My name is Christian and I love to write. :)
Jack is a normal human and fan of the TV-Show "My Little Pony Friendship is Magic". However, he lucid dreaming every night, that become a second life ... or is this even the reality, his pony-self Sweetfull Dream?
Story-Line of the "Destiny"-Quadrilogy
1.Unexpected Destiny
2.Light Runner
3.Light Runner 2(Working title)
4.Equestria 2034: 20 years later(Working title)
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dear person who wrote this, please could you respond to this quickly, i notice that you have a ton of grammatical mistakes that stop the flow of reading, if you want i could fix them, no debts or anything, just to help out.
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Yeah, english is not my first language, but sure you can do that^^
Well that was pretty decent. The idea of having Lucid dreaming create new worlds and switching between the two is a pretty cool idea. There's lots of grammar problems but English isn't your first language so I can understand why. Probably better than anything I could come up with just by myself. I enjoyed it.
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I just read the whole story in one sitting. It looked like it needed a lot more work. The story itself was realativly good although i feel as though more people would read it to the end if it had better grammer and more discriptive scenes. Please dont let my critique stop you from writing just learn from these mistakes and whrite a new story after all practice makes perfect. :)
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Yeah, english isn't my first language, so grammar mistakes can happen pretty fast. But since writing this Fic and chapter 11 from my second Fic, there is gone a lot of time and I got better(Not perfect, but better).
Yeah, especially the first 2 chapters are pretty short. I already thought to rewrite them all, more, longer, more detailled etc.
And don't worry, I don't stop writing, I have 4 Fics in mind, all part of one big story.
This here is part 1, "Light Runner" is part 2 and the other 2 are still in my mind
SOO BUCKING AWESOME!!! MORE MORE PLEEEEASEEEE!!!!!
4997962 Thanks^^ I'm still on my second Fic, but don't found the time yet to continue^^
Is English not your first language? You need an editor
Didn't he say he grew up in the dream? If he did and he has a job, than how the hell has he never needed a name?
5304726 Nope, it's german
5304735 I had the idea, that nopony ever really called him by name, so he forgot what his name was. But I'm rewriting it anyway, so I could think something out for that.
This is what was going through my mind when I was reading this chapter: