It lives?!?

4287190 sometimes you gotta be crazy to play for real but I see where your coming from and about the fic, I don't have time to edit the beginning, I tend to get less spelling errors as I keep stacking the ch.s, do you by any chance want to edit it for me? BTW if you want to, you gotta teach me how to let you in safest cause I am a noob.

4287378 yep been busy lately, the summer will accelerate my writing but the quality will be maintained

so Blake is going to be a commando/mechomancer?
He's going to have his own Deathtrap.
fun times will be had

hot damn, it got more BADASS fucking epic, hope to see what happens next

4289546 oh you haven't seen nothing yet >:)

4289584 can't wait to see

This story, I like it...

4337768 This is how I feel when I write this

4337774

Also, badass Twilight is badass

Still need to work on grammar though, sometime I found missing letters or someword I don't understand

4350010 In the later chapters my quality in writing this improves (You'll notice this especially during clop), and I have no time to edit my earlier chapters. I need to get an editor to straighten the exposition especially, while maintaining the ideas in it.

More!! Need MORE BADASS TWI!!
Now that I've got that out of my system...dude I can't wait till they get to Equestria. Hopefully with all their gear!!
Also...can you imagine the Royal Wedding, if that hasn't happened yet, what Twilight will do to that Changling Queen whatsherface??

4350688 you haven't seen nothing yet. hehehe, you won't see it coming

Just rereading this story of badassness...and I noticed two things that bug me. I'm pretty sure one of the two is unavoidable but still slightly irksome.
Anyway the progression in the relationship between Twi and...damn I already forgot his name...wow. Anyway I think it happened way too fast...but then again this is Pandora where you walk side-by-side with Death...so I guess you just got to grasp that happyness wherever you find it.

Another thing is the story has just progressed way too damn fast! Seriously in like fourteen chapters you're about three quarters the way through the entire game! I'm sorry but I find it slightly jarring for whatever reason. You should have Twi and whathisface doing the side missions and just screwing around (and no that isn't a hint for more sexytimes).

You know after they find the Vault you could have them return to Pandora to do the DLC (like Captan Scarlett and her Pritie Booty and such)! Or maybe the Vault they have has a portion of a device that allows them to return to Equestria and they need to do the DLC quests to further complete the device!

But serious despite my gripes this is an awesome story and probably the first MLP/Borderlands cross I've ever read! Well ignoring the Minion of the Night that is. Still great story and can't wait for more!

4352779 I know lol, I had the ideas when I started this, though it came out noobish for my first few. Now that I have learned from criticism and praises of the story, the later chaps will just be the beginning. I have planned to write a Destiny 4 player co-op (that may change) Fimfic and I promise, I'll be Five times the badass I was. .

I will promise to make chapters twice or four times as long w/out degrading my original quality in the future, (Ch. 15 has over 7,000 already)

4368507 well I am sure you'll soon know what it'll mean when it has OMFC in it, still working on my ch. 15 still (8,000 words, not even halfway finished i think.) So what side missions do you want to see? BTW I didn't play the DLCs so I may have to make my own awesome stories in Equestria

Sorry for the long wait everyone, my next chapter is taking longer than expected (12,000 words! My hooves!). Just to tell you I am about three fourths of the way done so cha!

STILL FUCKING LOVE IT AND HOPE YOU KEEP UP WITH YO BADASSNESS!!!!!!!

4416747 thanks, about 3/4s of the way done (I think), over 13,000, *ow* my hooves for Ch. 15

4416789 when do u think you'll come out with destiny one

4420216 2 weeks after the end of the BETA, I may actually make it a six-player co-op story

4420776 With how your writing this one, Its going to be FUCKING AWSOME!!!!!

Can You tell me what the tags r gonna be for Destiny will be and wher did u get your profile pic?

Its SICK AS FUCK

4421981 just type in "Pony Ninja" into google images and you'll find it, I think. I find a lot of badass stuff that way. And also for the Destiny Tags... I'll PM u it.

4423249 thanks man. your awsome

4423426 also here's a nice pic of derpy if you want to use this as a pro pic:twilight.ponychan.net/chan/fic/src/133250232721.png

4426204 thanks man

Just thought I'd reread this...nothing better to do really.
Anyway I just was wondering...how's Twi going to handle readjusting to a no-meat diet in equestria?
Also, and I serious doubt I'm getting any spoilers but I must ask, who else is going to be in the relationship with Blake?
It would've been awesome if Pinkie came with Twi, just saying. Imagine Pinkie becoming a hardened killer like depicted in the Ask Pinkamena Diane Pie tumblr sounds badass. And between all the Mane Six I also think Pinkie's the biggest freak...if ya know what I mean *giggity*!

4437240 I won't just make Pinkie Pie badass

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Also a certain someone (or pony) is closer than you'd think

i was wondering whens the next chapter going to be out?

4478207 sorry about the long wait, I had finals week, but I am almost finished since it is summer, yeeeee haaaaw

4479262 its alright dude i was just curious.

4479262 you better be fucking finishing this its so bad its good

this twilight is fucking hilarious

also if you are still righting this are you planing on using twilight's rapidash mode at some point in the story

4439210 come on we all no its flutters

4496086 gotcha

When will Blake propose?

Just reread this.
Can't wait for the next chapter!

Yo man, whats been going on? Also whens the next chapter gonna be?

4937646 Damn straight it is!!
Sad maybe, but definitely a good thing.

This promised to be interessting. I putt this on my read later list.

Fucking love the story so when's the next chapter

4439210

Also a certain someone (or pony) is closer than you'd think.

Oh! Oh! Is it Queen Butt Stallion?

Chapter 15 please? Can I have somemore of this awesome story?? Please???

4350251 UPDATE ALREADY PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

5035927 untz untz untz untz untz I think I lost the beat but untz untz untz untz untz

6031325 this was an amateur attempt to practice writing and creativity, but I took it seriously nonetheless and had fun doing so. Despite the personally bad rhetoric, you can find some fun in the story if you like this kind of flavor of characterization.

My main attention is going into a totally new fiction, deriving the elements that made this one great ideologically and professionalize it, so whatever critiques, suggestions, or inspirations you have from this read will help.

Gotta admit, I was expecting more. Starting the story, only to be thrust into it with not even a little bit of prior character development? No prologue, no intro, just the body.

I was extremely confused, and still am. A dilemma that might be resolved if I kept reading... But, judging off the start, that doesn't seem likely.

I'm not trying to be real mean here, but just a bit of advice?
Just like people subconsciously make an opinion of others in the first 15 seconds they see them, people will make an opinion of a story within the first few paragraphs.

The description of the story has to grip the reader and pull them in, get them to start reading. The only reason I got interested in this was the fact that it was a crossover, but even with that I forgot about it for a long time. The intro or prologue, however, keeps them there and slowly reels the reader in. The intro has to set the scene and introduce the main character, give them a personality and a brief background. A prologue is similar, however, instead it only needs to retell events that have, or will, happen. But, it needs to make sense and be relevant to the story.

What you've got here, does set a scene, but it's a bit confusing, it needs a little bit more description, and the character has no personality, no background. The readers know nothing by the time they start reading, and that's a bad thing. The readers should at least know a little bit, giving a sense of stability, however tiny. You've thrust Twilight and this character into the story, without setting up what happened beforehand, in other words.

The questions that come to mind for me are:
What happened before he woke up here?
What happened before Twilight ended up there?
What caused them to end up there?

Even subtle hints work well at providing answers.

6031356 Update?!?!?!?!?!?

Just like galactus I WANT MOAR!!!

6753669 Yeah... I want MOAR too but I'm starting to feel like we'll never get MOAR...