Jacob was an average person, he had a part time job, went to university, the usual. Then one day, after driving home from another lecture, he found himself suddenly thrown into another world. A world where humans were nothing more than brute beasts, and the dominant species were technicolour ponies.
Sold as property to an experimental magical weapons designer, his master, mistaking him for just a slightly smarter human, performed an experiment on Jacob, greatly increasing his intelligence, at a cost of some of his morality. Jacob finds in himself a new purpose, to free the humans of Equus of whatever curse they're under.
But as he takes more and more drastic measures in his quest, Jacob must wonder, in saving the humans of Equus, is letting go of his own humanity?
A non canon side-story based on the story Your Human And You by MadMaxtheBlack which I seriously recommend checking out if you haven't already
so its planet of the apes........... except with ponies.............. my thought processes haves stopped.
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Isn't that what basically every Your Human and You story amounts to?
3839425 first one that seems ot outright take those characteristics outright in my experience. most of them has the human being the only human ever seen.
of course the norm is that human of interest dies and some how ends up in equistrai someway.
whatever your opinion of Equistrai girls, at the very fucking least it gave a better idea than death equals a trip to equistria.
Cant wait for the next chapter my man. This is great.
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Saying that he tried to run forward is enough, as the verb already implies rapidity, therefor, rendering the word "quickly" redundant. It is similar to saying; "As soon as Pinkie Pie's front hooves managed to circumvent my sides, she proceeded to relentlessly tickle away at my unprotected belly. I buckled and clamped down hard on my tongue but could only resist for a mere second before I burst into an uncontrollable fit of chuckling laughter ".
Repeating words with similar meanings and using them in support of the same clause can disrupt the flow of your text because it forces the reader to repeat the same action/feeling/thought over again in their heads, much like a lagging image on a tv screen. While one or two instances of this may not even be picked up by readers, if you end up allowing it to pass, you might just find yourself using it with enough regularity in later chapters to cause annoyance.
That aside, I like what you have thus far, I'll be watching this.
3842027 Thanks, fixing now
Please, ensure that dialogue from several people aren't in the same paragraph.
This is really good. At first i thought "oh no another dumb, dry, and boing human story" but this great. KEEP GOINGGGG
Yay a new chapter. This is the best spin off I have read and can't wait for a new chapter.
Yes another awesome chapter. Great job.
3843367 tisk tisk, well aren't you picky
Yay! SCIENCE!
3839483 He said;
not;
and yes there is a difference. Human in Equestria is a general type of story and Your Human and You is a specific story which established this universe and spawned a series of spin offs... including this one.
Saying this?
That's like saying this is the first story to be characterized by technicolor ponies in a magical land called Equestria.
This is just one of eighteen spin-offs of Your Human and You.
Mhm more ponies ruling over HUMANS AKA Predators
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3901286 right this is bad
I really hate this prick (Star Shine)
Star Shine, being a prick sense 1995
It looks about time for our earthern friend to escape
REVENGE!
Loving the chapter keep it up
Well... I dont have any idea what to say apart from, that got.dark real fast. I LIKE IT!!!
over reacting!!!!
FEELS! and the monsters they make and break aw man...
ok calming DOWN NOW!!! god I bet that sick unicorn not the only one to do these experiments on his people crazy tools of war to just cuz crazy feaks of natures jazz mad science or magic experiments that twilight uses like tranformation crazy 
and the other who do it in the name of society of multiple species on this world.....
cough! sorry... im good now.
wow that mentality doesn't happen over night! I bet he finds proof that other bad ponies are out there experimented on humans from....to on there... and other cruel things...... o god!!!!!!
Now he just needs to toss her into the fire and it may be dismissed as Lightwing rushing in to try to save Shine and getting burned alive for the effort.
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This can be used for almost anything, including this.
Another great chapter.
Shit. Dude. That was intense
I hope this gets another chapter soon, I am liking where this is going...
Yeah don't like it. Killing the mare was kind of shit so I am done with this story now
I might not like the mare being killed but she would have told them and ruin everything probably would of been glad to help and relived he dead and wouldn't feel to bad since he was a human a dangerous derange human that needed to be put down by the gaurds this story got it dark tag for a reason
4995884 That would probably be for the best as I don't intend on this story getting much brighter. Sorry you don't like that though
4996185 Not your fault mate it is merely a conflict of likes. I wish you the best