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Good writing. Quite an interesting idea. And yes, dark is correct. But apart from Berry Punch killing ponies and drinking their blood its a fair story. Good work.
334394 Thanks. This is my first stab at dark and I was expecting much harsher words. Thank you for giving me your feedback.
Haven't read it yet, marking it as a track, but where did you get your artwork?
334461tumblr. I found it by googling Berry Punch creepy. I believe it's the first picture. it will lead you straight to a tumblr account. Hope this helps!
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I was just wondering if you had a person do it for you, because I hate using other people's content.
334492 I wish i had those kind of connections but I sadly don't. I honestly want to start drawing my cover art for myself instead of taking images but I'm not as good a drawer as I am a writer.
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I'm in a similar predicament. I've always been a pretty good writer, but my drawing skills have always been lacking.
It was pretty good the only problem I had was that it was just cupcakes but you know with out all of the obivious stuff. But Its still a good story non the less
also dark yes but im not sure if its grim dark all she really did as tourter was break her legs and stomp on her I think you could have so much farther with the tourter aspect but then again I can see that being difficult because berrys is only trying to make a drink out of her so it wasnt needed as with pinkie pie actully haveing to tourter her victims before she baked them into cupcakes all in all I give it a 5/5
I know I've said this a million times already, but 334523 you never disappoint!
Good lord, dark indeed. 2 things. The plot is very similar to Cupcakes, so that's a little bit of a downer, and it's pretty short. That being said, it's written very well, and was a fun little read!
Wow, I have to say I'm impressed
I mean, for your first shot at grimdark, this is...REALLY GRIMDARK. I really love how descriptive you are with these sort of things, I could almost put myself in Lyra's position because of how well everything is described. My only complaint however (and I don't seem to be the only one who thinks so) is that it's not the most original concept. Obvious allusions to cupcakes aside, I really did enjoy this story very much
berry punch is a character not often represented in grimdark, and you captured her inclusion and character in a very interesting way
can't wait to see more from you!
Cupcakes, rainbows, parchment, fabric, glue and now wine. There's no end to the possibilities.
So I finally got around to reading it, and I really liked it. Maybe this is just the disturbed inhabitant of the internet that is inside me, but it could have used more gore. Maybe I'm just desensitized, but I just didn't get the same feeling other stories give me. Don't get wrong, It was disgusting, just not disgusting enough, but good nonetheless.