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Two weeks of being captured an held as a prisoner on a Trandoshan slave ship, Sev and his Wookie friends leaves in an escape pod and calls the Republic for an emergency pick up. On an unknown planet, they crash land on it and made an encounter with the planet's locals till the Republic comes. Will they bring their war to this peaceful world or will it remain a secret?
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Most predominant to me would be to watch your tenses, e.g is/was, has/had, -s/-ing/-ed.
I greatly appreciate that you've adopted much more proper Mando cursing :)
4539237 You're welcome dude and thanks for the little advice
Huh, this is the first Star Wars: Republic Commando story I've seen! I will watch this story very closely... very...
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So, I just read your first chapter of your first ever story...
I'm neither impressed nor distressed with how your chapter turned out. You have so many mistakes in this story, you might want to try and hire an editor or review each chapter closely; you commonly misspelled droid and don't really offer much into the detail of the robots nor the Trandoshan's themselves, the story itself doesn't immerse me completely but that is expected of a first story. It's been awhile since I've played the game myself, but you might want to add more detail to characters and you've definitely got to watch your tenses.
I did some research on some other stories, and found a few of your comments on another one. Your story seems to be reminiscent of a few others, try not to fall into cliches or copy another, is all I can say about that. But it's still beginning and things can and possibly will change. I hope this helped.
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4540138 thanks dude,will do. Iv'e been reading the others so i won't be called on with copyright when writing this story and all and like i said, i'm not all that good when it comes to writing but I am trying. And it will change cause i will steer from the other related stories and it did help thanks bruh.
4540265
No problem brah.
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Should have been Gregor
4542149 Remeber that Gregor was on Sarrish. He no where near Kashyyyk
Still
This is interesting... but I kind of wish Sev would end up with a nice Twi'lek girl to keep him company.
Especially if she were to combine dance moves with a sword or something to become a whirlwind of steely death.
4562793 lol the only company that Sev needs is his sniper rifle and his brothers. But mostly his sniper rifle
This is pretty cool, keep it up!
4568377 Thanks dude, I will :D
Brilliant work buddy, that was quite amazing.
And oh Obbas you moron. You know what? These lizard bastards just stupid as hell.
Anyway, i'm really looking forward the new chapter. So, keep up the good work.
4570773 fat and lazy fierfek aren't they?
Are we gonna see a slaver's arms get ripped off like he's a Lego Minifigure?????
Question: would Fluttershy be able to understand Wookie growls like she understands animal noises????
4676452 along with some beatings and if she could understand bear growls i'm sure she could understand Wookies
4757874 Fluttershy with Wookies would be awesome.
.... I hate suicidal slavers. I hope Sev can understand the ponies, otherwise things won't be easy.
Oh god, why I laugh my ass off at the author's note, what the hell is wrong with me?
Anyway, brilliant chapter buddy as always, keep up this genius work, and Welcome To The Jungle motherfu... I mean in the Everfree forest, yeah that.
4758961 imagine them fighting over on who gets to hold her
4759331 lol the dude was in debt with jabba and no one goes in debt with jabba. Remeber what happened to han?
4759779 nothing is wrong with you bro lol and thanks
4760313 lol, I can see that. And Sev fighting back laughter if she insists on bathing the woollies like giant dogs. Oh yeah, can we see a single Wookie vs Manticore fight???
4760404 maybe
4760636 Woot! Maybe is better than a flat out no!
4761168 indeed my friend
You forgot the YAY
So yeah, at the end I was like...like this.
Anyway, brilliant chapter as always buddy, and keep up the good work.
4823166 but Fluttershy is sleeping downstairs on the couch though
4824547 but is more like http://iambrony.dget.cc/mlp/gif/87138__UNOPT__safe_pinkie-pie_animated_feeling-pinkie-keen.gif
4825668 actually I meant the CMC going yay like this [youtube=https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=o1NRpL57iLw]
4825957 shit my bad bro
4826773 its cool heck when they sev amd see how cool he is they ask to be like him that would be so cool said one of the cmc then they all all say CUTIE MARK CRUSADRES REPUBLIC COMMANDOS YAY!
Well, time for the CMC to cause a panic as they sneak out to investigate the fallen star in the middle of the Everfree. I can just see the three of them enjoying a Wookie shoulder ride on the way back. Seriously, a wookie could hold a filly on each shoulder easy.
Nice chapter, I loved our trio rescuing the CMC from the manticores. I guess Fluttershy will need to lock that window so the Crusaders can't get out by it again.
4854085 thanks dude :D
Speaking of our favorite pegasus, where is she? Last I read she was bolting towards them.
Chapter title says it all. Like a marine if you get in the way of his coffee.
Heaven help any nasties that come after ponies while Sev is around. Now, when in the show timeline are we? I'd love to see Sev and the wookies take part in the Wedding Battle or against Sombra!
5029382 does this chapter answers it?
5153802 it's after twilight going to earth but before season 4. The enemies for this is something you'll have to wait for
5161340 Wait...
so we'll get to see them face off against Tirek???? 
If so, he's screwed, they don't have magic to steal!
5153547 or his ridicule when he's a couple hundred meters away from you
5161352 Sadly Tirek isn't going to be in this story dude. Sorry.
5161800 Dang, the Wookies treating him like a rodeo bronco would have been awesome!
rodeo bronco? I think they's have fun just plain beating his face in via Tirek as hammer and his face saying 'hi' to the ground man many times... then ride him like a bronco.
So they will NOT be participating in Operation Knightfall?
5311165 Order 66 happened on 1089th day after the battle of Geonosis, the kashyyyk mission where sev went M.I,A was the around 1070th day. Sev in the story was on the Trandoshan ship for 2 week so if you subtract 1089 and 1070, you get 19 days. Minus that from the 2 weeks and you'll get 5 days before Knightfall. I did my research
Plus, can't spoil if they execute the order or not just yet 
yay delta squad