Vinyl travels the world to spin the wheels of steel. Octavia takes her skills as a cellist to wherever her orchestra needs to. They've been rooting for each other's success for near a decade, finding that the more they achieve, the more packed their schedules become, leaving little time for them to hang as they did when they first met. To remedy this, they decided to start a blog just for the two of them to share their thoughts, feelings and experiences as they work to achieve bigger and better things in their industry. What will they learn learn about each other when it comes time to put digital pen to paper? What they learn from each other about what it means to live? How will this shape the course of their relationship?(from the Rainbow 8 universe iteration of their characters)
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I love this idea, I can't wait for more!
Wow, that last sentence. O_O
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Originally, I wanted to give them names, but since this is a dialogue heavy scene, it would look like a script. And the rules do not shine kindly on script like formats
Quite some time for an update, I'll say.
All the same, keep it up. I like how this shows the two of them growing up together and showing how their friendship grew in the future.
3937859 I actually had a lot of this done after the previous entry, but I didn't want to post to quickly from my usual once a week pace. Because of that, as well as the time and consideration I felt the subject of bullying deserved, it ended up being both taking longer to write, and longer to polish than my usual entries in this format. In the future, I might consider splitting them into parts, if it grows beyond the usual 1200-1500 word range, in order to not ground the flow of updates to a halt too often *laughs*
3943290 Wasn't aware I could on this site. Everytime I try, it comes out weird(I also post these on mobile, on occasion, which makes it a bit harder to do)
3969638 I once wrote a 1000 word essay on a smartphone, so I know it's possible. I also know, however, that it doesn't lend to excellent grammar
seams like it should be
'which drew the most tender smile I've seen from her yet'
what you used says that vinyl hasn't seen said tender smile. while the second says its the most tender smile she's seen so far.
4003630 Hmm, didn't think about it that way before. Something to consider for future works
If only I could give this another upvote...
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I take it that means you like it? May I ask what you enjoy about it?
4045371 It offers viewpoints from the two of them growing up.
It's hard to put a fine point on it, but it's something that just pulls me into it.
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As someone who's met people from different social strata and different walks of life, I think it's important for others to recognize that no matter where we come from, what we hold true or how rich we are, within each of us lies the capacity to bleed, cry and fart. Part of why I choose to continue with the project is to illustrate how people from these different social strata and walks of life can connect on a meaningful level, and see each other as they are, not just what others perceive about them based on hearsay
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You did not. May I ask what you enjoy about it?
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How so?
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Originally I wanted to break it into chunks, but it didn't feel right, considering the journey I felt Vinyl had to take to learning how be a better person and a better friend. I only hope that journey reflected well
I certainly like how you portrayed Octavia, here. She did lose a lot of Vinyl's trust years before this.
(Hell, what am I saying? She said so herself; she threw it away in their fight.)
Trust between friends is something that is very hard not just to earn, but to keep as well. I may not have met as many diverse and wonderful people as you have, but I can certainly say that their trust is something I am greatly thankful for.
Keep going. I certainly await Vinyl's piece on her first... when the glasses come off.
4361100 May I ask what you liked about her?
4363674 The fact that you portray her as a young woman, who can be morally broken as much as the next, instead of some of the slightly snooty portrayals I have seen in the past.
Yes, she's upper class, but she can be hurt just as much as another. This was shown in this chapter, when she felt feelings for an old friend, and before she could say a thing... Boom!! Blown out of the water.
That's what I like: you keep the characters and yet can keep them as normal as the next person on the block.
Like I said, keep going. I'll be waiting for every update.
Really in love with this story.
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To me, one of the keys of quality character writing is that no matter who they are or what they do, they are living, breathing beings with their own thoughts, feelings and personal history fueling everything they do. Portraying them as one dimensional caricatures is an insult to both the character and the reader. All of us bleed, cry and fart the same, each of us shaped by our place in society, the people we meet, and the choices we make. Our emotions and reactions make us all human in a way, even if we aren't human, and that is something I feel must reflect in a character
4378705 And that is a good reason why I hate I can't give this another up-vote. It definitely deserves more than it has, and I kinda hate that a little.
Keep writing until you believe it should be finished. I'll be sad when that happens, but I'll be following it towards the end it deserves.
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If you'd like to help get this up there, be sure to tell your friends, share it with folks you know that're into this stuff, and generally get the word out. Proactive fans are fans authors and other creatives have much love for
As for this ending, this was created primarily for me to explore the dynamics of different social issues, class warfare and what it means to become an adult, so until I run out of crap to explore/things to say through the characters, I don't see this stopping anytime soon
My friend... you had me going to tears when he left her. You really did, and I thought I was sad when Octavia almost tried drugs a few chapters back.
But, like before, things did work out in the end for her. For them both, in this and that earlier chapter.
Now... Octavia as an online gamer??? Oh, this I NEED to see!!
4417933 4417462 Mm. My research has revealed that many of the dramatic falling outs associated with being a junkie are often only from a fractionally small section of heroin's users, the majority using it as was originally intended when the US Army made it for military use: to keep them amped, give them a boost, and get them out in the field far longer than someone normally should be. It's something seen in both Wal Mart workers and corporate executives alike when they need to pull long hours with little sleep.
Also, did some minor revisions to the story and added a link to the letter Vinyl was talking about! Do check it out, and let me know what you think! I promise you'll see Octavia as differently as Vinyl did after reading
"So I was talking to someone I spar with at the gym, when she brings up my best friend, and how I feel like I don't chat with her as much as I should."
So the Egg head is telling Vinyl how Vinyl feels? I think this sentence could have been worded better.
One thing about this story is that it's written in First Person View. I'm not sire how I would character froze Vinyl, but your chosen fiction seems to be consistent throughout the text, as well as with you chosen personality. While I'm not sire it's the most accurate dialect, it works in the story nonetheless.
I could point out some misuses in punctuation and wordplay, but those are minor details. I'm just going to advise you that form now on in your writing, you may want to be more careful where you use commas. Also, I think there are a couple of points where you probably left out a word by mistake. That's just simple proof reading.
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I tend to do that on my first drafts. I will revisit the pieces, and see what other adjustments need to be made
This sounds pretty good.
6584041 Thank you, sir! I hope you enjoy the rest of the entries, as well as the ones in the works!