Even the ruler Equestria isn't free from the corruption and insatiable lust for power that courses through us all.
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An excellent and sophisticated read. You did well in a capturing a picture in my head throughout the whole situation. Bravo!
Oh look, more Tyrant Celestia.
But, it's well-written. So have a thumbs-up.
*yawn*
A brilliant read! You realy should expand on this story!
All hail Tyrant Celestia!
*looks at fic*Meh...Whats the worse that can happen?
After Reading
NOPENOPENOPENOPE I REGRET EVERYTHING!I WAS NEVER HERE.
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Beautiful writing, though it left me a bit confused at the end. Did the others kill Tyralestia, or did she kill them? I suck at interpretations D:
It's well-written, but there are so many stories like it I find it hard to feel anything.
Well, that was a bit of grisly fun, of which I approve. The scene was moody and well-drawn, the backstory more of a sketch, though I suppose that was the intention, and as such you succeed. One critique could be that there, at least for me as a reader, didn't seem to be much point in involving the Mane 6 - the emotional impact would have been the same with OCs, and the last survivor did not register as Fluttershy with me (not too surprisingly, she would have had occasion to change given the described occurrences). Indeed, the story could have been nameless tyrant and nameless final martyr, and would have been IMHO just as effective. Also, a proper tyrant would know better than give enemies of the state a chance to talk freely
(Rarity, I'm so sorry)
Have you read "An Occurrence at Owl Creek Bridge" by Ambrose Bierce by any chance?
Dang, that was really good, but why did you make Fluttershy the last one to be executed? Twilight, as Celestia's protege, would have made a better effect.
Badass, is the only word I can think of, I recommend listening to A7X while reading. Though Fluttershy is heavily out of character, it's sufficient.
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Thanks for that input. I completely agree Fluttershy is OOC, I felt it was fitting considering the circumstances. It seems to me that being under a dictator for more than four years and seeing her friends (and thousands of countless others) being brutalized would change her.
For some reason, this reminds me of the trailer of Assassin's Creed 1 and a part of the story in Assassin's Creed 2.
Oh please, in the next one, have like Big Macintosh do the whole Assassin thing.
And also, unlike the other ones, this one did not leave me scarred at the end. It actually had a happy ending (well sort, of), if we assume that a total revolution has just begun.
In my regards, Win. Good Job.
Liked it. And while I agree Fluttershy was OOC, it didn't seem to detract from the story, because as you pointed out, such a situation would have changed her. I get why you chose Fluttershy and not Twilight. Part of the horror was knowing that Celestia already HAD killed Twilight; As in, she's already that far gone. It gives the story so much more subtext and dimension.
Why Fluttershy?
A short story about tyrant Celestia, you sir have lost my attention, no offense.
What is it with you and killing off characters?
I'm beginning to think you have some sort of fetish...
I Am The Law - Anthrax
413156 No, Fluttershy's still in character. After all, she does get angry when her friends are hurt, so it only stands that she would be angry in a situation like this.
a random pesant pony:"CMON EVERY PONY! EVEN THE WUSS IS STANDING UP TO THE TYRANT!!"
John Milehaus
I request a sequel, please.
Try playing around with another character, one who would be pissed at what's going on.
But this story was rather lighthearted compared to your other ones, but that actually made it a lot better for me. Great Job, again. Some of the best writing I've seen coming from a non-official source. Keep at it!
Wait that was Fluttershy. I couldn't tell.
Well other than the out of character Fluttershy this was a really well written fic. It reminded me of Night .
I agree with one of the former comments about not needing the Mane 6. In fact ponies weren't really needed at all in this story. I think that's a good thing. Shows that your capable of thinking outside the corral. Not a bad story though.
413114 okay, im down
Again, U stun me
wait?
Deora? Is that you?
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TONIGHT WE DINE IN HEAVEN!
The massive potential for an epic series was lost, but this was well done regardless. The maximum amount of history and story per word I assume, well done.
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Series, huh? Hmm...idea forming.
horrifically dark... and depressing, but very well written... now if you don't mind i am off to the nearest corner to go cry in the fetal position.
Well done. An enjoyable read to say the least. I, personally, would have liked to see what built up to this. Perhaps another series set before this? To tell how it happened? I would like very much to see that, but it's your choice. Either way, well done indeed. Many kudos to you.
Fantastic read. I love how dramatic and emotional your stories are
write more!
413156 i loved i might have been just a suggestion but maybe follow up on it maybe a prequel from there fillyhood days that would be awsome
Tyranny, hm.
I'm wondering how the crowd watching Fluttershy's execution is supposed to usurp Celestia's rule, on account of her being a living god and all. If she's been ruling for over a thousand years, I can't see how this rebellion would be any different from any she may have previously faced. I think this story would have been much stronger in Celestia's perspective, where we could see things from her point of view. Is she simply insane? I would hope not, since that wouldn't make for a very interesting story, but that's pretty much all we get from seeing things in Fluttershy's point of view.
I did like the symbolism of the setting sun representing the ending of Celestia's rule though.