This is an achievement in bad writing. "A" for effort... Well, no, but "A" for initiative, but this needs some serious work.

This complete bull**** I'm just kidding that was really good

If Rumble's not human then what's with the human tag ?

I-uh, I'm just going to leave...

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fltter and cloudchaser were the humans

Just a little work in the grammar department. I don't see anything else wrong with it.

...UNF

Nuff said

4803888 What does that mean UNF?

4803963 means that I had a fantastic time fapping to this my good sure. :D

Continue please

Good fic you should continue it and make a nather chapter

Descriptions are good but I think this could have been longer and the reason for them being human doesn't make sense.

Please don't say hateful comments, or say that this tale is pure bull****, because I am a sensitive person.

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Just sayin that this is a fic that can seriously use some work, I mean it just jumps in faster than sonic on crack and he just shrugs off the fact that he woke up with 2 of his brothers friends/girlfriends that have magically grown a pair of tits and now resemble a creature he has never seen in his life. But the fap was good

well i like it. so dint listen to the people that didint like it

Great story. ~hug

"Oh, look who's awake, Flitter." said Cloudchaser. "Did you sleep well, Rumble?"

"Today's your checkup, Rumble." said Flitter.(——

"I have a question." said Rumble.(——

Also we wanted to use these utensils more easily, so we have hands to help us." said Cloudchaser.(——

"You still think we're beautiful, don't you?" asked Flitter a little worried. Cloudchaser had the same worrid expression on her face.(——

and said,(—— "Tell you what, kiddo: If you pass the checkup, me and Flitter will give you a very awesome present."

"Two awesome presents to be exact." Flitter added.(——

"It will make you feel very good." said Flitter.(——

Rumble felt his manhood becoming hard again, feeling Cloudchaser's warm hand on his cheek. "They...they won't hurt?" he asked.(——

Cloudchaser then crawled onto the bed seductively, and placed the stethascope not on his chest, but on his testicles. Rumble could feel the chestpiece gently pressing on his testicles, it was actually cold, and surprisingly liked the feeling of it being pressed.

"Oooh. Sounds healthy." said Cloudchaser.

Pahaha

"Well...Looks like you passed your checkup." said Cloudchaser

"I did?" said Rumble

This is so weird. Your missing a lot of periods in this.