When a brony gets sucked into the very world he became obsessed with, he is in way over his head. Equipped with the speed and raw strength of a bulldozer and camaros baby, he becomes BA after some practice and begins dominating Equestrias darkest menaces.
Takes place in the chess game of the gods universe, but is non canon.
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its good
Really, you censored the cuss words? Don't even do that, just don't use them at all. Censoring makes you look like some sort of wimp.
im wondering if fluttershy would hug the fur off of him or hide for her life.
Hm, interesting start of a story.
A bit fast paced imo, atleast in this chapter.
The intro was nice, gave us a good bit of info on his life, and what had happened up to that point.
Good explanation of how he looks, then again, the picture helps aswell on the front page.
Saw several places where you either missed some words to complete several sentences, or had typed something wrong. Nothing major imo, but this can drag down peoples opinion of the story. Grammar nazis and all that jazz, you know?
As said earlier, a bit fast paced. He quickly went from wandering aimlessly in the frozen wastes to getting to the city, then getting some gear for his continued journey. But that is just my opinion.
All in all, a good start of a story. Is going to be interesting to see where you will take this.
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I think she might try to do both at the same time.
Does he have access to berserk rage?....I mean,He's a ape,He should theoretically be able to tap into berserk mode
3582248 something like that
If you want to quote it right, do an Austrian accent. Schwarzenegger is not German
3584596 Oh sweet Celestia is that embarrasing
Goliath meets the Neverending Stairs.
3585519 He'd probably solve it with the aforementioned beserker rage
He needs to hunt evil monsters that live in the frozen north, and while he's at it he runs into an expedition team of explorers and finds hidden frozen treasure.
A.K.A. he meets Daring Doo.
That's all I got for ideas.
3585519 he would just drop down them several at a time. Gorillas can do that.
3585641I already have something of the like in mind.
Not daring do tho. Feel free to make guesses at who it is. Theyve already met.
3586937
Flash Sentry!
DUN DUN DUUUUUUUN!!!!
Or the Griffon, not sure which... Maybe both?
3586937 If you do use Flash Sentry im gonna spam u with hate mail so hard
3588289 What? Seriously? Why the hate for pony flash?
HE didnt do anything wrong. It's human flash that deserves hate. And I am definitely keeping out of shipping territory while rescuing twilight.
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3588316 Seriously? What are you five?
What happened to using tabs?
Also, this seems to be going well but the ending was a little rushed...
Furthermore, I was right in guessing that Flash Sentry would be there.
As for an idea, I know you said in the comments no shipping, but how about you do have Flash try to make a move on Twilight but every time he does Goliath intervenes since he dislikes the idea. XD
Twilight could even know about it and just find it funny.
I mean, she likes the human one, not the pony one.
I'd be funny and a great way to show how much you hate that shipping! :D
3588679 I love it
3589094
Cock block for the win!!! XD
Wait,This guy could theoretically be Errol Flynn and Legolas at the same time?,I mean,Four arms,Two for a pair of custom sabres (Think the sword style from assassins creed 4),And beasting with a custom bow with the other pair of arms.....Or just grab two pairs of the aformentioned swords
3591146 Im sorry but I don't know who your talking about.
3591480 Leglolas is the archer elf guy from the lord of the rings that seems to honestly be able to beat the universe,And Errol flynn was the founding father of theatric sword fighting (Think of either pirate movie sword fights,Or inotherwords,making it seems more intresting,and involving alot of sword on sword clashing)
3591537 I am soon to address the fact he has absolutely no clue how to use any of his weapons. So don't go calling him op quite yet.
3591794 i was merely suggesting a plausible thing for him to train at,I mean,Why bother with link,If you can carry all of the four sword and use it by yourself?
Again,He's a purely physical beserker,Hand him a ring of anti-magic
3603757
b-b-but, that was meant to be a surprise 
Does this mean me plot is too predictable?
3604501 Wait,are you joking or not? Because frankly,Handing the Pure melee,no magic unit the immunity to magic ring,Honestly makes them a allmost perfect fighter (Guns,and other ranged weapons will still tear him a new arsehole though)
That was kinda the point
And yet another hero.
Really getting tired of this. You get pulled into candy land, you get strength, and you protect communism because "adorable ponies". You bloody heroes make me sick.
3730472 okay the other parts I understand but communism is kinda outta left field
3730755
Yes, I may have pulled that out of the top of my head, but the point is still there:
No more 'heroes', I say!
3730769 sorry, but it's a basic and important archetype that would leave you without a proper story arc. And I guarantee you tere will be other archetypes appearing in this story so go and write what you wanna write but leave the normal writers out of it. Btw gol will be getting more violent And less of a good guy as the story progresses. I have yet to add all appropriate tags.
3730784
Oh.
Well, good.
3730784 He gets a wee bit corrupted by the power his new form brings?
*Read this in the voice of an angry old Japanese guy*
No Spoiler for you. Go now.
3580458 Hug the life out of him while hiding in his fur