Keith came to Equestria unknowingly, and as one bad decision led to another, he ended up stealing the catalyst to his reign of villainy.
He didn't want to go this far.
Not like the stone he stole will let him go back though.
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Much villainy.
Such wowe.
I approve!
Well, the first big mistake was probably jumping out at Spike and deliberately trying to scare him. Prior to that, everything might have been attributed to a series of misunderstandings. Still, even then, the situation was recoverable. Then came the frying pan of doom...
And then Frying Pan II: Rainbow Dashed...
And then Frying Pan III: Discord's Gambit...
At the rate Keith is going, his name might soon end up as feared as those of Tirok, Grogar, or Sombra!
Not bad but it seems a bit rushed to me. Overall it had promise. May Khrone guide you in battle.
Call the frying pan: The Pony Panquisher?
3942935 Yea, I will admit it was rushed. I sorta wrote it all during the course of two days of being trapped in snow. Thanks for the feedback anyway
3942613 so comment, very response
3942688 Never under estimate the power of the frying pan. And in his defense, suddenly finding a human in your house would be scary as hell anyway.
3943516 That pun...... I like it
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I only found two mistakes but I have no idea what they were, only that my brain is telling me that there were two.
Also, fancyayancey.files.wordpress.com/2012/04/shiiiiiiiiiiiiiit-nigga.jpg
I really have to stop putting up pictures with the word 'nigga' in them. I'm not even black
He needs to find a way to bind himself to the stone, make sure he can't lose his powers.
And for my next trick, I will need a volunteer...
You also say theft when you should be saying thief. There is one other mistake as well, some word that needs an S later on in the chapter.
3958297 That's strange, it seems like he can't lose the stone as is.
Breath is singular, breathe is the action and breathes is the multiple. I didn't notice any other errors though.
3962762 it's the oldest plot device in the book: villain draws all his power from an ancient artifact, then it gets destroyed or stolen by the hero.
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3962762 thanks! Time to make some edits it seems.
3962777 How do I respond to this without spoiling it......
....maybe, maybe not,
3962777 it is an old plot device, but he still has no reason to suspect that it will be taken away.
It's kinda stuck to him right now after all... but if somepony cut off his right hand he would be screwed.
3962859 he's probably got basic logistic skills. And knowing know Celestia was reacting, they would cut it off in an instant.
Frying pan?
How very... Conker of you.
Hmm. This breaks with the usual kind of LoHAV protagonist. Whether that will lead to an interesting story remains to be seen.
3973357 you can only copy paste the same villain so many times. Hope you enjoy the ride of the story, cause Im certainly enjoying writing it
Also I misread your name as the snipe sniper so... yeah
3973419
It is good to mix things up every once in a while; just don't expect readers to connect with your protagonist as easily as they do with the other protagonists.
3975590 Honestly, I'd rather have readers following and enjoying my story while I'm writing it the way I want instead of using some crossover.
I don't care if I get overlooked by some readers due to what I've chosen as a main character cause I'm honestly just enjoying the process of writing.
Oh, and new chapter should be out later this night~
3976477 Please do not get the wrong idea. I am not trying to convince you to change your story or plans. Rather, I am noting that you have far more work to do, as compared to the other writers in the LoHAV group, if you want people to sympathize with your character.
3976490 Yea, I'll admit that its true, but this the story and character I wanted to write so I'm fine with it. Sorry if I sounded defensive or something.
Darn it, change his name! It's not scary!
'Keith'...ew...eh 'Watch out for Keith!'
3978392 Gimmea sec, lemme think, how about "darth keith" or the "keith, destrory of worlds"
....does it work? Not really.
Though I guess Im not really attatched to the name keith, though changing it this far in the story also means changing it in the cross over and changing it in other things
Oh well, I'll highly consider having him begin to refer to himself as some evil nick name or something, any suggestions? (Question is open to anyone that wants to)
3978509
I like it!
when you here about a dangerous guy and his name is Keith, you feel like he cant do much becuase of his name.
but when he shows up, he's like the size of the devil himself, and shoots lazers from his eyes
3978509 Killer Keith?
I think Keith is a fine name...
And then he was eaten. But since we can't end it so quickly, let's do a bit more possession.
Also, master of wolves is a good name. Not very evil sounding without context, but still fitting. Beware of Keith, Master of Wolves.
3981543 Nope, the next chapter is just 10,000 words describing the proccess of getting eaten by a wolf.
3978707 I'm so tempted to make that shooting lasers from eyes and being giant as hell actually apart of the story.....
3979508 Keith is a fine name sorta, I guess
Killer keith....
Killer Keith cut kenny quickly
3981866
do it Mr/Ms. Author
3981866 Mmm. My favourite. So I take it you are interested in those ways as well?
"He came from the woods, they say, already meaner than mean,
"Just took what he wanted, as if it were free.
"Knowpony knew what he wanted, just where he'd been.
"Which is how Twilight found him, in her home in the tree"
"Oooooooooh oh!
"Big Bad Keith!"
"As big as he was, you wouldn't think he'd move fast,
"But he laid Twilight flat just before she could cast.
"That set off Miss Dash, the Weather Captain.
"But he laid her out too, with an old frying pan!"
"Oooooooooh oh!
"Big Bad Keith!"
"From the books that he took, we figured his plot,
"Would lead him sooner or later, to Canterlot.
"A trap was set, and he was certainly caught.
"We thought it was over, but unfortunately not."
"Oooooooooh oh!
"Big Bad Keith!"
"How Keith got out of the dungeons and into the vault,
"Knowpony has yet figured just who was at fault.
"We thought he was cornered, there was no way out.
"But Keith wouldn't go down without a bout."
"Oooooooooh oh!
"Big Bad Keith!"
"They were some of our finest, the brave and the bold.
"The kind of ponies of whom stories are told.
"But when a platoon of High Guard put themselves to the test.
"Keith sent twenty-one soldiers to their permanent rest."
"Oooooooooh oh!
"Big Bad Keith!"
"Oooooooooh Oh!
"Big Bad Keith!"
Rainbow Dash: "Wait... That's all I get? A line and a half and laid out by a pan?"
Twilight Sparkle:
The Ballad of Big Bad Keith (incomplete)
3981866 spelling mistake!
*gem*
3994190 I laughed so Hard I started crying, thank you.
3995449 ....I feel dumb for making that mistake. Thanks for catching it for me!
3995841 Glad you like it.
Now imagine it being sung like a Jonny Cash song...
Oh no... no violence this chapter... whatever shall I do?
Burn it, get the whip, let him know the consequences. ..
He should till go after another artifact.
4009423
4009423 you obviously just aren't one of the ones suffering from the condition of gratuitous fanfiction violence withdrawel.
Its a very serious issue.
4009452 don't tempt me. Seriously, don't, I'm likely to end up doing it.
4009775 Mind being my meat shield against him for a bit?
4010887 help! Help! Police brutalaty!
Vera never answered his question at the end of the chapter...
Update?
3996188 Jimmy Dean, that way it comes across as "Big Bad John"
wouldn't work out as well with Johnny Cash
so exactly WHEN did Twilight get the back bone to actually TRY to harm another being? she simply just does not have the guts
I'm happy to see more of this story
Ahh the clopping, it is such a musical masterpiece.
As for the end of the summer update, you already did most of the things in the middle of the summer and you are left with boredom as you wait for school to resume.
N3ED MORE NOW
I actually stumbled across this story by chance, so far it's an incredibly good story that I quite enjoy
This....this is a bruh moment. I'm pretty bummed out that a pretty good story has been unofficially cancelled on us, and I hope the author's doing alright.