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Ooooooohhhhh, Lyra and Bonbon shipping. My favorite.
LyraBon and drunk Twilight - I'm officially tracking up in this bitch.
So far there has been nothing I don't like here! Lyra and Bon-Bon are two of my favourites, I loved the Rarity/Twi/Pinkie interaction in this chapter too.
Great writing. Definite track.
furzt
Carefull the chocolates have a "true-feelings" spell on them, love is going to ensue. Bon-bon/Lyra always together *sigh*. Lunaughty found 'Melodie's Midnight Mares', no colts allowed. So 'Insomnia' is competition, sort of? Luna is a silent partner in both too? Tracking!
Drunk Twilight is best Twilight
Looking forward to the next chapter! It's strange, reading a fanfic about Derpy where she doesn't have Dinky.
ehh Lyra smiled weakly, prying herself from the unicorn. eh?
You might wanna fix that one.
Otherwise, another nice chapter
183355 Changed, thanks for pointing it out.
Any other mistakes don't hesitate to let me know.
A nice toughing chapter leading into the next. I'm sure Dinky will be back soon. :lunasmile:
Steps i took after reading this
1> TRACK
2> RATE 5/5 STARS
3> FAVORITE
4> DDOS THE CHAPTERS WITH ANONYMOUS IP
Just kidding on the fourth one
THIS IS GOOD
Yay for adorable friendshipping!
Lyra is best pony, no doubt.
this shit's cool
i like cool shit
this is like playing DoW: Retribution as a space marine and having your whole team die on Last Stand mode and then singlehandedly violating enemy wave 20 ON YOUR FUCKING OWN
lol
Hee, those last two chapters are lovely! At first heartwarming and then sexy, quite an interesting combination!
Awwwwwwh That was way to short. More horn foreplay and such. Quick write me another scene. NOOOOOOOOO it's over. :lunasad:
187250 I was writing more about the intimacy the two share rather than the act itself. Also it makes sense how short it was seeing as how Lyra had been away from Bon Bon for days and at how tired she was therefore, it wouldn't take a lot to set her off. That's why I only wrote about Bon Bon pleasuring, for the lack of a better word, Lyra. It's just the way I look at the story as a whole; this isn't some clopfic, I'm writing about a real relationship and all aspects about it as you will see in later chapters. There's going to some real emotion and real obstacles coming up so there's more to this story than the 'Mature-rated prejudice' it receives.
PS. Next chapters will be up very soon
A few errors, but this chapter makes for some nice exposition.
Looking forward to the next one.
Oh Lyra, don't you mess it up for yourself!
Pleeeeease just be going to talk to the Derpster!
So far i've only read the first chapter, the first thing that occurred me after reading this was, that even though you establish a strong relationship between the two mane characters, they themself have not very distinct characters. the only thing we know about them so far is that they missed each other hardly. Another thing i noticed is that the relationship you try to present expresses itself by the physical interactions between the two mane characters. Though this is how relationships express themselfs to third parties, you need to establish an emotional basis first by describing the characters that are in this relationship.
Nevertheless i'm going to read at least the second chapter, not an extraordinarily outstanding story so far, but not a bad one either.
Miniature walls of text!!!
203819 Sorted thanks.
If you guys see any errors please let me know. After looking at the same walls of text for days you tend to miss the errors. My inner Grammar Nazi is nicht glücklich (not happy).
This chapter really took it out of me. I spent days coming up with a back story for the two and a lot of it was not used. This was really tricky and to be honest, I'm not 100% happy with it which is gutting considering the sleepless nights I spent writing the thing.
As usual constructive criticism is always appreciated and the next chapter will be up as soon as I finish the next chapter for my other fic.
"Goodbye my love." "I'll never be good enough for you." Woo Awesome you need a hug. I doubt anyone writing this could be 100% happy. Things will get better. You just need to be with friends.
204407 Oh no, you misunderstand. I had no trouble writing the emotional, heavy stuff. The chapter as a whole was a pain to integrate. At first it was just a Lyra-centric chapter, then it was Bon Bon-centric, then it was 7,000 words long and a mess, then there was no emotional back story etc. That went on for days before I, as explained on my blog, just gave up.
Although it was quite heart-wrenching to write. I had to watch a lot of emotional scenes to get the right tone and whatnot, hopefully it wasn't too cheesy for you guys. But it does not reflect any situation I am currently in however, thank you for your concern and internetz hugz.
But manly tears were nearly shed. To quote Woody Harrelson; "I haven't cried like that since Titanic."
Man, this is a great story so far mate. Keep up the good work
Great story so far. The only error that really stood out to me this chapter was:
“It’s the thought of loving another person after your fiancé.”
Assuming you meant to write pony instead of person.
Nice story brah
You actually hit the exactly right buttons to make this a great story; emotional, yet entertaining
As always; I love a good story of love, and for once to actually see Bon Bon being the "Top-mare" instead of that position being given to Lyra, is quite entertaining. Damn Lyra can be cute at times
I'm tracking this
-Glassed
Thank you for the kind words guys, it's making me feel less disheartened about that last chapter. I'm glad so many people are enjoying this fic. Again, any errors pointed out and criticism are welcome.
212549 In the show I've always felt that Bon Bon held a more assertive personality whereas Lyra was more emotional but then again, the evidence to support this is minimal and composed of a few scenes with little dialogue. The main influence of their ponysona is that I tried to do a different take on the LyraBon pairing and lead on from there.
Finally got around to reading this. I enjoyed it a lot. They really came across as the most sappy couple ever which is pretty adorable
. The cloppy scenes could have been drawn out more though.
Fantastic chapter! I loved the backstories.
I cant wait to read the next one!
Just fantastic. The best Lyra and Bonbon ship I've read. Very good job
Lyra and Bon Bon. Plus... do I detect the subtle but unmistakable sweet taste of Twinkie shipping with third-wheel Rarity action? I like how this is coming along.
Reading this fic is the second best thing that happened in my entire whole useless life.
The first best thing is MLP:FiM
I really love the way you used insertions, and not going with the ol' chronological method
I'm really too lazy to give any real feedback now..
Keep up the good work! a.deviantart.net/avatars/t/w/twilightclapplz.gif
It's official.
This fiction verse's Lyra is in need of some major counseling.
OMG this was so sad
but also a good advance in the story too. I really look forward to the next chapter. I really hope Lyra will be okay. Great read as ever 
So Lyra is in an isolated area with a serious hoof injury, who's going to save her?
Dang it! Why would you end it like that?!
I kid, of course. Very good chapter. I look forward to more soon.
Why did I get the random thought that she is going to sprout hands...
OK I read too many pony fics for my own good
Author deserves hugs
371093 SPOILER ALERT Crackle.
Now you've ruined it for everyone else
382181 'Tis the reason why I don't read the comments before I read the story. Speaking of; I'm heavily looking forward to the next chapter. Now, wtf happened to my track button!?
While I was reading: "A necklace? Why not a ring?!..........................
8th comment is mine!
MOAR
YO! Is there going to be a new chapter anytime soon? I really want to conttinue this story.
iv delt with dunks, prolly the funnyist thing iv read.
loved the part when pinky said that she was being taken advantage of 
berry: oh damn...
lyra: i hate it when people, or in this case ponys, think that they diserve the pain, it makes me feel bad... 
Halp!
There aren't any moar chapters of this!
Only you can prevent Derpy from swearing off muffins!