Star Wars: Revenge of the Harmony

After a sith turned Jedi is given an assignment to keep the separatists from invading a peaceful system, and his ship crashes on the planet, will he be prepared for what kind of people, or rather, Ponies he will meet?

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Chapter 1 · 8th Apr 2012 · 2,325 words
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Deadite174

Deadite174 #1 · Apr 8th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

What the fuck did I just read.

Black Alicorn

Black Alicorn #2 · Apr 9th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

After reading this, I have to act. Read this version insted:

Coruscant, Jedi Temple, 3 weeks before the end of the Clone Wars.
Deep within the ancient temple, some of the greatest Jedi of their time had called a meeting regarding the next mission of yet another Jedi.

"Master Malek, we're pleased that you would join us." Mace Windu says to James.
"The pleasure is all mine masters, I take it you have an assignment for me?" James responds, giving Master Windu a respectful bow.
"Indeed. Clone Intelligence intercepted a transmission that suggests the Separatists may be launching an assault on EQT88, in an attempt to secure a much needed supply line for their forces elsewhere." Windu replies.
"EQT88? But that's a peaceful planet, I doubt the inhabitants even know about the war, they wouldn't dare!" James says.
"Even so, the Separatists have a habbit of turning neutral planets to their side. We cannot allow them to enslave yet another world. I want you to take a battalion of clones to intercept them, and keep them from landing on the planet."Windu replies, a tone of dissapointment in his voice.
"I will do my best master." James says, leaving the conference room.
"May the force be with you, James Malek" Windu wishes James as he leaves.
After making sure that he had left, Obi Wan spoke up, worried about how James would fare on this vital mission.
"Master Windu, are you certain he should carry out this assignment alone?" Obi Wan asks. " He turned to the dark side once, what's to stop him from doing it again? Personally I don't fully trust him."
"Turn to the dark side, he did, but back to the light he came, handle himself, Master Malek can." Yoda responds.
"I hope your right, for his sake, and ours." Obi Wan says.

"Master!" A younger boy ran up to him, his Jedi robes torn and a few burn marks around the holes that could have only been made by blaster fire. He was suprised and excited to see James.
"Jaden, I thought you were in the Christophsis system!" James says.
"I got back just a few minutes ago. So, you off on another mission?" Jaden asks.
"Yes, apparently the Separatists thought it would be a good idea to invade yet another peaceful planet, I must make sure they don't." James says, confidence raging through him.
"Well, good luck master, and try not to destroy too many of our own ships this time!" Jaden says, a teasing tone in his voice.
"You will never let me live that down, will you?" James asks.
"Nope!" Jaden responds, clearly mocking his master.
"Well, goodbye my young Padawan, I must be going, and may the force be with you." James says, leaving to board the waiting Acclamator class Assault ship the Republic had given him for his mission.
"May the force be with you too, master." Jaden says back as the massive ship prepares takes off.
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"Status report." James says to the commanding officer on the bridge.

"We will be arriving at our destination in a few moments sir." The bridge commander reports to his superior.
"Very good, and let's try to be quick about this, I don't want another run-in with an entire Separatist fleet like last time!" James says.
"Yes sir" The commander says.
They both hoped that they would arrive first. The Acclamators were excellent ships, but they wouldn't last long in a full blown battle. They were alone, and without the support of a Venator class, they would be pretty vulnerable.
The pilot begins to speak. "Exiting hyperspace in five, four, three, two...one..."
The ship exits hyperspace only to be met with a massive droid star cruiser, which in response immediately opens fire on them. It's heavy cannons could rip through them easily.
"I want every single Arc-170 and V-Wing in the fight immediately, now scrap these clankers!!" The captain of the ship exclaims.
"Sir, our shields are almost gone, and our shield generator is heavily damaged!" One of the engineers aboard the ship says to the captain, he was obviously terrified.
"Call for reinforcements, we need immediate assistance!" James says to the Captain.
"You heard the General, call for backup!" The captain says to one of the clones in charge of communications. He immediately sends a distress call into the vast emptiness of space.
"Assistance is on it's way, but I don't think we can hold together much longer!" Reports the comms officer after a few minutes.
"We've taken heavy damage, she can't hold much longer!" the captain exclaimed.
Explosions shook the ship as the crimson bolts from the droid cannons ripped through the crippled Acclamator.
Onboard the droid bridge...
A green tactical droid sat in his chair. One of the regular battle droids nearby started to report the situation.
"We caught them by suprise sir, their shields are down and they can't take much more."
The tactical droid jumped out of his chair, and his synthesized voice rang with an evil tone, at least for droid standards.
"Finish them!"
Back abboard the Republic ship...
"Get to the escape pods, there's nothing more we can do!" James Shouted back.
"But sir, what about you?" One of the clone troopers asked.
"I'm going to try to use the force to keep the ship from hitting any cities, now GO, I'll handle this!" James responded.
"Yes General, right away!" A clone trooper responded.
James presses the intercom button.
"ALL HANDS ABANDON SHIP! I SAY AGAIN, ABANDON SHIP!!" James yells into the intercom, his voice blaring throughout the ship.
A few minutes later, James checks the display. All escape pods have been jettisoned, and several of the ships from the hanger have taken off.
An explosion from the rear of the ship shook the bridge.
"There goe the stabilizers, here we go!" James says, as the ship begins to plummet.
Alarms are blaring everywhere as the ship enters the atmosphere, James is now doing his best to angle the ship so that it will both land without being completely destroyed, and without landing on a city or town.
"There, a small town, CRAP, I'm heading straight for it!" James says as he pulls the ship a bit to the left, in an attempt to not hit the town.
"Brace for impact." James says to himself.
The ship screeches and grinds against the ground, spewing red hot debris all over the area. Those small pieces would fall all over the planet... The ship finally stops about 20km from where it originally touched down, now at the edge of a forest, and the very tip of the ship was no more than 20ft from a small cottage.
"Glad I didn't hit that... I don't know what I would do if I did." James says, seeing how close to the building the ship is.
"Now, I wonder if there is anything in the hangar bay that's still flyable?" James says. "Or at least a spreader bike, that landing was pretty rough."
He made his way to the hangar bay, snaking through the collapsed areas of the ship.
“Whoa, that was a rough landing, I wonder if anything in here even still works.” James says, noticing the extensive damage in the hangar bay.”AHA! One of the speeder’s seems undamaged, now, if I could just activate it, I could scout out the area, GOT IT! now, I just need to check this place out, then I can find out if the droids have landed yet.”
James zooms out of the hangar on his speeder bike out the area, and soon enough, he catches a droid lander unloading droids in preparation for attack.
“Gotta time it just right, the separatists can be very persuasive, until they start shooting, I need to wait until after a droid takes a shot before I attack.” James says to himself, as he examines the situation.
“Excuse me, but why is there an army in my town?” the mayor says.
"Your planet now has the privilege of being under the protection of the Separatist Alliance, you will now be protected and safe as long as we are here! I congratulate you, on your good fortune.” The separatist commander says smiling as he 'claims' the planet for his faction.
“Our planet was safe long before your arrival, and I assure you, we do not need any protection, our princess do that!” An enraged Twilight says, coming out from behind the Mayor.
“But with the galactic war, you can never be too safe!” The commander replies, hoping to not get into the trouble of coordinating a fight against local resistance.
"War? What war? The only hint of war I see is your stupid army!” Rainbow Dash says, obviously annoyed by the droid forces that had landed there.
“The war that has been raging on for the past four years, that is the war I’m talking about, now, battle droids, search this dung heap for any Republic personnel or contraband!" The commander barks, and with a quick point of his finger, sends waves of droids to ransack yet another peaceful town.
The droids respond immediately to orders, running to search the town. Within moments, they invade homes, and knock over various objects in the market. One finally takes a shot to open a door, causing James to leap into action, turning both his lightsabers on, the one in his right hand is a green lightsaber, the one in his left hand is blue.
"A Jedi!" A droid shouts, terrified at the mere sight of a Jedi.
"Don't just stand there you idiot, blast him!" Another droid replies, causing the rest of the squad to aim and fire,
James blocks shots directed at him, sending them right back to the droids who fired them, turning them into smoldering scrap piles. James advances immediately, blocking more shots and when he gets close enough he systematically begins slicing them. The droids were powerless to stop the onslaught form his lightsabers.
“Twilight, do something, help him, he’s in danger!” The mayor barks to Twilight Sparkle.
Just as the mayor finishes talking to Twilight, James let’s out a full on Force Repulse, blasting the droids away from him, effectively elliminating what was left of them. He then uses the force to pick up the droid ship, and slams it into the ground, causing it to explode into a raging inferno. The gentle hum of a starship engine reaches his ear. He throws his lightsabers to what turned out to be a small droid gunship, slicing it's wings off and sending it spirraling to the ground where it gave off a brilliant explosion.
He shifts his gaze to the fleeing droid commander, and with a flick of his hand, the commander lifts off the ground and comes towards him. He puts his hand to his side, sending the commander to the ground. He reactivates his lightsaber and almost would have killed the commander, were it not for Twilight's stern interruption.
“WAIT!! We should take him to the princess, she could get him to talk, tell us what his army is up to!"
"It's not his army, he was just commanding one of the first waves!" James says back.
"WHAT? you mean that wasn't the whole army?" Rainbow dash exclaims, shocked that there were more of those metal monsters.
"Afraid not." James replies, he tries to signal his troops, hoping that some were still alive.
"Commander Fox, you still there?"
"Yes sir." A voice cracks from his wrist communicator.
"Get down here immediately, some droids already made it down, so there are bound to be more."
"Yes sir, Right away." Commander Fox replies.
He turned to Twilight.
"Apologies ma'am, I believe introductions would be in order, but we have more pressing matters to attend to. For instance, getting this Separatist scum to this princess you mentioned..."

I shouldn't have taken the time to fix this up for you, Thebronywithin, but you are relatively new here, and I feel that I should help you. The original version was... but I still give you an A for effort. Now after you finish reading this I want you go out and read some good fics, and try to get an idea of how you should try to make future chapters.

(If this was meant to be a trollfic, I am going to fucking kill you...)

Thebronywithin

Thebronywithin #3 · Apr 10th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

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Thank you for editing it, I know my versions aren't anywhere near perfect, but writing the whole thing on an iPad doesn't help that, but I hope to get new chapters up, better edited, and I will take points used in the edited version you posted in the comments, and if you have any suggestions for storyline or other points I could put into future chapters, feel free to say so!

And let me know if you want me to repost the original chapter with your edited version, I will credit you accordingly ofcorse.

Thebronywithin

Thebronywithin #4 · Apr 10th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

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I said the same thing when I wrote it and read it to myself, but instead of read, it was write.

(in case you don't understand "WTF did I just write?" is what I said)

thelazycommenter

thelazycommenter #5 · Apr 13th, 2012 · · · Chapter 1 ·

'Sup...

I was looking around the list of crossover stories, and when I looked at yours I saw that it had Starwars in it, along with you writing it, so I had to read it. And this is great! (when better edited)
Good luck with your writing!

FOR THE NEW LUNAR REPUBLIC!

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