly reduce the energy cost of casting the spell, at least in my book.
5879828
A Sliders reference?! WOW!
But, getting to the topic at hand, everyone is freaking out over nothing. Will is going to go back; at most, he'll be in the human world for a couple chapters. And for people saying he's got nothing left in our world, realize he still has family, could make new friends, find another person to love, start his own family and business, etc. Add to that the fact he's no longer treated as an outsider; being able to walk down the street without anyone staring at you has merits most of us can't even imagine. The friends Will's made have made his time more enjoyable, but let's not forget that Celestia had the Wonderbolts briefed on him in case he turned against pony kind.
I find my myself confused.
Is Sarah his sister? That's the kinda vibe I'm getting.
Or is she his girlfriend?
5879951
Sarah is his sister. He talked about her a little with Scootaloo in Chapter 7, but she hasn't been mentioned a lot since then. He has a... complicated past with her. Which is about to finally be revealed next chapter.
5879879 Maaaan, it's cool! Even the best of writers make mistakes, so I'm not too picky about it. I'm just being emotional about horsewords. S'what I do :P
Well, guess I'll just have to see what happens in the next chapter, eh?
Can't say I enjoyed the feels this time around, but oh well. Sure do hope things don't turn out as bleak as they look right now.
5879976
I get emotional about them sometimes, too. Have you ever read Yours Truly? Gets me every damn time.
5880023
Well, Spoilers~! But...
I don't care much for sad endings, is all I'll say.
5880033 Well, I haven't read too many HiE fics, but from what I can tell...
You're either going to make a convoluted ending that's gonna suck and I'm gonna get super p*ssed off. (Though personally I don't think that's gonna happen, you're a good enough author to end your own story in an awesome way) Or you're going to make a really cool and original ending that I haven't seen ever, and I'm gonna love it.
One thing's clear, though. The way this story's going, it's gonna be an original ending one way or the other, and I can't wait to read it.
Author on!
Welp, all I can say is... Wow.
I'd be a real shame if they've all thought he died and had a funeral for him.
"I wasn't talking to you." I said, standing up and tossing the necklace through the portal. "Bye, Sarah! Enjoy that ass of a husband."
5879821
Things he'd lose back home: Family, childhood home, closure.
Things he'd lose in Equestria: Friends, a job, a house, closure, a girlfriend/marefriend, the potential to start a new family, the potential to have a three way with surrogate sisters, a lawsuit from the girlfriend's father.
It's really a no-brainer which side of the portal to stay on.
5880025 Funnily enough, that story has been on my read later list for a couple years. It would seem I need to bump it to my hot list. Or go read it right now. RIGHT NOW.
lol if we're gunna throw emotion-wrenching stories at each other, how about The Games We Play? Fantastic story man. I read it twice and cried both times.
5880455
It's a Pinkie/Dash fic, right? I've meant to read it for ages but I just never had. It's that good? Well, as soon as I get the chance I'll check it out!
.....Words cannot express the sheer amount of rage I an=m feeling at our dumbass MC for leaving what was a pretty sweet life in Equestria for shitty Earth.
5880521 Amen to you brother!
I both love and hate this story. MC cant do that man, he cant just leave, WTF!!!!! anyway, my pathetic ramblings aside it was a very emotional chapter and I thank you for it.
Keep up the good work mate.
[you have received x5]
...I stand corrected
5880211 yeah no going home, fuck that lawsuit XD
nyah jk jk