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Six canisters wash up on the shore of a mysterious island paradise. Each one containing a being empowered by a single element of Harmony. These heroes have no memories, save for their names, and the sense that something is wrong. They are united by a single destiny-defeat the darkness force that threatens the land and bring harmony back to the island.

Chapters (9)
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MLP and Bionicle? I may have to read this.

YES. YES.

Even before reading I know this is gonna be epic.

hmm idk how i feel about this, i used to like bionicle but after it ended i kinda stop caring about it. not sure if i should read it or not...hmm meaby some other time i will search it and try it

The reason I fucking love the internet. This right here.

Upvote.

I'll fave it after a few more chapters. Keep writing.

alright i read the first chapter, not bad, not bad at all. tho meaby one small change is the opening scequence with the 3 virtues and the island name hmm i think i will show you what i mean. (warning i am unleashing my formor status as a io nerd here...)
Your version:

Gathered friends, listen again to our legend...of the Equestricle.

In the time before time, the Great Spirit descended from the stars, carrying we, the ones called "Ponytoran" to this paradise. We were separate, and without purpose, so the Great Spirit illuminated us with the three virtues: Friendship, promise and future. We embraced these gifts, and in gratitude, we name our island home Ponyville Nui, in the honor of the Great Spirit.

But our happiness was not to last. the Great Spirit had a sister, known as Marekuta, who was jealous of the honors she had given the Ponytoran and betrayed her. In her anger, she cast a spell over the Great Spirit, who fell into a deep slumber. Marekuta was free to unleash her power on the island. and unleash it she did. Sunlight grew cold, fields withered away, and ancient values were forgotten.

But hope is not lost...Twilight....

My Version:

Gathered friends, and listen again to our legend...of the Equestricle.

In the time before time, the Great Spirit descended from the stars, carrying we, the ones called "Ponytoran" to this paradise. We were separate, and without purpose, so the Great Spirit illuminated us with the three virtues: Friendship, Loyalty, and Harmony. We embraced these gifts, and in gratitude, we name our island home Celestial Nui (short for celestia), in the honor of the Great Spirit.

But our happiness was not to last. the Great Spirit had a sister, known as Marekuta, who was jealous of the honors she had given the Ponytoran and betrayed her. In her anger, she cast a spell over the Great Spirit, who fell into a deep slumber. Marekuta was free to unleash her power on the island. and unleash it she did. Sunlight grew cold, fields withered away, and ancient values were forgotten.

But hope was not lost, legends spoke of six mighty heros would vanquish the evil and return our island too peace...


This is my own personal opinion yours is fine i did notice that your set of virtues were very accurate too the Bio ones, Friendship=Unity, Promise=Duty, Future=Destiny. I may track this just so later i can read it

This has awesome written all over it!

I can already tell this is made of win.

Awesome sauce! The writing parallels the books. I love it! :yay:

488380 > my feelings exactly

I'm just here to say... WUT.

Bionicle ? This is what its crossed over with right?

That shit was awesome as a kid but... a MLP fanfic?
Not sure if gusta.

"Vegeta, what does the scouter say about its pun level?"
"It's over 9000!!!!"
But in all seriousness this is starting rather well, the only thing that irritates me a little is that it's almost word for word straight from the book. That makes the writing look lazy, even if it isn't. Other than that minor annoyance, this is shaping up pretty well. Will track.

Before I even read this, I must say, where the buck is Rarity? Is she not even in this story? :raritydespair: :raritycry:
Look what you did Silver. You made Rarity cry. Why am I talking to myself?

This many comments already? I feel so loved. :twilightsmile:

Okay, lets address some points...

The only reason it's word-for-word from the books is because I have them open when I write to refer to the source material.

Don't worry, Silver, you'll get your Rarity in due course.

And for anyone wondering: Yes, I do intend to retell the ENTIRE Bionicle story with Ponies. A very arduous task, but hopefully worth it.

Hey, that's my crossover idea! http://www.fimfiction.net/story/21522/Destiny-Is-Magic

:trixieshiftright: We shall simply have to see who's is better.

Sorry, but the 'power increase when nice' seems to me a cheapening of the act; less genuine.

I was dry for ideas, you can't blame me!

...well, you can, because I wrote it.

And it...is...ON!

Heheh. Not bad for a start. Shall track. Also gonna check out ddestiny is magic while I"
m at it.

Bionicals? Never was into them, but hey. i thought you were doing the whole Easter Island thing. the natives call it Rapa Nue

this story called out to my inner Bionicle nerd.
So far so good.

Hmm... follows bionicle canon, though considering the Mane 6 and their elements it seems a hint awkward. No matter. I like this.

chapters run by pretty shortly, but they arent bad. Resembles my chapters

BIONICLE!!!!!!!
omg so many old memories from my childhood :twilightsheepish:

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That was kind of why I wrote this; to reconnect with my Bionicle childhood.

tracked on principle of seeing a Toa with a southern accent.

And thus it was shown that Unicorns have lower poison resistance than Earth Ponies.

Well... if Twilight is the leader of the group in much the same way as Tahu... and Jaller and Cadence will inevitably become toa of their own... wait wait if Twilight=Tahu for leadership purposes... or maybe kopaka, then when the bohrok come out to play she'll get "swarmed" for a bit.

I wonder if the bohrok will be changelings? Instead of krana they put you in a cocoon and turn you into one of them.

Shining Armor=Jaller.
I think we all can see what you did there. AND WE LOVE IT!
And Cadence is the Takua? Ooh, I can't wait for that bit...

Huzzah, more masks aquired!
Also: First? Maybe? I swear, this is the only time this has happened.

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First one to comment on Chapter 9. Yes, you are!

What exactly IS Big Macintosh in this? Some kind of Proto-Toa?

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No, he's just a very strong matoran. For now.

Since she's obviously not a pony shouldn't this story have the Human tag? :rainbowhuh:

Armor? Okay, now I'm confused. Since there was no description of what they were wearing, I has assumed they were naked. What exactly is this story crossing over? So far, it's an interesting idea, but with description being so sparse, imagery is hard to come by. Remember that not everyone will be seeing in their heads what you see in yours.

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Not really. They're not human. I suppose this is one of those stories where you need to know the crossed over universe pretty well.

are you going to continue the story?

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