5729982 They're pretty hard to churn out; surprisingly, they take a little bit of time to write out, ha. And I usually only like my chapters to be as long as they need to, and this one just needed to be long. I was going to make it even longer at first, but it was getting out of hand as it was and I found myself at a pretty decent stopping point, so there ya go.
Something is making me have a sneaking suspicion that Rainbow is gonna reconsider her feelings for Will, go find Will while he's on his date with Scoots, ask him out and him have to choose inside the restaurant or where ever the date happens.
You know, I don't think I've ever been so enthralled in a MLP fanfic in my time reading fanfics, but my word, this story is just pulling every string in my body and making me wish that there was more posted so I could keep reading. Oh well, I'll just have to wait, all be it impatiently, I cannot wait to read more of this though. Looking forward to the next chapter. I hope it's soon~!
5730371 Thank you so much! And I know, I'm a really slow writer! Half the reason this chapter took as long as it did (barring the fact that there was a little more action than I'm accustomed to) was that I was looking forward to writing the next chapter so much! So I'm hoping it won't be as long of wait this time, but I can't make any promises yet. I have the habit of breaking them.
5730797 Really? Damn. I was expecting a bit more than that, but regardless, I'm still in for the ride.
Also, have you considered doing alternative endings? Such as each one explaining how the alternative scenario happened in a short amount of time and a flashback or two.
5730829 I figured it would get too rough if every chapter ended on a cliffhanger, and I wanted one to end happy for once. It felt like we hadn't had one of those in a while! And I promise I'll get it out as quickly as I can! I've been pretty excited to write this particular chapter.
5731010 Well, 7 is pretty much an estimate at this point. I have mostly big ideas for each chapter, and a few could end up long enough to need splitting up. And even after writing that, I thought of one more that needed to be added, so we still have quite a bit of journey remaining!
And I've had a couple of people mention doing alternate endings where he ends up with either Rainbow or Scoots, and I'm not going to do that. I've had the ending in mind pretty much since this became more than just a mindless clopfic. I know it may not satisfy everyone, and I do feel bad for that, but I hope after it's done that I haven't lost too many people. Maybe I'll even win over a couple of doubters!
Besides, if I do the sequel I'm planning out now, alternate endings wouldn't really work.
Pretty sure you only get bittersweet/ happy-sad endings with a mix of right and wrong, and those are fun every now and then. As to how frequently fiction goes all right, all wrong, or a tangled mix I don't know.
We must ensure all whistles within hearing distance of sheep are destroyed to be safe! Save the sheep, destroy all whistles!!
Also, I really hope that if you have Will fall off something you have clouds suddenly become akin to tramploines, just because a human pinballing at terminal velicity all over Cloudsdale sounds hilarious.
I have to say, out of all the stories I'm reading, this is the one that I'm most anticipating every day. I love this story; the plot, the characters, what's coming up in the next chapter...
Let me start by saying you are one of the first authors on this site to drag out relationship angst for so many chapters and still keep me enthralled.
But seriously as that slider on the side of my browser was getting perilously close to the bottom and shit still hadn't been resolved with Scootaloo, I was getting flamin antsy. For a moment I was sure ole luv Rainbow was gonna come-a-gutsa during her trial and all attention would fall to her and we would be left hangin again...
Then. With less than 1000 words to go (888 in fact) she finally pony's up, comes straight out and asks him.
OH HALLE - FLAMIN - LUJAH!!!
Honestly, if you were gonna drag that over to the next chapter I was gonna find some way, come hell or high water to mail you a cat turd.
“It ain’t often I hear ya carrying on like that!” she said, nudging her with a hoof. “Why, ‘bout the only time I can think of is when I start—” She stopped short as Rarity gave her a sudden dark glower.
Am I the only one seeing Rarity possibly involved in that little howz-ya-father?
5731337 Thankya kindly! More is on its way, as quickly as I can!
5731377 5731800 I can neither confirm nor deny any statements made previously. But Soarin' did mention that he would tell Rainbow after the auditions, so we'll be finding out next chapter what he's scheming.
The big reason this story is getting so long is its essentially two romance novels at once. I'm not just developing one relationship, but two. Three in a way, if you consider the evolution of Rainbow and Scoots's relationship with each other as well. And that just takes a lot of words, haha! If anything, I've felt a little like I've been rushing through it a little too fast!
But even I couldn't put off Scoots's confession for another chapter. To me, it would have felt like this chapter ended without quite enough happening to move the story along. I'm not a fan of dragging things out purely for the sake of dragging them out. If they need more time to develop or if the segment particularly needs some drama, then fine. But otherwise, let's move things along, aye?
Although I'll admit, part of me wishes I'd put it off just to see you try to send me feces. The idea of receiving shit in the mail is so funny it would almost make up for the fact of receiving shit in the mail.
Damn, what another awesome chapter! :D So glad Scootaloo finally told him, personally I would prefer him to end up with her. Rainbow doesn't seem all that into the relationship thing, and Scoots has been way nicer this fic.
Edit: Someone I know who will read this.(You know who you are) Has challenged me to the same thing, I'm currently training a pelican to bypass USA customs.
5731852 Yeah, things are really looking up for Will this chapter, aren't they? Though it kills me to see Will and Rainbow having such troubles. I'm lucky enough to know what's going on in Rainbow's head, but poor Will sure isn't.
But anyway, I'll admit, that was probably one of my favorite lines to write! It's one of the things I like about Will; I get to have him say goofy things every now and then to lighten the tension. He's a rather serious guy, but once in a blue moon he knows just what to say to calm things down!
Maaaaaan, I feel like waiting for new chapters of this story is getting harder and harder each time. Like seriously, checking fimfiction everyday hoping something will come about is a bit nerve-wracking. Though I'm really glad it came up when it did, I'm reading this before a Really long day at work. So maybe it'll motivate me enough to get through the 8 hours that I got something I liked before work. Also, I'm a fan of this particular development quite the fan. Hopefully things aren't Too awkward with Rainbow Dash, but we'll see how that turns out with time I'm sure. Also hopefully the date goes well.
5731905 That's what I love about this Fic, you seem to always manage perfect balance between seriousness and humor. As always can't wait for the next chapter!
5731915 I know! I'm trying really hard to get them out faster! I'd really like to do an update a week, but the last several have just been kicking my butt and taking forever to get through. But I really hope it does make work easier for you! That would be totally awesome if my fic could do that for someone!
But the date probably won't happen for just a little bit. There's one more chapter in Cloudsdale, but then we'll be heading back to Ponyville.
This is exactly why I stay the HELL out of these kinds of tangled webs like the plague.
NEIN NEIN NEIN!!! Don't u dare, Person X, try to tangle my web with your Proposal Y with your Plan B and your overarching schemes. FUCK YO DRAMA AND YO COUCH!!
5731974 We're more than willing to wait. You've turned out a great story so far at a pretty fast pace. If that pace has to slow down so be it. Take as much time as you need to maintain the quality.
At long last someone moved to break the stalemate! Go Scoots, you brave fuzzy orange thing you~
Though I remember Rainbow's "Don't ever leave me, Will" from chapter 2 or so, I feel it's a lot better for him to do leave her out of anything that isn't friendship, WITHOUT benefits. Will now needs a true special other, not a casual rut every now and then to mess his feelings up, especially with an insecure blob of self-doubt like Dash. As you may have guessed, I don't like her in this. She's too grating for my tastes.
I feel it's a lot better for him to do leave her out of anything that isn't friendship
You know, I actually agree. The way she's been acting, she isn't what he really wants at the moment. If only emotions were ruled by logic, though, they'd be so much easier! Though I have to say, she was exactly what he needed at the story's start. But that's why he's trying to move on; he's changed his mind on what he wants in his life, and is trying to get it.
And I can't say much as to Dash's motivations because, you know, Spoilers~!, but I'll say there's a little more to what's going on with her than self-doubt. And it's something that goes way back to when she's young. But even then I may be saying too much. I won't promise when she reveals what's going on that it'll satisfy you, but I sure hope it helps you understand her a little better. And if not, well... Sorry! I really tried!
I never would have believed it had I didn’t see it, but a loud series of booms shook the stadium as the cannons erupted.
It sounded odd when i said it aloud. It would be better said as "I never would have believed it had I not seen it, but a loud series of booms shook the stadium as the cannons erupted."
I kind of had a feeling this would finally be the chapter where Scoots finally admits her crush to Will and asks him out. But did you have to end it there? You are deliberately spoon-feeding us just enough exposition to keep us begging at your mercy for more! I love and hate you for this... I want more!
5733225 Well, you know, I'd hate to give out too much at once and make the chapters so long that they're unwieldy to read. I'm just thinking about your convenience and comfort here!
5731974 It did make my day at work a bit nicer. Had an 8 hour shift cleaning classrooms most of it, so it was a bit rough. Your story, PussPuss's, and the gentlemanverse's stories have inspired me to want to write a fic for myself. So I might see about that in the near future and hopefully it won't be completely awful. I'm totally willing to wait as long as it takes for new chapters, doesn't mean it's not going to be a bit of a painful wait but what can you do. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
5733475 Well, I'm really glad it helped! And I really like PussPuss's stuff and the Gentlemanverse, too. I keep hoping that Feathered Heart or Changeling Roun will update soon!
5731863 Bring it, you sheep shagging swab of oily ball sweat I'll raise the ante if that ever happens and train a kangaroo to smuggle a hornets nest and toss it in the air ducts of your donga after giving it a good shake
I'm liking these 10k plus chapters.
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Thanks! I'm really glad you like it! And just for you, have an update~!
5729982
They're pretty hard to churn out; surprisingly, they take a little bit of time to write out, ha. And I usually only like my chapters to be as long as they need to, and this one just needed to be long. I was going to make it even longer at first, but it was getting out of hand as it was and I found myself at a pretty decent stopping point, so there ya go.
Wow, now things are getting Mighty complicated.
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And it's only gonna get worse!
Welcome back to the Featured box on the front page!
Something is making me have a sneaking suspicion that Rainbow is gonna reconsider her feelings for Will, go find Will while he's on his date with Scoots, ask him out and him have to choose inside the restaurant or where ever the date happens.
But this is just a Theory. A Fan Theory.
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Thankya kindly!
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That is certainly a possibility.
You know, I don't think I've ever been so enthralled in a MLP fanfic in my time reading fanfics, but my word, this story is just pulling every string in my body and making me wish that there was more posted so I could keep reading. Oh well, I'll just have to wait, all be it impatiently, I cannot wait to read more of this though. Looking forward to the next chapter. I hope it's soon~!
5730371
Thank you so much! And I know, I'm a really slow writer! Half the reason this chapter took as long as it did (barring the fact that there was a little more action than I'm accustomed to) was that I was looking forward to writing the next chapter so much! So I'm hoping it won't be as long of wait this time, but I can't make any promises yet. I have the habit of breaking them.
5730384 It's no big deal partner Take your time, I know full well that good writing takes proper time, care, and planning. Looking forward to it.
Another amazing chapter, though I'll say i was hoping he and rainbow would get together.
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Well, the story is far from over. Who knows what will happen before then?
I actually do have around 7 or so chapters left, plus an epilogue.
5730797 Hehe, I know how you feel. So many storys on my end with a lot of work to go. Nothing as good as this though :)
5730204 PLZ bring the next chapter fast
I really appreciate that you didnt leave us on a cliffhanger but I really want to read the next chapter too
Everything is going to go very right or very wrong in every concevable way soon, I am way too excited to see which.
Also breet sounds like a terminal illness for sheep, not the sound a whistle makes. But what do I know? (Nothing.)
5730797 Really? Damn. I was expecting a bit more than that, but regardless, I'm still in for the ride.
Also, have you considered doing alternative endings? Such as each one explaining how the alternative scenario happened in a short amount of time and a flashback or two.
Just a thought.
5730829
I figured it would get too rough if every chapter ended on a cliffhanger, and I wanted one to end happy for once. It felt like we hadn't had one of those in a while! And I promise I'll get it out as quickly as I can! I've been pretty excited to write this particular chapter.
5730989
Doesn't everything go either very right or very wrong in fiction? There isn't usually a whole lot of in between, I think.
And maybe whistles are terminal illnesses for sheeps.
5731010
Well, 7 is pretty much an estimate at this point. I have mostly big ideas for each chapter, and a few could end up long enough to need splitting up. And even after writing that, I thought of one more that needed to be added, so we still have quite a bit of journey remaining!
And I've had a couple of people mention doing alternate endings where he ends up with either Rainbow or Scoots, and I'm not going to do that. I've had the ending in mind pretty much since this became more than just a mindless clopfic. I know it may not satisfy everyone, and I do feel bad for that, but I hope after it's done that I haven't lost too many people. Maybe I'll even win over a couple of doubters!
Besides, if I do the sequel I'm planning out now, alternate endings wouldn't really work.
Write less per chapter but more of them, the suspence is killing me!!!!!
5731022
Pretty sure you only get bittersweet/ happy-sad endings with a mix of right and wrong, and those are fun every now and then. As to how frequently fiction goes all right, all wrong, or a tangled mix I don't know.
We must ensure all whistles within hearing distance of sheep are destroyed to be safe! Save the sheep, destroy all whistles!!
Also, I really hope that if you have Will fall off something you have clouds suddenly become akin to tramploines, just because a human pinballing at terminal velicity all over Cloudsdale sounds hilarious.
I have to say, out of all the stories I'm reading, this is the one that I'm most anticipating every day. I love this story; the plot, the characters, what's coming up in the next chapter...
All I can say is...I want more
Do I get any points for guessing that Applejack's got Soarin's bun in her oven?
I don't, do I?
5730007
G'Day Bloke,
Let me start by saying you are one of the first authors on this site to drag out relationship angst for so many chapters and still keep me enthralled.
But seriously as that slider on the side of my browser was getting perilously close to the bottom and shit still hadn't been resolved with Scootaloo, I was getting flamin antsy. For a moment I was sure ole luv Rainbow was gonna come-a-gutsa during her trial and all attention would fall to her and we would be left hangin again...
Then. With less than 1000 words to go (888 in fact) she finally pony's up, comes straight out and asks him.
OH HALLE - FLAMIN - LUJAH!!!
Honestly, if you were gonna drag that over to the next chapter I was gonna find some way, come hell or high water to mail you a cat turd.
All in all a great chapter mate!
Keep em comin...
5731377
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Am I the only one seeing Rarity possibly involved in that little howz-ya-father?
5731337
Thankya kindly! More is on its way, as quickly as I can!
5731377
5731800
I can neither confirm nor deny any statements made previously. But Soarin' did mention that he would tell Rainbow after the auditions, so we'll be finding out next chapter what he's scheming.
5731715
Well, thank you very much!
The big reason this story is getting so long is its essentially two romance novels at once. I'm not just developing one relationship, but two. Three in a way, if you consider the evolution of Rainbow and Scoots's relationship with each other as well. And that just takes a lot of words, haha! If anything, I've felt a little like I've been rushing through it a little too fast!
But even I couldn't put off Scoots's confession for another chapter. To me, it would have felt like this chapter ended without quite enough happening to move the story along. I'm not a fan of dragging things out purely for the sake of dragging them out. If they need more time to develop or if the segment particularly needs some drama, then fine. But otherwise, let's move things along, aye?
Although I'll admit, part of me wishes I'd put it off just to see you try to send me feces. The idea of receiving shit in the mail is so funny it would almost make up for the fact of receiving shit in the mail.
Damn, what another awesome chapter! :D So glad Scootaloo finally told him, personally I would prefer him to end up with her. Rainbow doesn't seem all that into the relationship thing, and Scoots has been way nicer this fic.
This killed me ^
5731843
Nature finds a way...
Edit: Someone I know who will read this.(You know who you are) Has challenged me to the same thing, I'm currently training a pelican to bypass USA customs.
5731852
Yeah, things are really looking up for Will this chapter, aren't they? Though it kills me to see Will and Rainbow having such troubles. I'm lucky enough to know what's going on in Rainbow's head, but poor Will sure isn't.
But anyway, I'll admit, that was probably one of my favorite lines to write! It's one of the things I like about Will; I get to have him say goofy things every now and then to lighten the tension. He's a rather serious guy, but once in a blue moon he knows just what to say to calm things down!
Maaaaaan, I feel like waiting for new chapters of this story is getting harder and harder each time. Like seriously, checking fimfiction everyday hoping something will come about is a bit nerve-wracking. Though I'm really glad it came up when it did, I'm reading this before a Really long day at work. So maybe it'll motivate me enough to get through the 8 hours that I got something I liked before work.
Also, I'm a fan of this particular development quite the fan. Hopefully things aren't Too awkward with Rainbow Dash, but we'll see how that turns out with time I'm sure. Also hopefully the date goes well.
5731905 That's what I love about this Fic, you seem to always manage perfect balance between seriousness and humor.
As always can't wait for the next chapter!
5731915
I know! I'm trying really hard to get them out faster! I'd really like to do an update a week, but the last several have just been kicking my butt and taking forever to get through. But I really hope it does make work easier for you! That would be totally awesome if my fic could do that for someone!
But the date probably won't happen for just a little bit. There's one more chapter in Cloudsdale, but then we'll be heading back to Ponyville.
This is exactly why I stay the HELL out of these kinds of tangled webs like the plague.
NEIN NEIN NEIN!!! Don't u dare, Person X, try to tangle my web with your Proposal Y with your Plan B and your overarching schemes. FUCK YO DRAMA AND YO COUCH!!
Great work, as always.
5731974 We're more than willing to wait. You've turned out a great story so far at a pretty fast pace. If that pace has to slow down so be it. Take as much time as you need to maintain the quality.
At long last someone moved to break the stalemate! Go Scoots, you brave fuzzy orange thing you~
Though I remember Rainbow's "Don't ever leave me, Will" from chapter 2 or so, I feel it's a lot better for him to do leave her out of anything that isn't friendship, WITHOUT benefits. Will now needs a true special other, not a casual rut every now and then to mess his feelings up, especially with an insecure blob of self-doubt like Dash.
As you may have guessed, I don't like her in this. She's too grating for my tastes.
ARGH! Right in the tit!
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To be fair, Will didn't mean to get caught up in all this. But, of course, I doubt anyone does.
5732163
Thanks for being understanding!
5732657
Okay, so I've never watched any of the Dragon Ball Z abridged series, but I kind of want to now.
5732537
You know, I actually agree. The way she's been acting, she isn't what he really wants at the moment. If only emotions were ruled by logic, though, they'd be so much easier! Though I have to say, she was exactly what he needed at the story's start. But that's why he's trying to move on; he's changed his mind on what he wants in his life, and is trying to get it.
And I can't say much as to Dash's motivations because, you know, Spoilers~!, but I'll say there's a little more to what's going on with her than self-doubt. And it's something that goes way back to when she's young. But even then I may be saying too much. I won't promise when she reveals what's going on that it'll satisfy you, but I sure hope it helps you understand her a little better. And if not, well... Sorry! I really tried!
It sounded odd when i said it aloud. It would be better said as "I never would have believed it had I not seen it, but a loud series of booms shook the stadium as the cannons erupted."
Wooo!!! As much as this may create some more drama between Will and Rainbow, this is a fantastic tale you're weaving! ScootaWill is pretty rad
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Yeah, WOW did that sentence not come out right. Thanks for the catch! And thank you very much!
I kind of had a feeling this would finally be the chapter where Scoots finally admits her crush to Will and asks him out. But did you have to end it there? You are deliberately spoon-feeding us just enough exposition to keep us begging at your mercy for more! I love and hate you for this... I want more!
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Well, you know, I'd hate to give out too much at once and make the chapters so long that they're unwieldy to read. I'm just thinking about your convenience and comfort here!
5733169 yea man no problem, thats what were here for! We cant all be perfect
eagerly awaiting the next chapter
5733233 Hmmm
Anyways, I really love this fic.
5731974
It did make my day at work a bit nicer. Had an 8 hour shift cleaning classrooms most of it, so it was a bit rough. Your story, PussPuss's, and the gentlemanverse's stories have inspired me to want to write a fic for myself. So I might see about that in the near future and hopefully it won't be completely awful.
I'm totally willing to wait as long as it takes for new chapters, doesn't mean it's not going to be a bit of a painful wait but what can you do. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
5733475
Well, I'm really glad it helped! And I really like PussPuss's stuff and the Gentlemanverse, too. I keep hoping that Feathered Heart or Changeling Roun will update soon!
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Bring it, you sheep shagging swab of oily ball sweat I'll raise the ante if that ever happens and train a kangaroo to smuggle a hornets nest and toss it in the air ducts of your donga after giving it a good shake